[quote=@Always]Alexis Drumel[/quote]

Alrighty, so there are some problems here, as [@Pascal] has so helpfully pointed out.

First, yes, there's the grammar. This is an advanced RP, and so I would hope that people applying have a firm grasp of things like their/there. A bigger issue, though, is the backstory. There are quite a few problems that I can see with it:
- It is never explained exactly how her family has gotten so rich. Both of her parents are said to have "jobs" that they can lose, implying that they're probably not hereditary nobility (which would be the only class to be [i]really[/i] bringing in the money in our setting).
- "Taken out of school" makes it sound like there is a system of public schools or what-have-you like that which exists today, which is certainly not the case. The wealthy would have their children educated by private tutors, most likely, while everyone else only "needs" to know how to pull a plow.
- There would not have already been some sort of expedition that led to the deaths, or supposed deaths, of those involved. The group that the RP will be based around is the only real journey to have been organized and sent west in a long time.

Another problem that I see is with the traits. A lot of them don't mesh with the backstory. For instance, kleptomania is a [i]compulsion[/i] to steal, not the process of taking discarded things from around town because you need them. I also can't find any justification for having the "defender" trait. All in all, there are a significant amount of things that are going to need to be fixed up before the application is acceptable.