[OOC] Athalia Academy

[NaraK]

FaithsRose said
It's a risk we're willing to take :P Besides Driving Park's got a post up ready for you to reply to xD1800 OOC posts? O.O Wow we talk a lot...

Oh, you haven't seen me talking a lot yet...

On another note, I'm gonna go work on my fanfic. I need to hone my Humor skills there.

[Sukui]

Still working on editin' that?

[NaraK]

Sukui said
Still working on editin' that?

It doesn't say it anymore, though. o.o

[Driving Park]

FaithsRose said
It's a risk we're willing to take :P Besides Driving Park's got a post up ready for you to reply to xD1800 OOC posts? O.O Wow we talk a lot...

There's an RP on this very subforum that has over 13,000 OOC posts and almost 2000 IC posts. I think we're fine :P

[FaithsRose]

Driving Park said
There's an RP on this very subforum that has over 13,000 OOC posts and almost 2000 IC posts. I think we're fine :P

I reckon we could break that given time xD

[Asuras]

Theme of Ciercelt

The Ciercelt Company is a band of warriors and mages from across the world with one mission in mind; the elimination of the dark and strange from the world to preserve peace and safety amongst those who are otherwise oblivious to their existence. While centered around hunting and vanquishing these forces, Ciercelt also facilitates the rehabilitation of them as well, though obviously less so than their former methods. Hidden behind the scenery of politics, religion, and the history of the world, they have for countless years preserved the knowledge of countless secrets strewn about the globe. Their soldiers are created from the sons and daughters of families associated with the organization, trained from birth to carry out the Ciercelt's deeds.

The Ciercelt Trio are a group of three "sisters" all belonging to the Ciercelt Company, and having grown up in each other's presence, are quite connected and familiar with one another despite being of different lineages. All three attending common public high school before entering Athalia Academy, and thus are much moreso suited to non-supernatural company. Nevertheless, due to their training, they do not find it difficult to flourish on its campus. While their intentions seem as noble as any other student's, the Ciercelt Trio were sent to the academy to serve as sentinels for their faction; a great number of supernatural and dangerous beings are found within its walls, and thus the danger they present could make itself known at any time. The Ciercelt Company would not pass up an opportunity to put their warriors amidst its ranks.

Avelynn

Name: Avelynn Ciercelt
Age: 18
Gender: Female
Height: 5'9
Weight: 130 lbs
Species/Race: Human
Powers:

Ciercelt Hunter - As with every other Ciercelt warrior, Avelynn possesses a wide array of skills suited to the investigation, tracking, and defeat of dark creatures and entities. She is well-versed in the effects of dark magic, though does not know how to utilize them. She can identify countless creatures at but a glance, as well as track them through multiple means. Her skills in fighting them are well-suited all the same, able to go toe-to-toe with most supernatural entities she comes across, albeit with effort.

Lawmage - Avelynn's magical skills are focused on binding, immobilization, and prevention of attacks in the first place. She is capable of casting spells that cement targets to the ground or other surfaces, or ones that slow their movements. All of her skills are based on order, the prevention of violence and damage before it can occur. Lawmage spells are able to be averted if the target is willful enough, or simply physically strong.

Healer - Avelynn is also skilled in the reversal of physical and magical damage in allies, able to heal individuals at a pace much faster than common medical attention could achieve.

Weaknesses:

Unlike her attending sisters, Avelynn is much less adept at using physical weaponry, and is thus at a great disadvantage at closer ranges.

Lawmage spells are slow-moving, and thus easily dodged.

Magic relies on mana, which is the physical equivalent of stamina. The more magic she uses, the more mana she exhausts.

Study:
Math, Cooking

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Valentine

Name: Valentine Ciercelt
Age: 17
Gender: Female
Height: 5'5
Weight: 110 lbs
Species/Race: Human
Powers:

Ciercelt Hunter

Duelist - Valentine is adept in the usage of lighter melee weaponry, such as side swords, rapiers, knives and daggers, and some spears. Her skill in them is unparalleled among her peers, rendering her practically invincible when facing another carrying the same weaponry. The use of these weapons has required her to train her agility, leading to her being a cut above her sisters in terms of speed and nimbleness.

Teleportation - While not as skilled in magicry as her sister Avelynn, Valentine possesses an adeptness in utilizing transportation and portal magic, allowing her to traverse great distances quickly, or short ones in the blink of an eye. This ability is limited to her line of sight, and cannot be used consecutively without expending large amounts of mana she possesses.

Weaknesses:

What Valentine makes up in speed and deftness, she lacks in toughness. Valentine is quite frail, and so cannot take quite as much punishment as her sisters, and can tire easily.

Valentine is timid and shy, finding it difficult to integrate into groups without the comfort of being nearby already familiar faces, such as in her sisters company.

