[quote=Sukui] -snipped due to the enormous amount of stuff- [/quote] Before I say anything, I'll say that this guy seems interesting. Of course, there's always me, who likes to give feedback (even to myself). Also, one of my character utilizes plasma, though he is actually purposefully using a nerfed version. It's cool to have a sun-based character, though! :D [u]I will say, however, that I highly disagree with HylianRose accepting the CS the way it is with only the Yatagarasu part changed[/u]. I'm being very serious here, and here's why. --- [u]Important Stuff[/u] -First things first, I'd like to immediately address the human form. And I'll put this out: [indent][i]I don't like his weaknesses.[/i] While I know that all characters need to offer some sort of counterplay, the fact that Isse can't even run for five straight seconds means that [i]characters can basically kill him off when nighttime comes[/i]. This roleplay is certainly not all about killing, but the extreme severity of this weakness is not something I'd recommend at all. It offers only a single source of counterplay in terms of combat, which is to chase after Isse once nighttime comes. I would like this weakness to be less severe, as well as some modifications to the next words of advice I have.[/indent] -In contrast to Isse's weakness, Isse's Human Form powers (not the spells) offer no counterplay [u]at all[/u]. [indent]He can slap a whole ten-centimeter concrete wall, which is basically saying that if he [i]punches[/i], then he would be able to destroy at least ten [i]more[/i] centimeters. Humans can easily die just by colliding against concrete hard enough (assuming that they have no defensive or recovery moves), but having Isse have a natural strength buff that allows him to be that concrete is a pretty unfair. Getting tired out is a weakness anyone can have, so something more specific would be appreciated.[/indent] -This is where the thing I'm concerned most about comes in: [i]his powers[/i]. I'm not trying to being harsh (or offensive ^^') at all when I say this, but [u]Burning Scourge is the most overpowered spell right at the moment.[/u] [indent]I'm not sure what it means when it says "burns through," but from what I could tell, it's a lightsaber-version of a whip, meaning that it cuts through everything. There is no tradeback either, meaning that he could apparently use it for a very long time. I'd rather actually have this ability be completely scratched out, but if you can find a way to lessen its insane impact, then I'll gladly accept this particular ability.[/indent] [indent]Heavenly Sunbeam sounds pretty dangerous and cool, but the fact that it's immensely powerful [i]and[/i] you can move it as well is... not good. Judging by how it leaves behind a "burned earth" behind its trail, it's basically saying that it could burn someone to death. It's cool and freaking wicked, but not for a place where [i]students are still learning[/i]. A change to this would be appreciated. Plasma Bolt is a power I'm actually willing to accept because there's a clear side effect, but a tone-down would be nice.[/indent] -I actually understand and like the Yatagarasu being powerful. [indent]However, I won't accept its current conditions. A week-long recovery is pretty drastic and understandable due to the sheer power of the crow, but [i]things like Halifax Explosions are something I'd like to avoid as much as possible[/i]. He breathes plasma, he blows up multiple orbs of these plasma, they [u]all[/u] contain [i]half[/i] of the Halifax's power, and the thing I felt extremely worried about is how [i]this actually improves[/i].[/indent] [indent]First things first, I'd like the Halifax part to be scratched out because... well, Canada. A different wording for the description would be nice. The Yatagarasu form [b][u]needs to be heavily modified as soon as possible, [i]because it seems as if Isse doesn't even need to learn any more things to utterly destroy the entire main cast here.[/u][/b][/i][/indent] --- The personality and background, I had no issues with at all. And he seems like a character who has a major tradeback when it comes to his powers at day and night. Here's the summary of what I'd like to see get fixed: 1. Lessen the severity of his weakness, and tone down his Human Form's powers. 2. Rework the Burning Scourge ability and Yatagarasu Form. 3. Make him... feel more like a student who's still learning. I literally feel weaker than him in every aspect. I, by no means, have nothing against this character, but it seems overpowered and too combat-related right at the moment. And if Isse actually begins improving with his abilities' conditions like this, then the fourth dimension might be obliterated or something.