[OOC] RWBY: Deep Blue

[Pyromania99]

Just making sure. Also, not that I'm doing it now, at all, but if Francesca isn't nice to your bird, I apologize for her. ;P Don't think badly of me.

[Forsythe]

haha i hope she won't :P I jsut saw her profile and was like BANG, ideas forming :D

[Scarifar]

Should the ship land yet, or are we still waiting for responses n stuff?

[Pyromania99]

I think we are possibly waiting on one more, I just posted a meh post though I suppose it is what it is. (note to everyone, I think all my work is crap so this is nothing new.)

Forsythe said
haha i hope she won't :P I jsut saw her profile and was like BANG, ideas forming :D

Do you know how much I've been wanting to use the word, "birdbrain" in the last few days? ;P

[Forsythe]

you need to get on skype, I have plans for you >:D

[c3p-0h]

Name: Nahbi Cho

Nickname: N/A

Age: 16

Gender: Female

Race: Human

Appearance: Link

Personality: Nahbi can almost always be seen sporting a wicked grin. She's not always the easiest to get along with, what with snide remarks and sarcastic personality, but if she decides she likes you enough, you can be sure she'll stick with you through thick and thin – not that people tend to decide they like her. She enjoys messing with people, but if someone else is doing something entertaining, she's more likely to sit back and enjoy the show rather than join in and contribute to the mess. If she's not involved, she can't be held accountable, right?

Weapons: Scatter and Flare

Dual blades embedded with dust, that are incapable of changing form. For melee battles, Nahbi uses them in tandem, using fast, spinning movements. She uses their dust abilities for ranged attacks: when slashed, Scatter shoots out gusts of razor-sharp air, to either cut or blow enemies away, and Flare creates a line of fire when stabbed into the ground. The two can be used to augment each other's abilities to create a fiery tornado, though it's very difficult to control.

Semblance: Omni-sight – Allows Nahbi a 360º field of vision, though only sustainable for a few minutes. She typically only uses it when fighting a group.

Strengths: Resourceful and creative, fast, packs a punch, intelligent

Weaknesses: Stand-offish, poor defensive abilities, doesn't cooperate well, has trouble with authority

Theme Song:

[Henzukaya]

c3p-oh, unfortunately... It seems that kind of character has been done multiple times before, with both the personality, and the Semblance. That Semblance, or at least the teleportation bit, is already in use by one, maybe even two other people. I would suggest going for something that would be a little more matching of your personality.

As for personality, I say this purely because if two people with an almost exact same personality like that (dick headed, constantly doing stupid shit, and pestering others) were to even be in the same room, it'd be just too much chaos. I think the others would agree that if said characters were to combine forces, it'd be too much of a headache for everyone and said characters would be more prone to being murdered by teammates than most.

Aside from that, it seems good so far.

[harinezumikouken]

Is this RP still accepting?

[Henzukaya]

harinezumikouken said
Is this RP still accepting?

Its pretty squished, and there's room for one more, as well as a waiting list (which will probably need to be implemented soon), but yes

[pyre101]

So, I will be trying to post in 9-10 hours, because I have to work at movie theater. I will review what is happening. Also, if somebody wants to do something with Kael that will not kill him, mortally wound him, or permsnetly maim physically, mentally, or emotionally, you may use him.

[harinezumikouken]

Henzukaya said
Its pretty squished, and there's room for one more, as well as a waiting list (which will probably need to be implemented soon), but yes

May I post my CS then and take that last spot?

[AliceZaru]

Alyssa in cat ears and casual outfit of which she is wearing now.

MEOW

[AliceZaru]

This picture makes me think of Franseca

[Henzukaya]

harinezumikouken said
May I post my CS then and take that last spot?

You're completely free to try.

[harinezumikouken]

Henzukaya said
You're completely free to try.

Very well, then reserve that final spot for me. I'll be posting a CS here very shortly.

[harinezumikouken]

Name: Kuhaku Kuroshi

Age: 18
Gender: Male
Race: Faunus (Black Tiger-based)

Personality: Quiet to the point of avoiding social interaction and refusing to speak unless absolutely necessary, he keeps to himself and prefers to work alone. His disdain for interaction extends so far that he constantly wears a terrifying metal face mask with vicious teeth and fangs to deter anyone from speaking to him. Not only does this mask hides most of his facial expression, but it also serves the practical purpose of quieting the sound of his voice and mutes the sound of his breathing. He especially avoids any contact with Humans, showing slight preference in dealing with those of his own kind.

Weapon: "Jack"

He wears a pair of metal claw gauntlets that have a few unique properties. Within the knuckles of his gauntlets are pressure plates that whenever he strikes something, actuates an internal pneumatic piston within. The pneumatic piston then drives forward a massive metal spike that can puncture with enough force to crush bone and pierce armor. One punch = Two punishing hits, with the spikes retracting and resetting immediately after punching out.

