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Some of my critiques:

- God mode online! So she's a mage, uses a bow, a dagger, has magic armour which also makes her strong, fast, able to see in the dark, oh, and she's a mage. Damn, my knight is starting to feel like a powerless little nobody.

- A bit too similar to my character. Wakes up with no memory but has a powerful gift, in your case, magic and an alternative personality, though in your case it exists in parallel with the original personality and not on top of it or below;

- So how much magic does she know? I take it that at 19, not much, right? Anyway, it wasn't very clear.

Hope my critiques helped.
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I agree with all the above, I'm afraid. Though there are some things you could do to fix it

- The mask should be a lot less powerful, and perhaps more important to her character. Seeing in the dark is fine and perhaps it enhances her ability to cast fire magic (a more ungod-mode of saying 'immune to fire' could be that she can cast a really powerful fire-shield with this knowledge that other ordinary mage's defenses (including Alice's) would break down long before her's or something, but it isn't infalible and others can work with this). I feel like the reflexes and extra strength thing is a bit too much as well. You could say that maybe it acts sort of like a drug would to an addict, it steadies her and she feels better with it but it doesn't propel her abilities into obscenity

- Expanding on my 'more important to your character' it might be a good way to make it have more of an impact on your character. Whereas Jezebeth's thingy is more subtle, you could make yours far more audacious, maybe she is effectively two people in the same body, and the mask can talk or take control of her whenever it wants? Just food for thought, I don't want to hijack your character or anything

- It might be worth specifying the kind of magic she's good at, or a few typical spells she prefers to use. It's fine if you want to use more than that selection, but it gives us an idea of what she's like as oppose to know where we have absolutely no idea