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[i][b]Alexander Sky Review[/b][/i]

[quote]Don’t think that “Gender” is “Sexuality. You should probably just explain that in the personality section or in the likes section.[/quote]

Will do.

[quote]So basically he can “see” that “something is happening” in regards to magics, and if it is an illusion he is able to see past it? I’m alright with magical abilities, but things like divine protections and authorities are off limits in terms of “understanding how they work” or “Understanding what they do”, but I would allow you to “understand they exist” if you see them in action in the sense that “You can sense something that is inhuman”, if that makes sense.[/quote]

No objections.

[quote]I don’t see, logically, how he would be able to make the jump that somehow the disappearances in the Americas would have barring on the disappearances in other places where the characters are from. It seems like a huge logical leap. What are the connections? People suddenly vanishing? Because though there have been an influx of people recently, according to the latter sections of your biography you have been in Lugnica for some time now.[/quote] 

I thought the disappearances have been going on for far longer, actually. Also, my original idea was for Alexander to have been in Lugnica for only a few months, but another player told me it would be somewhat more convenient to have been in Lugnica for a year. But yes, I can revise it to just a few months again.

[quote]I don’t think there is an outside force within the confines of the “Earth” that would lead anyone to suspect occult findings. It seems to be a huge logical leap here. People go missing all the time, but there should not be a large enough missing persons report from the time you went missing according to your profile, as well as the glaring fact that there should be hardly any connections between the cases, as they are isolated, few in number, and should not carry the same traits as each other, aside from sudden disappearance.[/quote] 

Ah, I lacked knowledge of how common the disappearances were.

[quote]Well I feel that if his only skill would be the memorization of the gunpowder components he is probably a terrible chemist. From a Chemist. It would also be a strange choice to study, but I mean I won’t really question it aside from the fact I feel it is simply tagged on to give your character potential towards constructing simple bombs and guns. Note that the metallurgy of the world should not be able to make anything sophisticated.[/quote]

Yeah...I would have given him more chemistry skills than Gunpowder, but I was limited by my own lack of knowledge. Hmm, can he have a solar-powered Kindle that has a copy of the Encyclopedia Britannica and a few other reference books? According to episode summaries, the protagonist of Re:Zero had a camera phone.

[quote]Who told you this? What sort of force wants to return those who have arrived? I don’t see any reason that there would exist an NPC in the world, god or otherwise, that understands the confines of the “other world”, bar Satella, in the canon.[/quote] 

Ah, I lacked knowledge of how Gods in Re:Zero work.

[quote]I am fine if he wants to find a way to get back to his original home along with those who would want to go, but I don’t really like the “divine mandate” idea you have going on here, considering that my previous point should still stand.[/quote]

I'll remove it.

[i][b]Myst Neumann Review[/b][/i]

[quote]Don’t think that “Gender” is “Sexuality. You should probably just ex… Wait I said this already.[/quote]

Will change it.

[quote]Equality of peoples has been in Lugnica after the civil war 50 years ago, though the discrimination on the personal level has existed for years. Institutionalized discrimination has long not been the practice of Lugnica. That doesn’t mean that personal discrimination exists, but the royal family signed a constitution to prevent more civil unrest with the ever-looming threat of the Witch.[/quote] 

I can change it to 'angering the wrong people', or, with permission, I can age him up to 74, kept alive by his healing magic...

[quote]Know that water magic needs to influence through touch, like all magicks, and someone can dispel “Blood magic” through diluting your influence with their own mana. But against people who hardly know how to control their mana, it should still work. And if someone is weakened, since mana directly correlates to “life energy”, this “barrier” should subside.[/quote] 

I am fine with this.

[quote]I mean, there would be no proof that a planet called “earth” exists, so I am not sure why your character would believe it would like some sort of Shangri-la or Shambhala or Ys or … well I think you get the point. Unless he just believes that some fairy-tale land exists that he had heard of from … “people”, I suppose. Though I am not sure how such rumors have spread so rapidly. Just considering it from a rational perspective. Even if this is a series based on a light novel that includes a flying whale, people who worship dragons [fucking pagans], and a witch that can rip through dimensions, I still feel such rationalizations are to be expected.[/quote] 

Ah, my mistake, then. I can remove that part and replace it with 'people with new abilities, with mysterious origins, some of who spoke of places that didn't exist in this world'?