[@rocklee] I'm sorry, I think I confused you earlier! While we here at Shine City are always accepting new characters, you still have to go through an approval process before you can post in the IC section or move your CS over to the character tab!

Now Sonny seems like a lovely character, but I'm going to need your 'Persona' section to be just a bit longer than that. I usually look for a bare minimum of two paragraphs, but I love, [b][i]love[/i][/b] more because I'm a sucker for details! A way that you could lengthen it up for me is by changing the 'Persona' heading to 'Bio/Personality', that way you can add a little spiel about your character's history! You don't have to tell us everything, just some of the basics so we get a good understanding of where he comes from!

Now I see that you've already posted IC, which is a no no if your character hasn't been approved yet, but I'm sure it was an honest mistake, so no worries! Plus it gives us a great opportunity to go over the quality requirements of this game! 

We require all posts to be at least three paragraphs long. Now I know what you're thinking, [i]"But Narcy! My post has a lot of dialogue, so I have three paragraphs!"[/i] or, [i]"I hate reading long paragraphs, they hurts my eyes! That's why I write short, three sentence paragraphs instead!"[/i]. That is absolutely, 100% fine, we all have our different ways of writing and I don't want to make you feel like I'm putting you in a box creatively. I too love shorter paragraphs and dialogue out the wazoo, so you are not alone!

A good rule of thumb to remember is that a standard paragraph has about five sentences in it. So if you have a lot of dialogue in your post or you just like writing shorter paragraphs so it's easier on the eyes or something, aim to give me at least fifteen sentences and we should be golden. 

Also, this game is in the advanced section, so we have to answer to the highest grammar standards. This doesn't mean you have to be perfect, we all misspell a word or forget some punctuation every now and again, but we do need to make sure we are proof reading our posts. There are a few lines in your last post where you did not begin the sentences with capitalization, left the punctuation off the end, and did not capitalize the letter "I" when referring to yourself (or in this case, Sonny!). I need you to fix those for me, as well as adding a few more lines to it to make it longer. If you're struggling to add length you can always describe Sonny's surroundings more, or maybe what he's wearing, or the temperature outside, etc., etc. Details are your friend, embrace them! 

Let me know if you have anymore questions, darlin'!