Not sure if were doing peer reviews but here goes the first few. Interesting to see how everyone worked out the parameters of the challenge. I really struggled with it myself. I'm out of time today, but will try and get the last two up sometime soon. When reading my reviews consider I have 0 ranks in Knowledge. 

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[u]Knockity-Knock[/u]
[@jumpadraw]

 I like your story. It kept me reading, building tension-I wanted to know who/what was beyond the door. I feel like your story could have done with some characterization. I also felt like the great symbol in the story-the door should have been given some more attention. What did it look like? Maybe symbols were carved into it? You mention the narrator is the one who built the door, if he was given character that might have been reflected in the construction of the door. I think some more metaphors for the heart could have built into the setting and the door. All in all I found the story enjoyable. 

[u]Schrödinger[/u]
[@shylara]

Immediately reminded of this: [url=https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=y9P_k4uCtgg]Duck Amuck[/url]

 Cool setup. Interesting idea. You need to start a new paragraph when someone new starts to speak. For example:

[i]“Let’s start small.  Your favorite color, perhaps?  What do you like to eat?”  I attempt a different tack, thinking to take my foe off-guard, but they just give me a knowing smile.  I can tell, even though I can’t actually visualize the details of the expression.  “Ah-ah-ah, that’s not going to work.”  Then they turn sly.  “Well, maybe I can give you /one/ answer.  I like to eat food.”[/i]

Should be:

[i]“Let’s start small.  Your favorite color, perhaps?  What do you like to eat?”  I attempt a different tack, thinking to take my foe off-guard, but they just give me a knowing smile.  I can tell, even though I can’t actually visualize the details of the expression.  

“Ah-ah-ah, that’s not going to work.”  Then they turn sly.  “Well, maybe I can give you /one/ answer.  I like to eat food.”[/i]

I kind of got lost in the middle parts because of this, and sometimes things weren't made clear as to what exactly was happening or who was doing what. I really think with like one more revision this could be a fantastic piece. The ending didn't quite land for me as well-essentially your premise for the story is this paragraph (all the way at the end):

[i]I remove my fingers from the keys, and look at what I have.  So much time devoted to this, and so little to show for it!  I snarl in frustration.  How could I, the author and ruler of the world of the page, be so completely stymied in my efforts of creation?  I control each aspect, each detail, and yet this incomplete character thwarts my every effort.  [u]“Why won’t you cooperate?!”[/u] I demand of my unfinished creation, wanting at least one straight answer for my trouble.[/i]

 Which is an awesome idea in and off itself. But I wanted to know why your narrators character was uncooperative, why the character would only work on his terms. Not necessarily a criticism, just an idea. I think you should work on this a bit more-polish it up! Really enjoyable read and interesting idea. 

[u]The Internal Debate[/u]
[@WiseDragonGirl]

Interesting internal? struggle between a writer and a character in her story. I like this story because it made me ask questions about who the writer might be, kept me reading. Some more chapters could be written revealing that the writer (of Mitch) has a lot in common with Mitch. Maybe [i]her[/i] father is rich and maybe she took tennis/violin lessons. I think a piece of every writer is in their characters. Very well executed idea grasping the parameters of the contest, and I like the bold text format of Mitchs dialogue. 

[u]Untitled[/u]
[@PlatinumSkink]
Whoah. Wow. That was like watching a disneyworld ride wearing muppet-glasses inside a film loosely based on a Hunter S. Thompson exploit. Thoroughly scarred. Thank you! 

I love the ending-glad all of this was going somewhere. I think you could maybe cut out some parts that aren't necessary and format the dialogue a little better to make it clear who is saying what. Maybe put the narrators voice in italics or vice-versa. All in all enjoyable and a fitting end. 

[u]Puah Tu Tahi[/u]
[@mdk]

Beautiful setting description-the coral reef, the tone all came to life for me as I read. Also a decent primer in nautical terminology-you clearly have a strong grasp of your subject matter, something I've always been lax about in my own writing. Well done. 

My only complaint is that the only character given a name is the dead captain, Abraham. It's awkward to read what the 'pale man' is doing throughout the story. Not a major fault but noticeable. I think one of the natives actually calls him by name in the story. Maybe have that happen earlier on and give yourself another name to call your main character by? 

Overall this story is really great-The pacific islander mythology is really spooky in this story. I got chills with the last line, the last log entry of Abrahan. The last fleeting moment for the captain and crew before oblivion. Great story. 
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