World Warriors: The Nomadic Fist [A Quirky Fighting Game Inspired Roleplay Reboot]

[Bartimaeus]

nvm

[Savo]

@Dead Cruiser looking at a couple of things though, it doesn't add up that she has never fought a nomad before. Here's a brief excerpt from the Nomads and Ki section.

"The nomad has become a staple of global pop culture in the last century or so. he name 'nomad' refers to a wandering warrior with fantastical powers, a vagabond who, for one reason or another, travels the world seeking new fights and new challenges. They have epic showdowns, they participate in international martial arts tournaments, and they are features in movies, TV shows, and airport paperbacks. On Earth, there are superheroes, and supersoldiers, and ki-wielding doctors, but none of them have quite captured the public eye (or been as heavily commercialized) as the nomad."

And a part of your backstory.

"As a result, Makoto was a somewhat rebellious youth. She enjoyed gambling and other mild delinquent behavior, often skipped classes, and spent her weekends in nearby cities trying to pick fights with tough-looking passerby."

If she went to nearby cities, wouldn't she have known about these martial arts tournaments and all these amazing and wacky fighters? Wouldn't she try to search for a nomad to fight? Regardless, until I see a revision on her fighting style, moveset, and weaknesses, I'm going to have to reject Makoto for now.

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@Lmpkio no problem, but to correct something small... you mentioned if there was a fire type nomad by him he could switch elements. I would say it's more like he tricks them into lighting up the environment with their fire in any way possible, through leading their attacks to certain items (i.e. something like a large puddle of oil) and so on. Also, I will say the reason I said Earth was default is because he could pretty easily access it in most environments.

Regardless, that's all I wanted to say, but glad I could help out.

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Will get to the rest later, midst of class.

[Lmpkio]

@Lmpkio no problem, but to correct something small... you mentioned if there was a fire type nomad by him he could switch elements. I would say it's more like he tricks them into lighting up the environment with their fire in any way possible, through leading their attacks to certain items (i.e. something like a large puddle of oil) and so on. Also, I will say the reason I said Earth was default is because he could pretty easily access it in most environments.

Regardless, that's all I wanted to say, but glad I could help out.

@Savo

Makes sense if they are opponents.

But alas, I believe I made the necessary changes to my character. I think he's ready. :D

[Dead Cruiser]

@Savo Makoto is from the backwoods of Japan, so it's wouldn't think it's unreasonable that she hadn't encountered a nomad before. Or perhaps she has, but they made have been weak or scummy nomads (what respectable warrior would pick a fight with a high school girl?), that she managed to surprise or overwhelm.

I'm not sure how you expect me to revise it, given that your sole criticism seems to be how strong she is. I've told you exactly how strong she is: quite strong in some areas, but generally middling overall. She's a rushdown fighter that mundane humans don't stand a chance against, but she lacks technique, forethought, and endurance when fighting nomads.

[Savo]

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Makes sense if they are opponents.

But alas, I believe I made the necessary changes to my character. I think he's ready. :D

@Lmpkio

I'll review him once more when the thread goes up in a few hours; don't forget to get your approval from all three of us as well. If all of us see nothing wrong, you can post it in the character sheet section.

@Savo Makoto is from the backwoods of Japan, so it's wouldn't think it's unreasonable that she hadn't encountered a nomad before. Or perhaps she has, but they made have been weak or scummy nomads (what respectable warrior would pick a fight with a high school girl?), that she managed to surprise or overwhelm.

I'm not sure how you expect me to revise it, given that your sole criticism seems to be how strong she is. I've told you exactly how strong she is: quite strong in some areas, but generally middling overall. She's a rushdown fighter that mundane humans don't stand a chance against, but she lacks technique, forethought, and endurance when fighting nomads.

@Dead Cruiser

I'm just going to condense this all into a hider.

Hider

For the first paragraph, didn't your own backstory state that she always was the one who tried to pick a fight with others? Eh, whatever, that isn't important. What's more important is the next paragraph in which you talk about my criticism over her being strong. You have described her as having overwhelming offense of unmatched speed and devastating power and have stated her defense is almost impossible.

The first special attack I've seen is described as being enough to take out her opponents with a single punch. With it being compared to a cannon ball punch from a battle ship. I'm pretty sure none of the current characters, much less can pull off something like that. While you could argue against me saying that I'm irked that she doesn't have similar power to other characters, she has unmatched speed as stated by you. So basically, she'll most likely one hit KO most if not all characters. Has anyone I listed so far as examples have the ability to stand up to her? But I digress.

Lets look at Black Hole. She and another character have the same attack. What does this have to do with anything? It's better to explain after they are both compared side by side.

