[quote=Sundered Echo]
Obviously it is WIP, and so some of these things you may already have plans for, but there are a few areas you will need before we can accept the char.Firstly, you are applying for a Sith Lord, which means you will need to tell us how he acquired that position, as it is not given (or otherwise acquired) without good reason.Secondly, I presently see little reason for why he would want to join Nyiss' cause. If anything, she is quite against the destruction of anything. In this case she is trying to preserve and make something useful from the Jedi, but she is also known for the creation of a variety of other Force related artifacts and beasts via her alchemy and science. By the same token, with what we currently know of your char, Nyiss would not particularly want him around.The feel we get from this character is a bit like a . While that isn’t a bad thing (in fact, done right, it could make for interesting side-plots), the impression we get so far is that he’s very balanced mentally. There’s very little room for him to grow in anything other than skills. This RP is almost as much about growing the characters’ personalities as it is about telling a story. With someone who is 100% certain about his position in relation to the light and dark side of the Force, why would he be interested in exploring the differences between the two? How would you imagine his interaction with pure Jedi, fallen/falling Jedi and the darker among Sith affect his view?Also, he seems to be in possession of considerable combat skill. Seeing as the ship is approaching Imperial Space, strong warriors are not what Darth Nyiss would first seek. Besides, while there’s nominally peace between the Empire and the Republic now, there are lots of worlds the treaty of Coruscant forced the republic to abandon, which in turn are being gobbled up by the Empire. If he’s a strong warrior, the Dark Council would want him to help with that.
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Hmm, thanks for this. I think based on this I was probably taking my character in the wrong direction, I'l alter it now.