Writing notes! Fantastic! :-D

A preference? No, not really. Just Ghent could make it a tad bit more difficult and interesting since it would depend solely on him, then both would be intriguing in its own right, and make sense since the aspects are connected. Eh, we can decide closer to when it’s actually important, yeah?

Woo! It has officially been added. Thanks!

^.^ Thank you, thank you! Glad you enjoyed the fight scene and whatnot. :-)

I like Ghent’s perspective of Elayra and his overall reactions, as well as your descriptions. “Hopelessly fragmented,” “eerily familiar,” “didn't fancy the idea of being mugged” (okay, not so much a description as a narration, but it made me grin), “dangerously quiet,” “ridiculous imagination.” I love adjectives. So very much.  

Grammar tip: “That” is a word easily overused. If a sentence still makes sense without its use, then get rid of it. Otherwise, it’s more of a filler word than anything. Other than with dialogue, of course. People constantly use filler words in dialogue. You don’t use it excessively or anything, I’ve just noticed it a couple times, so thought I would mention that for the heck of it. I’m equally as guilty of using it unnecessarily every now and again.

I take it the indentations didn’t work? Heh. Sorry it didn’t help! I only use them because I already try to italicize, underline, and bold text in my personal writings using BBC upon occasion; I don’t need to add double returns to those habits!