Cathy - that was beautiful. I loved the descriptions and your writing is very visual. It tells me a lot about Thalia, that dream. And using a dream is a good technique.

I notice, Thalia's biggest fear seems to be the loss of her family. I am assuming that is bigger than seeing the revolt fail for her. That's an interesting angle.

Can I ask you to edit your post just once before I induct you as the first member? See if you can weave in her physical appearance and describe her garb without it sounding forced. You have very clearly showed me Thalia's weakness - her fear of failure, of seeing her family and friends executed. Show me a bit of her strength. And I don't mean skills like fighting or speaking, but things like her resolve, her mettle. Again, see if you can weave it in. Need not be too long. Just a little bit.

However, I am fairly sure you are awesome. And I like the name Thalia.