■ Black Hole

Verga hurls a projectile of crackling gravity, then detonates it at will. When a Black Hole detonates, anything loose within ten feet is sucked towards it and dealt crushing gravity damage. Once they reach the center, the target immediately goes free. However, Verga is also affected by this attack, and has to time the Black Hole to ignite while she herself is out of range. If succesfull, it can interrupt combos and create an enormous hole in an enemy's tempo, opening them up to further attacks. Black Hole has one shot per hour.

■ Black Hole

By focusing all of her strength into her grip, Makoto can create a localized distortion in gravity. Enemies that try to escape her are sucked back in toward her, and projectiles aimed at her allies are diverted to bounce off against her harmlessly.

There's quite a large difference between each one. One deals damage, one drags people close to her. However, the even bigger difference is that for the former, the user can also get screwed over by it in the process and can use it only once per hour. Why? Because she's trying to supplement herself with stronger and powerful attacks to make up for her slowly decreasing ki and other things I won't get into detail that revolve around her pride. But once more, I digress.

One move can be use as much as possible and one move has to be carefully used. Moreover, the strength of the attacks can also tell us a bit about the strength of the user as well. Verga, the character I mentioned, while is strong, has a limited amount of times she can use this powerful ability. While she isn't mine, I assume this is sort of taxing and plays into why she can only use it per hour.

Makoto's fist is so strong that when she puts all her strength into her grip, she can create a localized distortion in gravity that drags enemies and projectiles towards her. Moreover, projectiles bounce harmlessly off her. Ok, so projectiles probably aren't going to do jack against her I'm guessing. She has the strength to not only pull people towards her by clenching her fist really hard, but she will no sell projectiles.

Which I can understand, but since I'm taking that to be a general thing for all projectiles since nothing has been stated otherwise...

Some moves she has because shes strong... lets just skip to the super moves.

Black Meteor Crusher and Black Star Destroyer. Lets start with the first. Her fist has the power to split Mt. Fuji in half. By that standard, not a whole lot of Nomads are going to survive against her, let alone probably be able to dodge that. If anything, she'll probably kill most of the cast inadvertently... and moreover I'm pretty sure what I consider as the "boss" characters don't even have that kind of strength to pull off.

And now, the Black Star Destroyer... she claims if misdirected could destroy the earth. By that standard, she is above every single fighter that will be posted, including most, if not all of the boss characters from the very start. You said she claims it could and considering that she almost split Mt. Fuji in half as described, as well as said hopefully, I'm going to take it word for word since there has not been a single thing to make me think that she might be anything less short of the best fighter on the planet from the very start.

You made a point saying she lacks technique, foresight, and endurance when fighting other nomads. However, you have also said she is a rushdown. Rushdowns are characters are characters who get in close fast... but usually don't have great defense. She can no sell any sort of projectiles as far as I know and you've described her defense as impossible.

At her strongest, she can obliterate the earth possibly. You may say that others can wear her out in battle through dodging, deflecting, or enduring the strike. Here are your own words.

In battle, Makoto exerts such an overwhelming offense of unmatchable speed and devastating power, that defense is almost impossible.

@Dead Cruiser

Dodging or deflecting? If she has unmatchable speed and strength, how might someone be able to deflect? Enduring isn't exactly a great option either.

Given that she has only rarely had a battle that lasts longer than a single strike, Makoto is completely oblivious to this weakness.

@Dead Cruiser

All of her battles that haven't been against her grandfather haven't exactly lasted longer than a single strike. You claimed that she probably fought against weak or scummy nomads who picked a fight with her if there were any nomads in the city. You have said that mundane humans don't stand a chance against her. I raise the claim that most, if not all nomads can stand a chance against her. She almost hit so hard that she split a mountain in half.

Is it even possible for any of the listed three characters in the interest check even stand up against her? If so, how? If you say they could deflect, dodge, or endure, you've already said that her speed is unmatchable, her defense is impossible, and her strength is devastating. The thing I want you to revise is her fighting style, move set, and weakness to make it so she is on par with other nomads, so that it isn't so one-sided in my eyes.

She's staying rejected on the grounds that she, just in general is too powerful for any "boss" character or normal character to be deemed nothing more than possibly a fly to her. Her weaknesses mean nothing when she has the ability to one shot a regular nomad. This is my final decision. Foresight, endurance, and technique don't matter when she can no sell their attacks and defeat them in one or maybe two strikes due to being overwhelmingly swift and strong. Rework her to make her not so overbearingly strong with her attacks, defense, and speed, and post her in the thread that's coming up.

