[quote=@Terminal]One wonders what Stheno was up to in the meantime.[/quote]
Off hunting humans, probably. She [i]is[/i] the most violent of the sisters.

I can recognize the shift in narrative density of which you speak—and while I probably wouldn't do that much differently, I also enjoyed Melas's alone time the most. I had actually originally planned on writing the whole thing from Euryale's perspective, but decided I liked Melas better.

Personally, I'm happy with everything up to and including the fight with the basalt-wolf. After that, I re-plotted the conclusion so many times—in large part due to the fact that changing the focal character also by necessity of the challenge forced me out of my intended conclusion—that I lost a bit of the passion I'd felt writing the earlier bits.

One change I'd definitely do in a rewrite is make the post-fight campsite scene far more triumphant, and move the mini-argument further out. Perhaps as they were leaving the caves, as I felt that bit was lacking. I'd also consider putting detail into the fight scene, but I reckon myself terrible at those. (I actually wrote a prologue from before Melas's fall, but it was so convoluted and unnecessary that I scrapped it.)

[quote=@Terminal]Why, no, of course this is not a subtle attempt by me to undermine your chances of winning the Eighth Labour (which you were already going to fail anyway). Why ask?[/quote]
I must admit, this has me worried. How could experimenting ever [i]hurt[/i] my chances?! Challenging myself is the whole point! D: