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@FernStone Just like before, Max is accepted.

Anyways, I'm making small changes to my sheets here and there (Because I apparently missed a lot of stuff the other forty times I went through their sheets). I decided to just make Wendy French & Japanese.
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Edit: fixed... I think XD
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Number three:


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@NosuchthingI'm reading "genuinely a good man" and "enjoys killing and torturing certain kinds of people" over and over again in your sheet. The repetitiveness sounds like someone talking to themselves and trying to rationalize murder. I don't think that's how you're gonna convince the reader that Matthew means well.

I'm also expecting him to commit suicide since he has a power too.

@FernStoneI'd argue that being in the gang is by no means a feasible training method for combat or shooting. They might have access to firearms, but there's no official training in that sort of environment. I'd expect him to be an okay shot, but wouldn't stand a chance even against a recruit RAVEN. Neither are there any sort of martial art or defense program in gangs. He could probably fight dirty, utilize what tools he may, but hand to hand is a different story.

I might sound hypocritical in saying this after posting Reyna (but in my defense, she was of the first to be posted and boxing fits her character without being tacked on), I feel uncomfortable with the standard being set with everyone being fighters (or RAVEN/DOVE and thereby having the training regardless). The exceptions are 2 of the GM's own characters, Rory, Lava Lamp Head, and Arianna.
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@Spoopy Scary

Arianna dont want no trouble.

She just wants the love.

And your wallet.

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Lol most of these sheets sound like characters making Tinder accounts.

They're all beautiful and over six feet tall.
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Eight inch dicks. :^)
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Oh yeah, now we're gettin' somewhere.
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@Spoopy ScaryAre you saying combat capabilities are being tacked onto my character? Because he had that the last time I made him (for the last roleplay I was part of in this verse). Im in the middle of a gaming thing atm so I can't check what I wrote for skills but I'll probably make changes to it regarding what you have said in terms of that stuff. The main problem there is cause I don't have a great knowledge of combat and firearms soooo I don't know what is actually good / unusual ect.

Also my remaining two/three characters aren't fighters anyway xP Assuming you're directing the bar being set by character's being fighters at me? Because my technical fighter:non-fighter ratio will end up 2:5 or 1:3 or something. (Tho Rori is the only non fighter I've posted)

Nahh to get on full tinder level it needs to be profile pictures for guys with really attractive girls in them :P

Edit: Also I apologise in advance I'm in an irritable mood at the moment, so yeahhhh xD
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@Nosuchthing Matthew's sheet is... weird, to say the least. I can't get a good grasp on his character because it feels like the serial killer aspects are tacked on tbh. You keep mentioning how he's such a great person - that just so happens to kill people. I know what you're going for, but it could be phrased much better.

@FernStone Salvador looks fine to me other than the things Spoopy noted.
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@Mr Allen JYeah I'll change those things when I'm feeling less energy drained :)
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O...kay.

I've been strolling through the thread, and I'm still not quite caught up. The perils of a busy life, I suppose. I am concerned about something, though - I'm planning on writing one character, and only one. It seems like there are several people doing at least two, sometimes quite a lot more, and that's left me wondering if that's sort of the read-between-the-lines expectation for this game.

If it is, that's totally fine, I'm just trying to make sure I'm understanding what the baseline is. :3
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@Mr Allen J Alrighty. This time, I fixed the back story, changed NEST to other still active organizations and deepened his connections with the Allegiance. Also, I added more weakness: he will need direct physical contact to induce a lethal current, he will also be weakened when charging and it takes a while to charge up. I don't mind adding more if you still feel he is too powerful.
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@Naril Don't feel too intimidated by everyone's sheets, bro.

I'm actually playing only one character... just that they somehow branched off into a pair. (Technically identical twins are born from the same one sperm and egg, innit?)
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@Naril You can write as many characters if you want - even if it's one. lol

(Technically identical twins are born from the same one sperm and egg, innit?)


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@RedDusk Only having to touch someone to induce lethal currents is a limit. lol

Something like getting burned from electricity, violent twitching/muscle spasms, and vision/hearing problems would be weaknesses.

Also, I changed my avatar/sig set.
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@Naril You can write as many characters if you want - even if it's one. lol

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@RedDusk Only having to touch someone to induce lethal currents is a limit. lol

Something like getting burned from electricity, violent twitching/muscle spasms, and vision/hearing problems would be weaknesses.

Also, I changed my avatar/sig set.


Ya. You have a point. I should stop trying to coddle him.
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Alright, added burn when using power and staying in charged state for too long. Anything else needs adjustment?
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@RedDusk I was thinking that, instead of his "charged state" just burning him, he gets burned whenever he uses his electricity powers. Seems like a fair trade off, yes?
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@Mr Allen J
*touches chin* Hmm, sounds good I suppose. Just to clarify so we won't have any misunderstandings: so when he shoots lightning out of his hands or when he tries to taze someone with his bare hands, he will get burn, but when he charges up and runs around, he won't get burn. But when he charges up and runs around shooting lightning, he will get burn. Is this okay?
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@NosuchthingI'm reading "genuinely a good man" and "enjoys killing and torturing certain kinds of people" over and over again in your sheet. The repetitiveness sounds like someone talking to themselves and trying to rationalize murder. I don't think that's how you're gonna convince the reader that Matthew means well.

I'm also expecting him to commit suicide since he has a power too.


He is trying to rationalise murder...

I know someone who is actually quite a nice bloke, very polite, very intelligent, kind of guy that you wouldn't mind having a few drinks with or having around for dinner. He just happens to think that all non-white British are scum and should be deported.

Matthew is simply the same thing but with delusions.

And as to him having a power, he's obsessed, stands to reason that someone whose purpose it is to punish metahumans would be immune to metahumans. At least in his mind.

@Nosuchthing Matthew's sheet is... weird, to say the least. I can't get a good grasp on his character because it feels like the serial killer aspects are tacked on tbh. You keep mentioning how he's such a great person - that just so happens to kill people. I know what you're going for, but it could be phrased much better.


I'll see what I can do :)

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OK, I've tweaked him a little, trying to make him sound less like a serial killer and more like a vigilante who exclusively targets criminal metahumans, albeit with far more lethal force than is perhaps necessary. Let me know what you think @Mr Allen J
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