[@Witch Cat] ok well... uhm... theres some problems and one thing that needs serious expansion. Im going in top to bottom order.

Homo-magi if you want to make up a race (or you're referencing something ive not heard of) you really have to explain it more. I would not approve of just slughtly magical humans as that's terribly boring and humans can already do magic just fine.

If you are referinf to Hunters as beastiologists then this crusade is highly flawed as hunters are magic themselves. They just internaluze their magic into a couple traits and slight enhancemwnts to their being. Also all of their gear is magic.

Im fine with a group that hates your group, but this hunters want to eradicate all casters wouldn't work out. They would have been decimated centuries ago likely by other hunters who would see them as rogue. A small group with a small target can slip under radars and avoid the attention of the world community. In a sense these hunters would be fighting the entire rest of the magical world, limit their scope and they'd have less enemies.

Raw magic (your eldritch energy) is demonology exclusive. Raw magic is dangerous, but with the familiar you get enougj control to use it directly. As well eldritch is definitely a demonology term.

Teleportation is also demonology only. Its spatial magic (thats what blink is in the descriptions of the schools.)

Finally thats a pet not a familiar. Familiars are only demons in a pact with a demonologist. It's not a combat creature ao it's fine to stay just the wrong term here.

Now the story the charactet the concepts are good. These details just go against what I know I covered.


Usingy phone btw so sorry for any errors.