Attached to the spikes are strong chains that wrap around the entire length of his arms and connect to each other behind his back in a mechanical winch, acting as a harness. Aiming his gauntlets, he can fire the spikes attached to the chains and embed them within whatever he fired them at. He can utilize this to maneuver himself or as a sort of ranged attack, retaining the ability to retract his spikes and chains. As a final touch, his gauntlets are socketed with Dust Crystals that he can swap and change at will to utilize any range of elemental Dust ability in conjunction with his Semblance, a rotating band on his gauntlets allowing him to quickly switch between elemental types.

Semblance: Trap Glyphs - With his touch, he can leave behind a 'glyph' of varying size depending on its required application. 'Charging' the glyph with the Dust inlaid within his gauntlets, he can set up hidden elemental traps up to a maximum of 5 glyphs at any given time. The glyphs fade away and disappear after 100 meters, their maximum effective range. They also require manual activation which is done when he pops/cracks a corresponding knuckle on either hand. Explosive Fire Glyphs to burn and destroy. Lightning Glyphs to paralyze and stun. Ice Glyphs to slow and freeze, and etc.

Strengths: Physically strong, fast, and agile he excels in close hand-to-hand combat. Typically hiding within the shadows, he'll observe his opponents and attempt to learn their weaknesses before waiting for the most opportune moment to strike. He'll then attempt to rapidly close the distance between his target and take his target out as quickly as possible, in as few strikes as possible. He prefers setting up complex traps, ambushes, and using guerrilla tactics to fight from relative stealth. He is analytical, intelligent, and patient when it comes to fighting, carefully planning out his attacks for speed and efficiency. He'll even attempt to read and predict his opponent's future moves. As a Faunus, he has a heightened sense of sight, smell, and hearing, giving him all the tools he needs to truly live up to the title of future 'Hunter'.

Weaknesses: He lacks endurance and is unable to sustain himself over drawn out conflicts which is why he prefers to end fights as quickly as he can. Because he specializes in hand-to-hand combat, he has nearly no way of combating enemy fighters at range. Requiring him to close the distance between him and his quarry before he can effectively engage them. Other than his 'Charging' of his Semblance's Glyphs with Dust, he has no knowledge of utilizing Dust in any other way. Randomly, he is also subject to intense fits of blinding rage where any planning and strategy goes out the window should anyone touch a nerve or push the wrong button with him. Mostly, he tries to keep his emotions and thoughts in check, being calm and cool as best he can. Other than the metal of his gauntlets, he wears no other armor and has no other defensive measures. Should an ambush or sneak attack fail, he can no longer resort to using any stealth-based attacks or tactics. The metallic composition of his equipment make them extremely noisy the moment he engages in combat after laying in wait.

[All credit goes to Nitro+Chiral for the character artwork and to Ubisoft for the weapon design!]

[c3p-0h]

Nahbi's CS has been altered.

[AliceZaru]

[LokiLeo789]

*Yawn*

[Henzukaya]

Harine, WOW. Damn, I like your character. Although there isn't a physical description or image of your character, unfortunately. If you provide either, then you're in.

c3p-0h said
Nahbi's CS has been altered.

The personality is all right now, but its still a little off, I don't know why. Probably just me. Anywho, about the Semblance, its over powered. I mean, bam. Your opponent plummets to the ground, catching them off guard, doing damage upon landing, and maybe even stunning them or something. Something like this, even if heavily nerfed, is still just a plain old no. I suggest readin through what Kiddo said at page 4. Here's pretty much what it said.

Balance In All things

When creating a character, it's important to keep a few things in mind. I'm only going to cover two of these, but these aren't only two important parts.

First, and a point that often gets missed, is a well-defined core identity for your character, or, as I like to call it, the character's fantasy. This is what you want most of all out of your character, and is the last thing that you will give up for them: you're willing to let everything else about your character change before this pillar. That's how you know what the fantasy of the character is, and it's important to focus on this when creating the character.

For example, let us imagine that you're creating a character, and you decide "I want my character to be a stealthy ninja who can see the future and can electrocute people with his ENERGY EYES." I hope that you read that and go "hmmmmmmm, okay?" because that's purposefully an idea of a BAD character. This character doesn't have a clearly-defined fantasy, or one thing that we're supposed to focus on. Imagine if you were allowed to play such a character: in order to be balanced, he would have to be a stealthy ninja only from 12:30 to 1:00, only able to see 5 seconds into the future, and only able to give people slight zaps with his ENERGY EYES, because otherwise he would be completely imbalanced. No one wants to play with or against a character that is indestructible (can see the future), can do whatever he likes (is stealthy) and can unleash debilitating attacks from far away (ENERGY EYES). Without all of the "and"s, and proper counterplay introduced, then such a character would be acceptable.

