[OOC] [Discontinued]

[KoL]

I'll look at CSs later and everything, guys. I just wanted to tell you all that I added some NPCs of the Guard that you may interact with if you want to. They are here: http://www.roleplayerguild.com/posts/4035172

[TheWendil]

I just wanted to tell you all that I added some NPCs of the Guard that you may interact with if you want to. They are here: http://www.roleplayerguild.com/posts/4035172

@KoL

Shame on you for not using a certain flavor of caramel.

[KoL]

<Snipped quote by KoL>

Shame on you for not using a certain flavor of caramel.

@TheWindel

Actually, I plan to, I just didn't do that yet.

[TheWendil]

Actually, I plan to, I just didn't do that yet.

@KoL

Shame on you for keeping the masses in suspense.

[Mega Birb]

@KoL
Viola and Sagant are gonna have history, I can already tell.

[KoL]

@KoL
Viola and Sagant are gonna have history, I can already tell.

@Mega Birb

Ho? That they are, I'm sure. Especially when the Guard are supposed to be recurring NPCs and even accessible as guests once in a while.

[Themerlinhawk]

@KoLAre these guards human or elves? given their lack of ears

[TheWendil]

Unfortunately I'll have to back out of this for a number of reasons. Though I'll still keep an eye on this. Farewell for now.

[Mega Birb]

Unfortunately I'll have to back out of this for a number of reasons. Though I'll still keep an eye on this. Farewell for now.

@TheWindel

cri

[TheWendil]

cri

@Mega Birb

I might join back but it would be with someone new. Depends.

[duskshine749]

Reed Tallis

Name: Reed Tallis
Age: 22
Gender: Male
Race: Human
Height: 5'11"
Weight: 175 lbs

Appearance:


Character Concept: Put simply, Reed is the guy you go to when you need someone found, dead or alive. Whether it's bringing someone in or making sure they're never seen again, Reed is your guy. He's very skilled with a bow, and in a pinch can bust out his dual scimitars to fight in melee should his position be compromised, or someone just walking down the street decides to pick a fight. He's an excellent tracker, and his affinity for air magic gives him some nice abilities for getting his job done. He can use the winds to increase his arrow accuracy and distance, he can run on water and up vertical surfaces for short periods of time, and when running he can touch ground for just a second before floating for several seconds and repeating that process. Reed has also spent much of his time learning to enchant his arrows with other types of magic, such as ice, fire, and light. He never could get the hang of darkness magic, and earth magic is totally beyond him as one would expect for an air magic user.

Combat, Abilities and Skills: Reed is very stealthy, very good at tracking people, and is most comfortable as far away as is reasonable while still being able to track the person and make his shot. Reed is also pretty good at mental math, especially geometry, allowing him to make complicated shots in the field and play a mean game of darts or pool at the guild hall. Reed also has an ocarina he is rather good at playing.

Equipment and Inventory: Quiver with 60 arrows, some backup bowstrings, his bow, his swords, ocarina, a small notebook with notes on whomever he has been tracking, and a locket with a picture of a man and a woman, who he assumes to be his parents.

Other:

Sample Post/Introduction: Reed had been sitting in the tree for hours, and he could remain there several more. The job was simple enough, take out the couple, by any means necessary. Easy for him, he even had his attack plan set, if the couple was close enough together he could probably get them both with a single arrow, with help from the winds of course. If they separated he would go for a few fire shots to coral them before finishing the job.

He heard a noise and took up his position, they had arrived. Reed sat quietly, the wind was almost still, even better for his shot. The couple was walking side by side, perfect, Reed wouldn't have to waster arrows, one shot two kills. He leashed his arrow, calling on the wind to make it accelerate to pierce them both, then they both turned to face him. Reeds head felt light, "no, it can't be, not you." It was his parents, the people in his locket, but that was impossible, they weren't the ones he was tracking, and now an arrow was about to kill them both. Reed lost his balance and fell, tumbling to the ground, nothing making sense.

The scene shifted, he was a small boy, in a burning building. He could see shapes in the blaze, his parents. Reed tried to stand but he couldn't, he called out but his cries were silenced by a wooden beam falling above his head. That was when he woke up in bed in a cold sweat. Reed walked to the bathroom to splash some water on his face, "that was a new one, I've never almost killed them before." He grabbed a drink before heading back to bed, hoping his next dream wouldn't be so eventful.

[Themerlinhawk]

Guess we'll start with the volatile one.

[KoL]

I'll update things here later, as soon as I'm off work, or really if I can get some time in a few hours.

[Themerlinhawk]

@RoflsMazoy I'll respond when KoL has responded

[duskshine749]

There we are, writing sample has been edited in

[Mega Birb]

@duskshine749 Edgy.

@KoL He may have Eris beat.

[KoL]

Ok, then, another set of reviews inbound.

@PentagonWhite: Accepted.

@duskshine749: Accepted as well. It would help me greatly if you placed you CS in a hider when you add it to the character tab.

@The1Rolling1Boy: Better, but not there yet with the writing style. Let me give you a couple more recommendations. 1st, remove those asterisks. You don't need them to indicate a narration/action on your text, as anything that's not between dual quotation marks, is automatically taken as narration in normal writing. Serious, that's the #01 problem, a vice that is confusing and useless. 2nd, add punctuation, you went through the whole paragraph without using a single period. How people are supposed to read that when they don't know when a sentence ends and the other begins? I hope this helps you figure what proper prose writing is.

[CelticSoldier]

Right, I've posted IC. I've not been very active around the OOC, so if you're surprised I'm here...surprise! Hopefully I'll be more active as we move away from CSing and into the story. Let's go!

[Themerlinhawk]

@KoLso I don't know if this is my fault for not making it more clear but Avi's face is hardly rugged ^^' infact the character sheet plainly refers to his face as "fine" I'm not normally a stickler for character appearance but it's kind of important that the character come off with atleast lyrics mildly deccent looks. This is all just for future reference.

[KoL]

@KoLso I don't know if this is my fault for not making it more clear but Avi's face is hardly rugged ^^' infact the character sheet plainly refers to his face as "fine" I'm not normally a stickler for character appearance but it's kind of important that the character come off with atleast lyrics mildly deccent looks. This is all just for future reference.

@Themerlinhawk

Sorry, I let the sailor archetype fool me for once. Either way, in Claudia's case you can consider it yandere-vision, hehehe.