[quote=@Letter Bee]
[@swordandpens], I'd insist on one more paragraph because I want to read more of what you've written, but if you really want, I'll give Approval One. 

I do want to see more of your writing, though. For personal reasons.
[/quote]

I have expanded his bio and switched some awkward word choices, trying to stay in line with the foundation I set out before. I hope it's satisfactory!