[OOC] Side Quest - Sword Art Online

[Zelosse]

@Tracyarmav *rubs hands maliciously*

More meat for the grinder, muahaha

[LucasSkylight]

Username: LucasSkylight
Age: 22
Level: 16
Gender:Male
Hair color:Gunmetal Blue
Eye color: Electric Blue
Skin tone: Sun kissed
Height: 5'10
Build: Lean and compact like a runner
Outfit:

Outfit

Primary weapon: 1H Sword and Shield
Skills:
Combat:Piercing, Precision, Thunder touched
Crafting: Weaponsmith, Prospecting

[Zelosse]

There's uhm.. More to the character sheetsm but I can't edit the first page.

I need your current level, two offensive or defensive skills +1 for level 15 / 18 if you are that level

I also need two passive craft passives such as lucky find and whatnot. Check out the character sheet tab and look at the ones at the bottom for a better idea.

[LucasSkylight]

@Zelosse I edited my CS is there any other changes I need to make and thank you for your help.

[Zelosse]

@LucasSkylight good as gold. Welcome aboard !

[LucasSkylight]

@Zelosse Thanks Zel, and a pleasure to be aboard, I am a HUUUGGEE SAO fan...lol

[Zelosse]

Noted.

[DestinyStar]

@LucasSkylight Welcome! :) Pretty much everyone is at the inn in Bull's Run (a townon Floor 1). We're on Day 17 in the afternoon, and preparing to explore a dungeon in the gorge outside of town (unexplored turf unknown to most players). Feel free to jump in wherever is best for you!

[Zelosse]

Ok Doms part is up. Kinda short. Forgive me.

[Ookawa]

Not the best post ever... but I am quite distracted... -.- xD

[Zelosse]

I liked it all the same
now we just have to wait for @destinystar

[BlackPanther]

i shall wait also....because inspiration is failing me >.>

[Zelosse]

@BlackPanther might have forgotten to add it in but dom doesn't want the belt

[BlackPanther]

@Zelosse
aw...okay Ikanus could sell it or take it apart for materials

[LucasSkylight]

@Zelosse Finally working on my First Post Zel, hopefully I can make everyone here proud...lol

[Zelosse]

@LucasSkylight dont worry about trying to impress anyone. Just do your best and stay excellent, dude. All you need to do

[LucasSkylight]

@Zelosse Thanks Zel, the encouragement is greatly appreciated, it is coming along well...I think

[LucasSkylight]

@Zelosse First Post!! Wahoo!!! *fanfare of trumpets and little box appears at the bottom of the screen* "First Post 10g" *Then another box pops up* "Wallwriter = -100g"

Yes I am sorry for everyone who has the poor misfortune of reading my first post as I wrote it on Word then transferred it to here, double spacing made it look much more pleasant to the eye then how it turned out, I will break it up into paragraphs in time...sorry!!

[Zelosse]

@LucasSkylight first critique.

Try to break it up into manageable paragraphs for your readers.

Otherwise they see a wall of text and cringe. Broken up sentence structure is important because it directs flow of character thought and movement in an easily followable way.
The next important thing

Color your speech to show clearly when it is your main character talking and not an npc. Otherwise it might be misread and taken as something else entirely .

Other than that, good hustle bud. Id pat ye' on the arse and tell you hit the showers but I wont cuz that's weird.
So instead I will strike Nenas buns instead.

Well done friend!!

[Tracyarmav]

@PyroDash888 Your post was great! You kept it short and sweet, just like you! :P (well, just like Sapphira really)