[quote=LeoricAquila]
I like sawyer as well and I am a fan of constructive criticism. Ill make a point to edit the post in question and future posts. I used to aspire to being a writer... then life, wife and child snapped me into reality and said that I needed to do something more reliable. Im sure once time rolls over to the next day, jack will be a mostly different character. We will see. But I like writing him. Its new and different like my draxis character on the free boards... the conflict rp died but he was fun as he'll to write. But this will be just as fun I think
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Like I said, the content is amusing, it was just hard to follow with the structure of one big paragraph. :) Nothing wrong with the content at all.

Edit: I saw you posted while I was writing, that one was structured MUCH better! :) I had to run back and edit a response to Sawyer in from Eulalie!