[quote=@Letter Bee]
[@anothered][@Lewascan2], I hope you don't mind Ren's reason for accepting Mu's offer - Aka his crush on the poor guy!
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Not like it's my character being targeted here, lol. :V
The only thing I'd really note from an immersion perspective is that boys usually romantically mature much slower than girls, biologically speaking, so Ren being "attracted" to anyone at all is unusual and probably disconcerting to those that know in how strong it is. Even Naruto's own crush on Sakura in canon was incredibly immature in nature, and Sasuke didn't seem to have an attracted bone in his body ever. :V

Anyway, that's all technically subjective. Ren's free to have his crush, but it's still unusual for a 12-13-year-old.

Also, for the sake of narrative smoothness, you really don't need to go out of your way to describe what Kasumi might feel from his chakra. I'm confident I can read between the lines enough to make surface-level estimations without an exposition for every detail. So, don't feel like you need to constantly psychoanalyze his every emotional decision for my own sake. Only do it if that's what you'd have written anyway. It's just going to bog things down otherwise.