[quote=@Theyra] Yes your suggestions still work for me, I might just go with the surviving royal guard, only that he was severely wounded during the conflict, and after he healed, he chose not to join the queen's royal guard but still has friends in the guard and court, and has since retired to his family's estate and thinking of ways to end the queen's rule and avenge the king. Maybe making a spy network. Unless I think of something else. [/quote] This idea would work great, I say go for it. I'm looking forward to your CS! [quote=@Izurich] [@Estylwen] My CS is up for review! [hider=Mèlisande Tearmoon & Kronos] [center][img]https://i.imgur.com/AwKcgac.jpg[/img] [h1][color=b9b5fa]Mèlisande Tearmoon[/color] & [color=f68192]Kronos[/color][/h1] [color=b9b5fa][b]16[/b][/color] / [color=f68192][b]Unknown[/b][/color] | [color=b9b5fa][b]Lilim[/b][/color] / [color=f68192][b]Dremora[/b][/color] | [color=b9b5fa][b]Female[/b][/color] / [color=f68192][b]Genderless[/b][/color] | [color=b9b5fa][b]157cm (5'2")[/b][/color] / [color=f68192][b]N/A[/b][/color] | [color=b9b5fa][b]46kg (101 lbs)[/b][/color] / [color=f68192][b]N/A[/b][/color][/center] [center][youtube]https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=JinmeJ92uo0[/youtube][/center] [indent] [color=b9b5fa][b]Goal:[/b][/color] Firstly, driven by a sense of loyalty to her mother, Matriarch Jezebel Tearmoon, and the coven she belongs to, Melisande strives to realize her ambitions of exerting the coven's control over the Glasic Fields by whatever means most convenient, whether through supporting the Wizard Queen or the Duke of Rhinecliff. Secondly, motivated by gratitude to the Dremora of Time, Kronos, who dwells within her, she wishes to search for a way to separate their conjoined souls so it can return to the Shade from whence it came. Thirdly, above all, she wishes to enjoy everything life has to offer before her borrowed time finally ends, whenever it'll be. [color=f68192][b]History:[/b][/color] [hider=The Two of Us] The Lilim, a curious race of monogendered people; beautiful, physically delicate, and magically talented, these all-female sapients were said to have descended from ancient nymphs intermarrying with humans and elves. Regardless of the truth, it's clear that the mystical influence of the fey realm runs strong in them, which would indeed explain their peculiar traits. Then, the Dremora, shadowy creatures hailing from the Shade, dreaded and mysterious, they're a subject of innumerable stories and legends, malevolent anathema to the All-Force itself. One might ask, what if a pair of Lilim and Dremora are forced to coexist? Melisande's very existence is a representation of such a concept. Born as the first child of the current matriarch - leader - of the Tearmoon lilim coven, Melisande's struggle began right after she left her mother's womb. A sickly infant, the girl's early years were spent mostly bedridden and confined in her room, and even the best of the coven's healers were unable to cure her ailments, it was as if her fate had been set in stone, that she was to suffer through a short life of agony before she'd waste away into an eternal sleep. Something that the matriarch found unacceptable, her beloved daughter would live... by [i]any means necessary[/i]. After exhausting almost every option, Jezebel turned to the forbidden, in place of the so-called benevolent All-Force who couldn't save her daughter, she'd instead embrace the dark gifts of the Shade. Delving into eldritch knowledge was quite achievable for a Lilim of her stature, thus after no small amount of research, the coven matriarch prepared a ritual, one that would summon a dremora from the Shade and use its unlife-force to immortalize her child. The ritual... succeeded, Jezebel summoned a creature of timeless existence and infused it into Melisande, freezing the progression of the child's affliction. However, meddling with the shade had its price, there'd always be a catch, and in this case, it's the harrowing fact that the otherworldly creature didn't quite disappear, instead its consciousness melded with Melisande's, practically turning them into a conjoined twin sharing a single body. Still, Jezebel deemed that it was worth it. ...and so did Melisande, as she grew up, she learned to coexist with her "twin", her 'other self', one she named Kronos. As for Kronos, it was resentful at first, being imprisoned in someone else's body, but due to the combination of Melisande's warm friendliness, its own curiosity about the material plane, and last but not least, the promise of one day being able to be separated and return home, it grew to tolerate its new life, one might say it might've grown fond of Melisande, though it'll never admit it. [/hider] At the tender age of sixteen summers, Melisande qualified for a scholarship from the Society of Young Magic to attend Hathforth Academy. There, she could hone her power over chronomancy, the arcane art of space-time and causality manipulation, using the best resources and tutelage the academy could offer. In addition, her mother tasked her with gathering any information that'd help the Tearmoon coven to rule over the Glasic Fields and obtain exclusive authorization to manage it, essentially supplanting the Royal Gardeners, but no one needs to know that... at least not before it’s appropriate to whisk the curtains. [color=b9b5fa][b]Seed:[/b][/color] [i]Gemini[/i] - Melisande's Seed takes the form of a gem-encrusted golden star-shaped brooch. Perfectly symmetrical from the vertical axis, Gemini's primary function is to manipulate the fabric of space-time to conjure an identical copy of Melisande's body, including her current apparel, and either Kronos or Melisande herself can