Sixsmith said
There should totally be an equivalent."Galaxy Chasers, Episode IV: A Renewed Conviction"Boom. This world's pop-culture has been established! Kind of.
Hah, 'Galaxy Chasers.'
Rockette said
Ah, Prisk, I feel the necessity to apologize for taking my time in completing my character. I think I managed to get myself caught up in researching on what I wanted her to be exactly and how she'll pan out over the story! I jot down my own notes in regards to character and plot points as well. But I've finished her Limit Break at least, but if I feel that it may be a bit much in conduits of power, then it probably is. I haven't asked for your criticism, yet, but if time provides it I'd appreciate it if you to take a look over what I've conducted thus far.I won't be able to change and finish her until I get off work tonight however, so I require just a little more patience until I finally get done! c:
No need to apologize. There is plenty of time.
I’m sure that you get compliments regarding your prose on a regular basis. It is a bit too purple for my taste, but I’m not going to prevent you from writing the way you do. However, keep in mind that
this kind of English may not be within everyone’s comprehension—I just need to say it for the record. But, then again, this is the ‘advanced’ section.
You are good on personality and biography.
Your limit break somewhat reminded me of Vincent’s limit break in FFVII. It felt as if it was obscure due to the prose, but when I picked out the parts that actually describe what it does, it was quite clear anyway and anchored in two elements: fire and dark. As it stands now, limit breaks cannot really be ‘overpowered,’ as all of them instantly kill all enemies anyway. It’s just an aesthetic choice. So do not worry about that.
@Blackwell, Tenish, Ozerath: I've completed my notes for your characters. Please post them in the
Character Depository.