Study:
English, Art

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Mary

Name: Mary Ciercelt
Age: 17
Gender: Female
Height: 5'7
Weight: 120 lbs
Species/Race: Human
Powers:

Ciercelt Hunter

Paladin - Mary is the epitome of a bruiser, executing strikes with violent and apocalyptic force. Wielding normally cumbersome and heavy weapons is but child's play to her, and she utilizes them as deftly as her sister Valentine uses a rapier. She does not tire in their use, seemingly inexhaustible and implacable in combat.

Body Mastery - Mary is immune to the effects of mind-control, haemokinesis, and telekinesis; she possess ultimate and full control over her body, down to the very cells in her body. This allows her to instigate faster regeneration of her body, though is by no means capable of shrugging off fatal wounds, or persisting after numerous grievous afflictions. At best, regeneration for her is twice as fast as that of a normal human's.

Weaknesses:

Focused entirely on her combat skills with the sword, Mary has forgone the study of magic, and thus is inept in its usage.

Due to her combat tactics, Mary is at an ironically disadvantageous state when in close-combat, to a degree. Her focus on offense leaves her defense lacking, making for an easily stricken target.

To actually use her regenerative powers effectively, Mary must first become inactive, essentially napping. Monitoring and control over cells to properly regenerate takes utmost concentration, and works poorly when going about doing other things.

Mary is easily angered, of short temper and little patience.

Study:
Science, PE

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No character slots for me left.

[Theobromine]

So... We needed more females and good guys/heroes. I think the numbers are being filled in quite nicely. xD

[FaithsRose]

Right have moved Crash out the way ^^ since its pretty much daylight outside I'm going to try that sleep thing xD have fun! I'll probably be back on later :)

Very true :D yay to more good peoples xD

[Theobromine]

FaithsRose said
Right have moved Crash out the way ^^ since its pretty much daylight outside I'm going to try that sleep thing xD have fun! I'll probably be back on later :)

See ya later~! :D

[NaraK]

Theobromine said
So... We needed more females and good guys/heroes. I think the numbers are being filled in quite nicely. xD

I still don't think there's enough heroes, actually. One of the villains is just overpowered to the core.

It's feedback time. Also, do note that I give feedback through an non-favoring way, so please read what I have to say with attention. (I'm not always going for sh-ts and giggles)

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Mary Ciercelt

I would like to know how heavy these weapons she carries are, because I don't think she'll be lifting stuff like school buildings and using them as a regular weapon... right? o.o'

Her weakness of not being able to use magic is seemingly mitigated by the fact that she can take damage pretty well. I recommend that this particular section is somehow balanced, because having both of these can be unfair for magic users.

Body Mastery is by far one of the strongest, yet way too powerful abilities so far. It's basically saying that several magic users who rely on hemokinesis, telekinesis, or mind-control (which no one literally has right at the moment) cannot be used on her, The very fact that she has this AND the power to use immense amounts of power without consequences could make up a particularly ridiculous combination. My recommendation is to completely scratch out one of these, or somehow balance the two to give others some room for counterplay.

She also has Ciercelt Hunter, which means that, so far, she has insane defense, fairly high offense, and the ability to see through her opponents and do something pretty... unfair. I recommend you to look into this and try balancing the skills out, because so far, this character has a generally unhealthy kit right at the moment. I'm pretty sure it'll be easy for you to edit them out, though.

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Valentine Ciercelt

Nothing in particular is actually overpowered about this timid girl, but some clarification on her use on "mana" will be appreciated to clear confusion.

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Avelynn Ciercelt

Arcanist is a tadbit overpowered if you add in the fact that Avelynn is, from what I could tell, a sniper and has no energy sources like mana. The library should be toned down, or an energy source should be made to provide some counterplay. (This may not have been your intention, but I like to see more details on what consequences there are in using a library of an entire arsenal of spells)

If she can use magic bolts with great efficiency and speed, I doubt that her ability to snipe should be accepted as well. Basically, she can fling down a rain of energy bolts on people that cannot see her without becoming exhausted. It's pretty... unfair, I guess. The fact that these bolts seemingly have a high damage output begins to put it in the path of an overpowered ability.

I personally do not think her weakness of being weak in close-range combat actually exists if she can:

1. Do equal damage with her magic in any kind of range.
2. Set up traps and fire fast magic bolts at a fast pace.
3. Analyze her enemy and know how to dodge pretty much most of their attacks.

I feel like this is not actually a weakness, but more of a general analysis. An actual weakness would really be recommended.

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Summarization

Mary: Needs a rework of balance in her kit. She has advantages in nearly everything, and provides no counterplay for both magic users and physical fighters. And Anger does not qualify as an actual weakness if she can't be easily taken down anyway.

Valentine: No problems here. Just a clarification on her mana system would be nice.

Avelynn: Needs a rework of abilities in her kit. She does not have an actual weakness (like Mary, who can pretty much avoid fatal damage with Ciercelt Hunter) and can easily avoid it by using unmentioned abilities in her "library of spells" (a summary of what's in the library would be nice). Horizon Mage + No Energy System makes her an unfair opponent in nearly all circumstances when combined with her lack of weaknesses.

