So, uh, I'd like some feedback my last post, so a few questions for those of you who read it:

What did you think overall? Were the jokes humorous? The characters realistic and relatable? Did the action scenes feel tense and flow smoothly? Could you understand what was happening? Anything else you noticed or have a comment on?

Don't be afraid to tell me if its bad, or if it has flaws. I'm fully aware that it is amatureishly written. But I trust you guys to tell me what you really think.