[quote=@DJAtomika] [@Drifting Pollen] Oh whoops I forgot to send you a fighter did I Well since everyone's posting theirs, I'll post mine here too. Probably the lowest power fighter I've ever made. [hider=IV - The Emperor][center][h2]Guzman Galliard III - The Emperor[/h2] [i][h3]"It is my sworn duty to protect my family and my kingdom!"[/h3][/i] [u][h3]Vitals[/h3][/u] Name: Guzman Galliard III Title: King Gallant; The Emperor Age: 53 Sex: Male Date of birth: Feast Day, Year 403 Lineage: Galliard family, Heirs of the Golden Throne Class/Major: Paladin Class/Minor: Shieldbearer Occupation: King of the lands of Reculus Alignment: Lawful Good Marital Status: Married; three daughters, one son. Birthplace: Ulysses, Reculus Blood Type: ? Eye Color: Brown Height: 7' 5" Weight: 300 lbs Hair Color/Style: Windswept long grey hair, curly. Mustache and full beard. Beard is braided. General Appearance: Galliard is a big hulk of a man, titan-like in appearance. Clad in all manner of animal skins and leather armour, with furred hunting boots, a cloak of thick hide and a crown of gold and jewels, he is every way the spitting image of his title, King Gallant. A trophy necklace of animal teeth adorns his neck. Skin Tone/Condition: Tanned, scarred. Markings: His chest is covered in ritual tattoos of great hunts (a pack of dire wolves, a phoenix and a great serpent) and victories against his worst aggressors (an undead king, a bloodthirsty psychopath and a rival warlord). On his back is tattooed his family crest: a kite shield underneath a crossed sword and axe, with an eagle flying out from the top and a bear beneath. [u][h3]Bio[/h3][/u] Voice: Loud, booming. Gaelic accent. Personality: Upright. Loyal to a fault. Protective of those he considers family. Jovial. Steadfast. Earnest. Headstrong. Backstory: Guzman Galliard the Third was born in the township of Ulysses, a castle-fortress that served as a place of stay for travelers on the Kingdom Highway and the homes for the many farmers in the rolling hills. He belonged to the Galliard line of kings; honorable and heroic men who were in charge of the safety and prosperity of Ulysses. His father, Oswald Galliard the Fourth, handed Guzman the throne at the turn of the 427th Year, heralding the new year with a new king. For twenty years Guzman held the throne, besting many a foe and bringing the same good fortune and health to the townspeople under his care. He married a young woman during this time, later to be the queen and mother of his son, Grimmond. They would have three more children through the years, three lovely daughters: Griffith, Maine and Rose. By his fiftieth year of age, Guzman was growing old and Grimmond was reaching his twenty-first birthday. And then, in the year 456, it was finally time. All the townspeople were gathered in the castle courtyard. A grand feast was held in celebration of the old king passing his crown to the new. The whole family was present, including Guzman's father, now elderly but still healthy. Toasts were made, songs were sung and everybody was happy. At the end, Guzman was to present the crown and his ceremonial sword to his son and the ceremony would be complete. It would never come to be. The mysterious being known as the Dealer made its appearance, sealing Guzman within the card of the Emperor. It then vanished, leaving the kingdom in an uproar as the Galliard family tried to figure out what had happened. Meanwhile, between the dimensions, the Dealer cut Guzman a deal: if he did as he commanded, he would be allowed to return to his kingdom once a year to visit his family and make sure the kingdom was in order. Without any other choices, the good King obeyed. The first cycle around, Guzman immediately ordered another ceremonial crown, sword and shield made due to his extended absence. Now the original crown, sword and shield lay with the once-King on his travels through the dimensions, dealing the Dealer's justice where he sees fit. [u][h3]Combat Stats[/h3][/u] Dominant Hand: Right Equipment:[list] [*]Upper Body[list] [*]Ring of Frost; a sapphire ring on his left index finger. When the gem is touched it charges for a second then unleashes a five foot long, three foot wide cone of cold that instantly freezes anything within its reach. [*]Ring of Flame; a ruby ring on his left ring finger. When the gem is touched it charges for a second then fires a ball of fire in a ballistic trajectory towards a target. The fireball travels straight for about fifty feet before it starts to dip. [*]Ring of Healing; a pearl ring on his right ring finger. When the pearl is touched it charges then releases a burst of healing magic, instantly healing any moderate to light wounds. [/list] [*]Lower Body[list] [*] - [/list][/list] [u]Weapons[/u][list] [*]Bormak's Wrath; a large two-handed battle axe taken in combat after Galliard felled an enemy warlord that was muscling in on his territories violently and mercilessly. Galliard rode into battle, bested Bormak and claimed his axe as a fitting trophy and a warning to others not to contest his might. [*]Stalwart Shield; a kite shield forged by his blacksmiths, the shield has served as his family's badge of honour and as protective gear for all generations of the Galliard line. [*]Gallant Duty; a short sword also forged by family blacksmiths. Has been used by all generations of the family line as their combat and ceremonial sword. The sword is a double edged sword, reminiscent of a real world gladius. [/list] [u]Abilities[/u][list] [*]Superhuman King; through years of refining, hunting, fighting and waging war, Guzman's body has attained a significantly higher level of strength and endurance than your regular human. His reflexes are also heightened. [*]Titan; Guzman's immense strength lends force and weight to his blows. Each is like being hit with several hundred sledgehammers at once. [*]Unkillable; if the King is felled in combat (and he will cause he bleeds like any other human), the Dealer recalls his body into his card. The magics within the card restore and heal his body to optimal levels, thus ensuring that he can never truly die. [/list] [u]Magic[/u][list] [*] - [/list][/center][/hider] [/quote] Well, you got him submitted now! :) There's some things I'd like clarifying, however, as well as somethings you need to tone down: - First and foremost, 'Unkillable' is only a way to [i]remove him from battle[/i] (thus forfeiting) so you can use him again in the future, right? This would probably seem obvious, but I once fought someone with a similar ability who literally used it to revive their character mid-battle and keep fighting... so I would like confirmation that this will not be abused in such a manner. - Secondly, the rings. You mentioned they charge before activating, would this work similarly to prepping a spell? Would the charging of the rings be perceptible to an observer in any way? - Thirdly, the ring of Frost 'instantly' freezes anything within its reach. Maybe it's just the wording, but wouldn't this make the attack virtually impossible to avoid? There's no way for a fighter to know how far the cone extends (unless they've seen it before), and if the freezing is instant it would be impossible to get out of... perhaps the cone could expand outwards from the ring, and/or take some time to freeze what falls within the cone. - Lastly, the Titan ability is fine in concept... but 'several hundred sledgehammers at once' is waaaaaaaaaay too much strength. You've already given him enhanced physical abilities with Superhuman King, so I'd recommend either removing Titan entirely or toning it down to something like Shen's Qi enhancement (which adds up to around one sledgehammer of extra force per blow, and costs him stamina at that). Hope this isn't too much trouble... but yeah, would like to get this stuff sorted out before approving. Thank you!