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My condolences to the loved ones of the passengers of Germanwings flight 9525.

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Trust me. I'm an engineer (in training).

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I'm going on holiday from the 21st till the 26th of May. Given that it involves camping on an army training ground with no internet I will not be posting then.

Speaking of posts:
@SirBeowulf this is another reminder.
Not to mention how disgustingly hammy and villainous it is to literally announce your invincibility to the enemy.


That just made me think of the Bouncer to be Sundowner.

Hell the 'Red Sun' theme perfectly fits a fight between him and Mokuren... Does he use explosives as body armour as well? It's not like he'd care about the injuries it'd cause him so he wouldn't even need the shield arm things.
Just for the novelty of it I think I'll play Marcus out as a perfectly well adjusted straight man from now on.

His biggest issue will be a lack of confidence, and that's it. No limbs-flying-everywhere bloodbaths or baby eating in his past, no bullies outside of the usual bigger brother ribbing, no traumas, nothing.

Also:
"The Land of Walt" amusement park and shopping mall



Also also:
Oy, @SirBeowulf and @MULTI_MEDIA_MAN you're up in the IC. Marcus just outlined the basic plan, any additions remarks or questions your guys have can be fielded now.

EDIT: Also also also Look what I found~!
Ruby completely and utterly loses it.
I could have sworn I read a translation once where Achilles met and fought with a guy that had an impenetrable skin, who laughed as Achilles hit him with his sword. Achilles responds by smashing the guy's face in (turns out an impenetrable skin doesn't help against skull fractures).

Okay I accept that other entrees probably looked better than mine but dude if you're looking for specifics things like that then you have to tell us you're looking for those specifics. You didn't give a required format or a sense of what you expected in terms of information. Basically you said create a legendary Grimm and you left it at that. You can't give us a task in the Contests then penalize us for doing something if you didn't tell us that we weren't supposed to do it. If you wanted to know folklore about the Grimm, actual fact, and general knowledge then you should have presented us with a sheet that reflected that.

I get why I didn't win (had I been choosing I likely would have gone for the microscopic Grimm myself). We were given no structure to work with so I tried to make mine look like the Intro a 'Grimm's Fairtale' that involved Morpheus. Might I suggest next time making your expectations clear at the beginning of the contest so that some people actually have a hope of fulfilling them.

Oh and for the record most people like to hear feedback on there work so it might be prudent in future to do a write up about each of the entrees even if they weren't the winning ones. Tell why you like them, why you didn't and why they didn't win. People prefer that to good job everyone but I like these two the best.


I did state what I looked for:

Explain how these Grimm got their name, show some of their most notorious acts and give a brief overview of what is known of them.


In a future contest I shall try and emphasise and expand on the criteria by which I judge more. I am sorry I messed that up but I cannot take it back.
I thought Achilles killed the guy with the impregnable skin? Or was there more than one running around in Greek Myth?

EDIT:

Now I kinda wanna know what you thought about Black Mercy. I take it that it's because I made the Grimm in question, the one that's ideally legendary and terrifying, pretty much a pushover and only scary for its implications. I knew that I was probably going the wrong route, but after reading a bunch of Lovecraft I couldn't resist the cosmic horror story route.


Again while I liked the idea my main gripe with it was that it just wasn't really clear how much was known about Black Mercy. How would it even have gotten the name when in the very same piece it stated that it has yet to be discovered by man/faunus?
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Just out of curiosity what did you think of my entry specifically? Specific criticism is helpful for improvement. A pat on the back, not so much.


Two things stood out to me in the negative sense. First off and the chief reason Morpheus did not win was the way it is presented. There is no sense of what would be known for sure IC and what would be conjecture. I just did not get the impression this is what would be what you hear around a campfire, or an interview with a survivor, or even a mission briefing.

Second, and this one is entirely a personal gripe, I dislike humanoid Grimm. That one is in no way a thing you could have known beforehand but due to a number of very poorly written RWBY fics and characters, humanoid grimm have negative connotations in my head.
See the MODA doc. I don't want to give away free strategy tips (no offence Lucius ).
The winner of Contest 9 is @Guess Who!