So let's get rid of "and"s. What do you want from this character? Is the stealthy ninja what's important? Being able to tell the future? ENERGY EYES? Something else entirely that you were going to spring on people later down the road? Pick ONE. That's all you get: now build your awesomesauce character around this pillar. Now he can be the stealthiest ninja, or the most wise fortune teller, or Cyclops, and you have a fantasy to play.

The second point, I already mentioned: counterplay. Let's imagine that you decided that ENERGY EYES were super important to you, and you made Dirk, the master of ENERGY EYES. He's able to unleash an unstoppable laser of electricity at whatever he looks at, and it becomes stunned instantly and completely destroyed in a second. Pretty cool, right? We even named him Dirk because it has something to do with ENERGY EYES (hypothetically).

Well good job, he's nice and cohesive. I like how you tied his lore into his super power and he's cooler than a fridge. But... he's Overpowered. Imagine playing against Dirk for a moment: you are the Evil Badguy, and Dirk has come to stop you for Justice and Energy Drinks. You laugh diabolically as he mows through your minions and decide to wait to nuke the Red Bull facilities until he gets there to witness it, since Dirk once made fun of you in third grade. And then Dirk enters the room, and you attack each other... but wait, as you try to do ANYTHING he looks at you and you're stunned and then you die. The end. Why, in order to do anything against Dirk, you'd have to be immortal, or made of metal, or have the world's strongest Plot Armor. And if you do manage to subdue him, you better believe that in the OOC the Creator of Dirk is complaining about how it makes no sense because you should have been stunned and then destroyed, and he feels cheated, and the GM feels frazzled because he had to fight Dirk and the Creator of Dirk, and everyone else is bored because all of their characters haven't gotten to do anything because Dirk has done everything by looking at it.

See how that's just not fun? This is why Balance, with a capital 'B', is so important. You want Dirk to be a cool guy with a cohesive design who has some nice powers, but has to group with some other cool guys to destroy Evil Badguy because Evil Badguy actually puts up a challenge. If you aren't looking for that, then RPing isn't for you: go write some fanfic or something. RPing is about the group, and that means that everyone on the group should be on about-equal footing.

So how do we achieve balance while keeping Dirk's awesomeness in tact? Counterplay is the answer. Counterplay is the way that a hypothetical enemy can exploit your weaknesses in order to bring about your defeat: you have it, your buddy George (master of Sneaky Ninja Things) has it, and Evil Badguy has it. George can be defeated if you turn on a blacklight, because then his stealth doesn't work... oh, and he's also super weak when he's not stealthed, AND he can only be stealthed for like a minute at a time, and then needs a break. But when he is stealthed, and the enemy doesn't have a blacklight, George kicks major butt! Evil Badguy is allergic to cheese and has a weakspot on his back.

These weaknesses and disclaimers make these characters fun to play against, because they have weaknesses that can be exploited to defeat them. They're fun to play, because their weaknesses mean that they can have strong powers when their weaknesses aren't exploited. It's your job to do this with Dirk.

Now, that's not to say that counterplay is the answer to all things balance: for instance, you could have a character who can one-shot the world but he has to channel for a minute and he dies if someone sneezes on him, and that's STILL NOT FUN TO PLAY AGAINST (or as). It's important to keep in mind that key point: you want to create a character who is not oppressive to play against. If you can create a character with a power that people won't conceivably argue about the use of (and which is still fun for you to use), then you've hit the nail on the head.

Perhaps Dirk has a 1-minute cooldown on his laser sight? Perhaps it only stuns people at range, and he has to get in close for it to destroy them? There are lots of ways to trim back power while keeping the fantasy alive, and if you're in a situation where your power can't get any weaker and still be fun, then there's still hope: before you scrap it, consider if there's counterplay that you can add elsewhere that lets the power be okay with everyone. Maybe your ENERGY EYES can incinerate from close range, and the cooldown is a minute, but it's still not fun to play against, since if you stun someone all you have to do is get close to destroy them. Maybe add new counterplay: if you take 15% of your health in damage, you lose concentration and your ENERGY EYES go on cooldown! Suddenly, the enemy can survive if their minions attack you, and a team of enemy players can use teamwork to stop you from killing their poor medic. That can be fun!

Get all that down, and you'll be cranking out fun characters and you'll never have to see another person go "I think your character is stupid" ever again! Yaaaaayyyyy!

All in all, I suggest a semblance that complements and/or combines suitably with your character.