[quote=@Maxx]
[@Nosuchthing] It's a good start, but I'd like to know more. You didn't describe Eleuril's abilities at all. Like, I have no idea what kind of magic he is capable of using. If you'd like, PM me and I can answer any questions that you have about what kind of magic he could use. I'd also like to see more of exactly how Eleuril projects his magic through Underfoot. Like, does he overshadow her, or is she in control? As he is a being with his own personality, maybe you should add a personality section for him. it doesn't have to be long at all. Just let me understand how this guy acts. 


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Off to work again I'm afraid, but I will PM you on my return :)