Primarily this entry won because I believe this is supposed to be a Ragnarok, and that is something I liked most: You took an already existing Grimm and made it terrifying and powerful. Second, I liked the mixture of solid facts and hearsay in the description. Both of these were more than enough to offset the somewhat short nature (compared to the other entries).

Runner up is @PyroDash888 with his/her 'grandmother's story' representation of Deimos. This is most definitively a personal preference and I make no excuses for it. I love myths, stories for by the camp-fire or the hearth, fables and their like.

As for the others you made some very good entries as well: I spent the better part of a day deciding! This was not an easy contest to judge, well done all of you!
Fun fact, the formation Marcus chose is optimised to keep the team in one piece instead of the convoy.

Judging contest entries is hard, but I've chosen a winner and a runner up. Thanks to everyone who participated!
Marcus Goldstein - Convoy escort

“I’ll keep it in mind after I get enough time and resources for a proper overhaul. I have a design ready on paper, but that necessitates an entirely new hull. Prior to enrollment I was happy just getting her to run properly. The original Atlesian design was never meant to carry anything bigger than an eighty-eight mill so I had to overhaul the entire chassis to fit the current one-oh-five mill. This turret? Built completely from scratch, that’s two years of work right there. Don’t even get me started on the nightmare that was automating every single system so I could drive solo.” Marcus replied to Diamond’s comment about a cab. It was a good idea to bump it up the priority list though now that for once he had access to a proper workshop. The situation also helped him get a grip on his urge to swear. He still had no idea where that came from, but it happened whenever he mentally merged with the Unsubtle.

“As for the mission, one second. Our representative should have the very latest intel for us.” Marcus added and popped open the hatch. Just in case he pulled up his own findings on his scroll as well. Once out of Vale they were headed for the south-east, about where the Great Plains starts to run into the Canth Hills. As their guide informed them, the biggest concealment they could expect was tall grass and some old Quartz mesas. Ideal tank country: Anything that could get through the armor would be spotted from miles away. While in return he could vaporise said big things at his leisure. His grin faded and was replaced by a more thoughtful stare once he listened to the recovered radio message. The tidbit about eating hinted towards a Ratatosk swarm, but those could not hope to stop a convoy on that sort of terrain.

On top of that came Diamond’s concerns. She was right in that Grimm tended to leave marks. On top of that, the Grimm of the Great Plains had a tendency to roam about rather than stay in a given place. Vale kept a large number of different of roads open across the plains on purpose: With traffic not forced to go through any fixed place, it was an immediate catastrophe if the Grimm blocked any one route. As a consequence the beasts preferred to wander about in huge swarms, devouring whoever was unlucky enough to cross their path.

It was when she accused Rice of treason that he looked up sharply, though he let her finish.

“Do you have proof that Rice is not to be trusted?” he asked. To leave one’s fellow man to the Grimm was one of the few crimes that still allowed for capital punishment in the field, one that even novice hunters could enact at their own discretion. Though it meant a shitton of paperwork for him as team leader.

“As for the positioning, this was actually planned out. Oswald and Aurellius, you get to go and hitch a ride on the first truck with Rice, while Diamond and I are the rear guard. Oswald has local command up front. Once we’re out of the city we’ll go into the standard open convoy formation.” he explained. That meant at least a good one hundred meters between each truck and finally his own Unsubtle. It prevented the vehicles from all being caught in one go once the ambush started.

“Once the ambush happens the trucks that can will go around and keep moving while we engage. Oswald and Aurellius screen for Diamond and me. I provide long range cover while you Diamond get the most important task: There are two tow cables with grappling hooks on a quick-release latch on the rear of the tank. Hook those onto anything left of the ambushed trucks. Once I’m hooked up I tow it out of the ambush zone while we bail out as a group. Aurellius that includes you.” he said this with a pointed stare. While Marcus was not creeped out by his bloodthirsty teammate, he could not let it get to Aurellius' head.

“Remember, we are not sticking around to kill whatever it is that is doing this. Our priority is to get that town supplied first. Should anyone get separated and unable to get back to the main convoy, you get back to Vale, tell them what happened and get help. Questions and comments?” he outlined his plans. