Hey, [@always] please in NO way think I am affiliated with the GM. I'm not. But I'm reading your CS as another player in the game, and I admit, I don't entirely understand it.

Can you do a once-over for grammar, like there versus their? meat vs meat? etc. I am happy to give some grammar tips if you are unsure of things.

Beyond that, though, I am having a really hard time following your story, and I have a feeling other people will as well. It seems like she is rich, then poor, then learns how to hunt, with not much explaining how she is acquiring those skills. I think a subplot about wanting answers about her father is cool (I used a similar motivation in my character's backstory as well), but there are other parts of the story that I think need to be tightened, like with her mother/marie.

Again, I'm not the GM, so please don't think my word is God. I just wanted to give you some feedback from a player perspective. :)