focus their consciousness to control said copy, which practically allows the twins to have a separate body each. The clone continuously consumes mana to maintain its existence and when dispelled through one reason or another, it'll simply vanish into fleeting motes of pure mana. [color=f68192][b]Magic:[/b][/color] [indent] [color=b9b5fa]❖[/color] [b]Swift:[/b] Enchants a target with magical vigor, allowing them to perform actions quicker. [color=f68192]❖[/color] [b]Slow:[/b] Hexes a target with arcane malady, hindering their movements. [color=b9b5fa]❖[/color] [b]Hasten:[/b] Accelerates the progression of an effect, for example, an antidote that'd need several minutes to fully take effect can be manipulated into a single minute. [color=f68192]❖[/color] [b]Hinder:[/b] Impedes the progression of an effect, for example, a venom that'd have taken a minute to kill can be delayed to several minutes. [color=b9b5fa]❖[/color] [b]Blink:[/b] Manipulates space-time to instantly change the caster's location to another location within sight or a maximum of several meters, whichever is closer. [color=f68192]❖[/color] [b]Reflect:[/b] Conjures a barrier that can reverse the trajectory of mundane projectiles, unable to affect magical projectiles. [color=b9b5fa]❖[/color] [b]Vacuum:[/b] Generate a localized implosion at a designated point in space, damaging anything within that space with pure force. The size of each implosion can be no larger than an apple. --- [color=f68192]❖[/color] [b]Dimension Door:[/b] Connects two separate points of space within sight via a portal, enabling nigh-instantaneous travel between the two. If a portal closes while something is traveling through it, then the subject will either be wholly ejected into one end or if impossible due to one reason or another, severed in two. Can only conjure a single pair of portals simultaneously. [color=b9b5fa]❖[/color] [b]Fate Bond:[/b] Intertwines the strings of causality between two separate individuals. If a bonded creature receives an effect, then the same will be applied to its pair. Can only work on creatures with a soul and no more than a single pair simultaneously. [color=f68192]❖[/color] [b]Void:[/b] Basically a larger version of Vacuum, this one can affect a volume of space as large as an adult horse. [/indent] [color=b9b5fa][b]Skills:[/b][/color] [indent] [color=f68192]❖[/color] [b]Magical Erudition[/b] [color=b9b5fa]❖[/color] [b]Metamagic: Silent Spells[/b] [color=f68192]❖[/color] [b]Agelessness[/b] [color=b9b5fa]❖[/color] [b]Dremora Sense[/b] [color=f68192]❖[/color] [b]Diplomacy[/b] [/indent] [color=f68192][b]Faction:[/b][/color] [i]Tearmoon Coven[/i] - Melisande is affiliated with the Tearmoon Coven, a society of Lilim (and their husbands or more rarely, wives) under the rule and guidance of the Matriarch, chosen by popular vote upon the death or abdication of her predecessor. While there are multiple covens scattered across the world, including Arrowfell, the Tearmoons are the most prominent among them. They're a little over a thousand members strong and host some of the best arcane practitioners in the region. [color=b9b5fa][b]City:[/b][/color] [i]Tearmoon Glade[/i] - The patch of land dominated by meadows and rolling hills that the coven claimed as their ancestral home, dating back to centuries old. Though they're mostly self-sufficient due to the Lilim's talents in the arcane, they aren't xenophobic, in fact, it's the exact opposite. Due to how their race propagates, a Lilim can only bear Lilim daughters and as such, they need men of other races to take in as consorts. Though each coven may differ in their culture and norms, Tearmoons in particular endorse Lilim-focused polygamy in that a Lilim is allowed to have multiple husbands (and/or wives, though husbands are preferred) and they do not acknowledge adultery if a husband or wife of a non-Lilim decides to marry one. The latter in particular is quite a controversial practice amongst outsiders as the Lilim's propensity for alluring comeliness means it's quite common for a married person to be tempted to elope on their spouse with a coven member. In Tearmoon, only Lilim can become full-fledged coven members and they all share the same surname, which is the coven's name. People of other races need to be espoused to a member to be allowed to live within their enclave. Members who have come of age are encouraged to venture out of the glade, both to gather life experience and find a potential spouse to bring back to the coven. Aside from providing services related to magic and alchemy, causing marital problems to non-Lilim women and men, and generally functioning as a self-sufficient enclave, the coven maintains neutrality in political affairs... until the Glasic Fields' sudden introduction into the region. Standing at the foremost of this newfound ambition is Matriarch Jezebel and her appointed agent, Melisande. [color=f68192][b]Assets:[/b][/color] Arcane services, alchemical products, and... a popular emigration destination for individuals (mostly men) preferring an easy, docile life as a consort. [/indent] [/hider] [/quote] I love your CS! The inclusion of Dremora is right on point. Do you have a way to point out on the map where you would like Tearmoon Glade to reside? Or you can tell me how many day's travel it is from Hathforth, and in which direction, and I can add it. I only have a slight issue with the spells. Vacuum and Void sound like instant-kill spells if positioned at the head. How strong is the force? Is there a way we can make it so it's not instant-kill? [quote=@twannyman] Alrighty Image up finally, didn't really find something I wanted so took something that was okay [/quote] The image looks great! Thanks for adding it.