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HOUSE LYSANDER ([@darkwolf687])

A note for everyone in the roleplay: we are using 'Ser' for the terminology of referencing official knights, the term 'Sir' is non-existent in this time. 

EDWIN LYSANDER 

- Allegiance should be changed to "House Rathmore", not just "Rathmore".
- His family should be labeled as who they are; who is his father, mother, brother, sister, etc.
- He can't be "avarice" because avarice is a noun, not an adjective. You can say he is "avarice incarnate" for better description.
- There's no such thing as "free men"in the lands of Estiala. Everyone is subject to the crown.
- In the backstory, who is Robert? There is no mention of Robert whatsoever. The closest name to Robert is Richard.

EMMALINE LEAR ([@HushedWhispers])

- Everything is fine, but her origin is a "some what small...". You seemed to have missed a word there. XD


REYANNA MOREWEN ([@RomanAria])

- Solace: hey look it's Rey from Star Wars
- She is not a lady, because she's not the wife of a lord. She's a princess, a daughter of a lord.
- If it's not incredibly important, Solace and I would prefer you PM us to tell us what happened to the people she was bethrothed to, unless it's SUPER DUPER secret.

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1: No problem
2: No problem
3: I wrote avarice? Forgive me, I likely meant avaricious. 
4: A freeman is still a subject of the crown just like everyone else; A freeman is a peasant who is distinguishable from a villein or serf in that he is not tied to the land, that is to say he is literally "free" to come and go as he pleased whereas a lot of peasants were obligated to stay on the land they were tied to and could only leave with the permission of their lord. 
The feudal system is based on obligations, oaths and the like; A villein or serf is subject to hereditary ownership by a lord. If you were a serf and I was your lord I would basically own you and your descendants. You work for me and in exchange you get to live off of some of what you farm. The land is mine, however, not yours; You are just a tenant.
If you are a freeman then you may decide to work for a lord as a farmer but you can leave if you like whereas other peasants could not. You might, if you are very industrious, careful and lucky, save up some money and buy a small plot of land of your own for you and your descendants to live off of. Traders and merchants were often freemen and so freemen enjoyed greater social mobility with some becoming well off. He may have been a peasant but he was a free peasant.
Basically its just a higher class of peasant within the feudal system who had more rights and less obligations than other peasants (the magna carta, for example, states that no freeman could be imprisoned or stripped of his freedom or possessions without due process.) Some freemen would become yeomen under later definitions of the term.

5: Ah, sorry; My writing doesn't appear to be to clear this time around; Robert is the local clothier. The opening paragraph of the backstory notes that Edwin's family
"... And mostly made their living through herding sheep and selling the wool to the local clothier, Robert."