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Very interesting concept, and a huge (pleasant) surprise as well! Some balancing and tweaking would make me gladly accept these characters, but we'll have to wait and see for the changes. :)

I hope all three of them make it in soon. This party's going to rock really hard soon!

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EDIT: POSTING AT IC TOMORROW. I'm pretty tired.

[Asuras]

Mary Ciercelt

It more or less glorifying things like greatswords and stuff. Nothing like lifting a car, or a school for that matter. She'd be using greatswords and other larger weapons.

I can remove the tankiness then.

Realistically body mastery acts as a reiteration of the fact that god-modding is against the rules. I'd be more cautious of allowing a blood-bender or mind-controller in than analyzing body mastery. Think of it as the abiltiy to direct your body to do anything you can think of, and anything your body can feasibly do. Her strength is no more than was described beforehand, and body mastery does not increase it.

Tracking opponents, identifying them, and being able to fight them is a big step away from "seeing through an opponent".

Others put in little tid-bits into their Weaknesses section as well. Weaknesses that have nothing to do with combat.

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Avelynn Ciercelt

Mana was simply just not mentioned. She needs it. It's an energy source. Mana is essentially just the same as stamina is for physical activity; the more you exercise magic, the more mana you use. She doesn't have an infinite well of it.

In any case, I've decided to rework her anyways. The other concerns have become moot now.

[NaraK]

Asuras said
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Hm. I may have worded several things incorrectly (I've yet to master English lol). And I was assuming that the weaknesses were directly related to combat due to their combative nature, but if that's the case, then I'll gladly accept those weaknesses.

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While Mind Control might actually tempt me to blacklist someone (jk, I'm not that cruel XD), there are many kinds of "blood-benders". For instance, in Deadman Wonderland, there are characters that use their own blood to create makeshift weapons, and those count as hemokinesis as well.

Sorta like this

You probably meant that blood-benders who affect OTHERS' internal blood are overpowered, and that is something I absolutely agree with you on (though there's already a villain that's capable of doing that in a way). However, I kinda wish that you described just what kind of hemokinesis it blocks. :D (to, like you said, reinforce the rules like a boss)

I understand the telekinesis part, obviously. The only thing I'm mainly concerned about is the high defense power she has, which I assume that you will be editing soon based on your last post. :D

I misread the Ciercelt Hunter description, and I apologize for that.

I think Mary would definitely be acceptable if the changes are finalized! :D

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If Avelynn DOES have a mana source, then I definitely appreciate that! Still, making it fully present in the CS would be appreciated to avoid confusion.

If you are doing a rework on her abilities, however, I will simply disregard what I said earlier and prepare to analyze again.

(btw, are their personalities and backstories things we need to figure out in the roleplay? just curious on this part, actually, because it's optional anyway. :D)

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@Asuras: I'm loving the amount of work you're putting into these characters! They're unique additions to the roleplay, and I definitely want to see them in action as soon as possible. :D

[NaraK]

NEW UPDATE! (i did not see the update you made to your Sheets, Asuras; my bad lol)

I ACCEPT THE HUNTERZZZZZZZ

BUT...

the gm...

Yeah, we just have to wait for Rose to come online to add your characters to the Character Listing. Unfortunately, that might take a few hours, so screw it and go on ahead to introduce your characters, Asuras.

Welcome to Athalia Academy, btw! >:D

[Asuras]

Yea, I meant blood-bending others. She can't exactly be immune to someone bending their own blood. xD

Now she (Mary) just has slightly better regeneration, no longer with high natural defenses.

Avelynn has also been updated with a different set of powers. Hopefully this one is much more acceptable. Edited in the mana explanation as well.

Their personalities have been forgone because I'd rather their actions speak for them. Their histories are pretty generic, so I didn't think it was all that necessary to give them one, nor would it be interesting to read.

[NaraK]

Asuras said
Yea, I meant blood-bending . She can't exactly be immune to someone bending their own blood. xDNow she (Mary) just has slightly better regeneration, no longer with high natural defenses.Avelynn has also been updated with a different set of powers. Hopefully this one is much more acceptable. Edited in the mana explanation as well.Their personalities have been forgone because I'd rather their actions speak for them. Their histories are pretty generic, so I didn't think it was all that necessary to give them one, nor would it be interesting to read.

Avelynn and Mary (along w/ valentinezzzzz) have been accepted. I'm liking Avelynn a lot more not because she's less offensive, but because there's that chance to have her be the supportive backbone of the Hunters, aye? :D

I will be looking forward to figuring out their personalities in the roleplay. I am an evil mastermind, after all. >:D

[Asuras]

Wait so you want me to continue without Rose's approval? .-.

[Sukui]

Aye so IC plox

[Animelover_princess]

i got to head to bed
it's 2 am here
won't probably actually sleep for awhile but still
have to at least make the effort

night you guys

[Aeris]

Good mornin' gais.

[Destinyfailhorror17]

Ohayo to you!