@DealdricWell, before any further evaluations of your character, I have to say that we don't take fandom based PCs. Mythology can be used as a theme but other fandoms not.
The reasoning is simple: This isn't a crossover RP or anything similar.
You are however encouraged to rework your character, cleaning any fandom elements as well as explaining some of the assumptions that your CS has, such as knowledge of her race, technology and background. Because all of this is very, very vague at the moment, relying only on others knowing the source material you used as base for this character.
Another, even more important note is to use blank lines between your paragraphs to make the sheet readable.
When these two issues have been addressed, we can work on evaluating your CS again.