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With that said, @Valor, @Bartimaeus, and @A Lowly Wretch. I have to apologize that I haven't gotten around to setting up my review of your characters. I was hoping to do it before completely setting up the main ooc thread, but as it turns out that might not happen since the main thread is coming up soon. Please post your complete character sheets there.

[Bartimaeus]

ehh..I think ima have to retract my interest, as i'm currently in an Open world sand box, plus 3 other RPs. too much on my plate i think. sorry for that

[Savo]

ehh..I think ima have to retract my interest, as i'm currently in an Open world sand box, plus 3 other RPs. too much on my plate i think. sorry for that

@Bartimaeus

I just saw your pm. I'm sorry about that, I didn't see it until a few minutes ago. I understand though and I'm sorry I never got around to properly reviewing your sheet. Regardless, good luck in your future endeavors dude and hope to see you around some time! And sorry for the ping and this one too.

[Savo]

Alright @A Lowly Wretch @Lmpkio @Valor @Dead Cruiser @DracoLunaris, enough beating around the bush. The time is finally here and your characters stories begin here! Get ready for a fight or a bizarre adventure, because...

Is open!... also, the title is clickable.

[Lmpkio]

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I'll review him once more when the thread goes up in a few hours; don't forget to get your approval from all three of us as well. If all of us see nothing wrong, you can post it in the character sheet section.

@Savo

Of course. *thumbs up*

[Dead Cruiser]

@Savo I can see the issue how, and it's you're reading too literally into what I wrote in her CS. As I've mentioned previously, much of that is meant to be parodic, jokes essentially. I thought that by elucidating exactly how strong I meant her to be in my previous posts that you would understand that what I wrote in her CS were exaggerations. She can't literally destroy Mt Fuji, that's all hype. I'll admit that this is a problem of my own short-sightedness, as I was just trying to have a little fun while writing her. For the sake of ease, for now ignore all of my hyperbole in her CS and consider this to be her power level:

@Savo By Nomad standards, she's pretty good, definitely remarkable in terms of sheer physical ability, but is far from the end-all-be-all.

@Dead Cruiser

[Savo]

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@Dead Cruiser

Too literally then. Sorry then, I took the parodic version a bit too far in my mind based on what she could do. Since I have a better baseline level, like really above average but not near being the greatest, that gives me a better understanding of her abilities.

Move her to the main thread for the full review, as for now I'll just simplify my two current problems and get back to you in the thread with the full explanation. The weakness she has and the descriptions. I know what you said about hyperboles, so I'll get to you on it in the main chat.

[redbaron1234]

@Valor
Hello Necron! While I dont mind the reference at all, I do have a few concerns. In his backstory you mention that he was part of a race that waged a war for an ancient machine god, and given his age it sounds like he was part of a major (if his 3-4 digit kill count is anything to go off of) war in the late 9th century. This kinda conflicts with what we have going for the Alternate History aspects of this RP. Namely that the broad strokes of history are the same as our reality, just with ki using individuals. The Boxer Rebellion had wire fu but was still put down, Robin Hood was a ki infused archer, etc. Hell even Margot's backstory basically puts her family on the front lines of French history. Thus having such a major war in the middle ages conflicts with that idea.

I am willing to keep that war happening at that point in time if you could elaborate how the Machine God's army was stopped, and maybe go into more detail as to how widespread it was. Another simple idea would be to make him much older and make his age vague beyond "Mythically old". While I doubt that a war of this scope would be forgotten even if it happened in the late 800's AD, I would buy it being something that happened in prehistoric times or earlier. Ultimately you are going to have to massage the war into history a bit.

Fighting Style and Moveset wise, Malus is a Mighty Melee Glacier. Hard hitting, and can take a hit, but slow as hell. I like this a lot, so far it is novel to this RP. My main two issues are living metal and the shield. The effect of post battle regeneration is fine but I would put some clear limits on how effective it is in battle. Speed, extent of healing, concentration, 'charges' etc. I prefer healing in battle be fairly limited. Similar deal with the shield. For a character that has a weakness to zoners, he has a pretty hard zoner counter. I would like to see something like him having limited mobility or offense, or having a 'life bar' to the shield.

[redbaron1234]

@A Lowly Wretch

Okay, Long ass backstory but at least I know you can write. One quick formatting note. In order to get the horizontal lines to display properly, make sure to remove the space to make them display properly.

The other big point is that I feel you should move his powers to the special moves section, and make them explicit moves. I think that having someone whose main schtick is sustaining power is fun, though I do request that you explicitly state that Al needs to maintain concentration or something to heal. 5-10 seconds us a long time in a fight, after all. Aprt from that, if you are comfortable with him having no special or power moves, I am fine with it too.

[BayRat]

-Didn't realize the ooc was up-