Co-GM speaking! We'll go into more detail tomorrow if you'd like, but suffice to say that is definitely rejected and we'd prefer if you started over from scratch. You seem to have misunderstood how Dolls work, for one thing (they are quite corporeal, living things; the only reason conventional weaponry does not work against them is due to them being inherently supernatural), which would make the character completely unusable even without all the other problems. Sorry.