[OOC] Coruscant Sacked: Aftermath

[Themerlinhawk]

@Ellri yes please, love Fallen to death but I get nervous when it comes to joining in progress RPs so I'm already kind of bouncing up and down like a ball with this one

[Ellri]

we'll look over it with Echo tomorrow. he was busy today.

[Flagg]

Any word from Flagg lately? Kind of waiting for a response from him PM wise...

@Bright_Ops

Apologies for the radio silence folks. I'm still here. @Bright_Ops, I pmed you regarding our collab. Let me know if what i proposed works for you.

[Themerlinhawk]

we'll look over it with Echo tomorrow. he was busy today.

@Ellri

As you wish, Im flying home from Turkey today so I wouldnt expect to here from me until the 17th but who knows you might before then

[Ellri]

We could really use a Jedi Rescuer or two now.

The WIP sheets are stuck with neither @My Lalia nor @Hexaflexagon responding and @bigscreech being away.

There are currently three Jedi rescuers, only one of them non-GM, and that one needs someone to interact with.

[Themerlinhawk]

We could really use a Jedi Rescuer or two now.

The WIP sheets are stuck with neither @My Lalia nor @Hexaflexagon responding and @bigscreech being away.

There are currently three Jedi rescuers, only one of them non-GM, and that one needs someone to interact with.

@Ellri

Im going to need at least 48 hours for an idea and to get my life back to normal but I might be able to help with that

[Ellri]

excellent.

[SimplyJohn]

I'm not really going to be in a position to start a second character right now, just got some work writing comic scripts and so will be on a limited schedule. Shouldn't be too difficult to keep going with Som though, especially at the current pace of posts. :)

[Ellri]

No worries, SimplyJohn.

What sort of comics?

[OSIEIPPO]

Just want to check in and let you guys know I'm still around. I live in Texas and the weather has been horrible lately. Anyways, my pace has slowed but not completely stopped on my character. Sorry for the delay.

[Bright_Ops]

Sorry for the delays Flagg. Will work on something soonish.

[Ellri]

No worries, @OSIEIPPO.

Here’s a preliminary review, @Themerlinhawk
@Sundered Echo and @Fallen may have additional commentary.

Name = good. Species = good. Age = good. Gender = Good.
Faction != Jedi Temple. Faction = Jedi Order.
Rank = Good.
Captivity status = Acceptable.

Appearance != Good. Appearance = Missing.

Race = subgroup of species. Traits described are unique to entire species. Notable Race Traits = Incorrect label.

Flaws = lacking in description and attribution to character. Otherwise within acceptable parameters.
Skills = solely related to combat. That = implausible. Jedi = trained in many skill areas.

Trakata = Minor specialization of lightsaber combat. Trakata = integrated into other lightsaber forms.
Trakata != a full lightsaber form.
Lightsaber combat form involving multiple blades = Niman. Jar’Kai = term for wielding two weapons.
Wielding cortosis baton != common. Wielding cortosis baton = needing justification in bio.
Many others = trained in Trakata. Connections to Alat = Present?
@Sundered Echo = Capable of expanding on this.

End of biography = compatible only with prisoner. Rest = compatible with Jedi Rescuer. Option = worth considering?

[Themerlinhawk]

No worries, @OSIEIPPO.

Here’s a preliminary review, @Themerlinhawk
@Sundered Echo and @Fallen may have additional commentary.

Name = good. Species = good. Age = good. Gender = Good.
Faction != Jedi Temple. Faction = Jedi Order.
Rank = Good.
Captivity status = Acceptable.

Appearance != Good. Appearance = Missing.

Race = subgroup of species. Traits described are unique to entire species. Notable Race Traits = Incorrect label.

Flaws = lacking in description and attribution to character. Otherwise within acceptable parameters.
Skills = solely related to combat. That = implausible. Jedi = trained in many skill areas.

Trakata = Minor specialization of lightsaber combat. Trakata = integrated into other lightsaber forms.
Trakata != a full lightsaber form.
Lightsaber combat form involving multiple blades = Niman. Jar’Kai = term for wielding two weapons.
Wielding cortosis baton != common. Wielding cortosis baton = needing justification in bio.
Many others = trained in Trakata. Connections to Alat = Present?
@Sundered Echo = Capable of expanding on this.

End of biography = compatible only with prisoner. Rest = compatible with Jedi Rescuer. Option = worth considering?

@Ellri

I'm sorry but a lot of that means nothing to me. I sort of need full sentences. Some of it i got but some of it is basically gibberish. No offense intended. If you have things you want me to fix you have to be more clear. Somethings i can fix from that but there are somethings in it that mean nothing to me like this: Connections to Alat = Present?, no clue what that is.

[Ellri]

!= is the boolean expression for "not equal".
"Jedi temple" isn't a faction. "Jedi Order" is.
Appearance is necessary to have.

Flaws could use a bit of expanding on how they affect him.

The "connections to Alat" bit is essentially a note that that bit in your bio has potential for being used for connections to other player characters.

[Flagg]

Sorry for the delays Flagg. Will work on something soonish.

@Bright_Ops

No worries, @Bright_Ops. If you need anything from me, feel free to PM or mention me with an @ here.

[Themerlinhawk]

!= is the boolean expression for "not equal".
"Jedi temple" isn't a faction. "Jedi Order" is.
Appearance is necessary to have.

Flaws could use a bit of expanding on how they affect him.

The "connections to Alat" bit is essentially a note that that bit in your bio has potential for being used for connections to other player characters.

@Ellri

Greatly appreciated. I'll get right on the tweaking. Let me know if there is anything else you'd like to see with the character.

As far as the Cortosis goes I can expand on it because it makes sense for the character in my mind so I'll add in the extra but if in the end you don't like it i can remove it. So long as the character concept is fine i can adjust details until Ragnarok. Let me know if you think of anything else. I clean up and repost it

[Ellri]

No problem. The basic concept of the character is good. When there's a clear concept that doesn't go at odds with Aftermath, there's usually nothing wrong with it. The finer details might need improvement, though.

[Ellri]

You lurk, @Heat? You did not hide your presence in the IRC sufficiently.

[Heat]

You lurk, @Heat? You did not hide your presence in the IRC sufficiently.

@Ellri

Wasn't really trying to hide, I pop in and out, if the room isn't very busy I leave. I get bored easily.

[Ellri]

These days, with people popping in, then leaving 18 or so seconds later, it doesn't get all that busy.

when people intend to talk, they'll say someone's name there to ping them.