[@YamiNoNeko2341]
If you could put a space between the colon and the first letter in the line, that would be great. But otherwise, all good, if a little sparse. A few more details would be nice, but they aren't of primary import.

[@Blizz]
Hello again!
Couple of blips:
Race - so is he a dark skinned fellow, or is he a humanoid with black skin? If it's the latter, could you explain a little more about teh race?
Spacing between your colons ( : ) and dashes ( - ) would greatly improve readability.
But that should be it.

Everyone I haven't mentioned:
You guys are all approved. However, I just realised that I forgot to include an Appearance section, so if you could either add a section into the CS for Appearance, or add a picture like how [@Leslie Hall] has done, if you haven't already, before you add it to the CHAR section, then you're approved.