[@RedNightHunter], within the hider is the list of corrections and commentary for the submission. [hider=Comments] [list] [*] General: Please use the template code provided in the main page and first post. Priority correction needed. [*] Name: Most "research facilities" were not operating at the time - much older characters like Brutus are among the last actually engineered beasts. The more modern ones are the result of unpredictable circumstance, such as Royal or even more unusually, Nomad. It is also worthy of note the genetically modified animals were not tested in battle, except in very specific events. Minor correction needed. [*] Species: The same sort of issue arises as the wolf in question is extinct. Extinct animals were not mass produced and there was likely only a handful of them at any given time and far fewer into this end. You would just need change the age or subspecies. Minor correction needed. [*] Age: See above. The standard is roughly 10+ years for exotic sentient animals. Minor correction needed. [*] Classification and Faction: Should read as "Unaffiliated" if she has no pack. Minor correction needed. [*] Alignment: This character is missing an alignment on the Good-Evil and Chaos-Law axis. Major correction needed. [*] Personality: Rogue wolves are typically assimilated into a pack. I recommend that you decide upon her either being alone or creating a pack she formerly (or still does) belong to. Her pack can still be around as a minor faction or destroyed, with only the reputation carrying with her. Major correction needed. [*] Background: Research facilities working with sentient beasts were highly secure and extremely well maintained. Most had armed private security compliments and extensive interlocks and barriers such as fences to prevent loss of control. When disaster struck, some of the more noble humans ultimately opened the gates and blast doors, not willing to let other intelligent creatures die in confinement. I suggest reconsidering some parts of her escape - the difference between her size at three and size at six is, in example, negligible among other details. [*] Notes: I feel it bears worthy mention that while having an unintelligent companion, such as Kira, is not outright impossible, it does not generally fit the theme of [i]A Time After Men[/i]. I recommend if you intend on having a cohort who is just an animal, to make it a pack or littermate. [/list] [/hider] [@Lmpkio], you need add a Classification and Faction still on the approved sheet. "Unaffiliated" is likely the best option for you.