Sorry about that. Is there anywhere that looks good to you? I'll try and help as much as I can since I asked you to change it in the first place.
... Speaking of that sort of thing, I'm really having a hard time figuring out how to involve Kiyomi here. Mostly because I'm just not sure where would be a good place to put her."Kiyomi, something really giant just popped out of the Warp. Get all the high power guys and go kill it."
"Oh for Spark's sakes - GET OUT!" he booms as he grasps Charlotte with his new hand and begins walking to the entrance of his lab.So Shockwave just got angry and raised his voice. Shockwave, whose primary personality trait across the various Transformer universes is having a complete and total lack of emotion and being ruled by cold, hard logic. Hell you even defined his personality as such, makes sense since it's his main feature beyond the physical aspects of "purple, gun arm, boxy faceless head". So, you know, I just feel like this is acting out of character. Especially since knocking some stuff around hardly seems enough to upset Shockwave. It took the Dinobots turning up to ruin a plantary scale experiment that might've saved the entirety of Cybertron on purpose, and over a petty grudge of "you showed us up", to make him feel upset in IDW, and it passed rather quickly, for example.
Maybe a little I kinda agree. I'll get rid of the GET OUT part then. Edit: On second thought... I got rid of that whole sentence completely."Oh for Spark's sakes - GET OUT!" he booms as he grasps Charlotte with his new hand and begins walking to the entrance of his lab.So Shockwave just got angry and raised his voice. Shockwave, whose primary personality trait across the various Transformer universes is having a complete and total lack of emotion and being ruled by cold, hard logic. Hell you even defined his personality as such, makes sense since it's his main feature beyond the physical aspects of "purple, gun arm, boxy faceless head". So, you know, I just feel like this is acting out of character. Especially since knocking some stuff around hardly seems enough to upset Shockwave. It took the Dinobots turning up to ruin a plantary scale experiment that might've saved the entirety of Cybertron on purpose, and over a petty grudge of "you showed us up", to make him feel upset in IDW, and it passed rather quickly, for example.
*Breathes a sigh of relief that the mention of Cinder was not noticed, or probably dismissed as Charlotte nonsense* Let the evil plans continueMaybe a little I kinda agree. I'll get rid of the GET OUT part then. Edit: On second thought... I got rid of that whole sentence completely."Oh for Spark's sakes - GET OUT!" he booms as he grasps Charlotte with his new hand and begins walking to the entrance of his lab.So Shockwave just got angry and raised his voice. Shockwave, whose primary personality trait across the various Transformer universes is having a complete and total lack of emotion and being ruled by cold, hard logic. Hell you even defined his personality as such, makes sense since it's his main feature beyond the physical aspects of "purple, gun arm, boxy faceless head". So, you know, I just feel like this is acting out of character. Especially since knocking some stuff around hardly seems enough to upset Shockwave. It took the Dinobots turning up to ruin a plantary scale experiment that might've saved the entirety of Cybertron on purpose, and over a petty grudge of "you showed us up", to make him feel upset in IDW, and it passed rather quickly, for example.
*Breathes a sigh of relief that the mention of Cinder was not noticed, or probably dismissed as Charlotte nonsense* Let the evil plans continueI strongly suspect people just aren't noticing you because you've leaped onto the "villain has a secret lab" bandwagon without giving people a chance to get in on the action.
OH, no, I was referencing this part in the Charlotte post.*Breathes a sigh of relief that the mention of Cinder was not noticed, or probably dismissed as Charlotte nonsense* Let the evil plans continueI strongly suspect people just aren't noticing you because you've leaped onto the "villain has a secret lab" bandwagon without giving people a chance to get in on the action.
"Ciiiiinnnnder! I waaaaaaant my cheeeeeeeeeeeese from the cheeesemaaaaaker we stooole at the planet *hic*"Not my big Cinder thing. Don't worry, she'll be returning to the SE HQ in my next post for character interaction. Besides, it probably got dismissed as usual Charlotte rambling, so I'm fine with it.