[quote=Rare]
I'm done btw :p
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Much better elaboration :)

Space out the different abilities, to make it easier to read. Also, and this is more of a note to everyone, try to stick to things that are relevant to the RP. Things that will come up and the like.

The time-warp arrow, what exactly is that? That needs explanation.

The weaknesses should be spaced from the rest.