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[b]Character Name:[/b]
Vivi Ornitier

[b]Title:[/b] 
“Legend” 

[b]Kingdom:[/b] 
Enix

[b]Visual Description:[/b] 
[img]http://25.media.tumblr.com/tumblr_mcjsrhCLLV1rbtkz6o1_400.png[/img]
[img]http://vignette2.wikia.nocookie.net/finalfantasy/images/4/4d/Vivi_Trance_FFIX_Art.jpg/revision/latest?cb=20130321003819[/img]

[b]Written Description:[/b] 
Four feet tall in his boots, five with his floppy hat, six when he goes "pyntie-hets". Roughly a hundred to one-ten in weight. His magical nature actually generates a layer of darkness over his skin. He's been mistaken for a rogue star-wars jawa or a kingdom heart heartless more than once.


[b]Personality:[/b] 
I used to be mild and meek, but after all that happened, I like to think I am more than I used to be.

[b]Game:[/b] 
Final Fantasy 9

[b]Current Story:[/b] 
"I told the story, that was my job. Now that the story is told. My little ones can live on protecting the realm and in time my memories will join the sky. But for now there is a question I still have unanswered: What do you do for loneliness. Making my sons did not fill that gap. So perhaps this will find the answer."

Weapon(s): 
Staff: Mages staff (Fire)
[b]Stat.[/b]
Level One

(P)Damage 1 
(P)Defense 1
(M)(E)Damage 3
(M)(E)Defense 3
Dexterity 2
0%
XP ////////// (0/10) 

[b]General Abilities[/b]

Slot One. 
[color=ed1c24][b]Robes: Silk robes (Immune to silence)[/b][/color] [color=yellow][b](That's not the ability Silk Robe grants. You need to find out what Vivi's starting equipment is. Gear would not be a general ability.)[/b][/color]

[b]Special Abilities[/b]

Slot One. 

[b]Items[/b]

Slot One.
Slot Two.
Slot Three.

[b]Strengths[/b]
[color=ed1c24]Focus-Raises magic Attack[/color] [color=yellow][b](This would be a general ability and not strength unless you mean to say his concentration helps him focus his magic, which doesn't actually "increase" his magic attack but allows him to perform well as a mage. Because with how you have this written, it is very half-ass. Do not send me a half-ass CS. It will not get accepted.)[/b][/color]
[color=ed1c24]Trance- 3 round Limit Break effect, Double magic.[/color] [color=yellow][b](Limit Breaks will have to go under General Ability because FF characters have MANY limit breaks so it gives them more things to acquire without having to worry about running out of abilities.)[/b][/color]
Jump- Not the dragoon ability, but he can make fair jumps of at least six feet across rooftops and drop down from significant heights without harm.
Construct-Technically he is built so he reads as 'magic' and 'machine' when scanned or dramatically appropriate.

[b]Weaknesses[/b]
Cannot swim
Cannot Fly
Easily manipulated verbally
Short

[b]Achievements[/b]

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I made my comments in yellow. Dude, you're going to have to send me a better CS than that. This game is different from Dungeon Fantasy. It is Casual-Advanced. If the Advanced half is going to be too much of a problem, then I wouldn't recommend getting in on this. It just looked like you didn't show any effort in writing this CS at all.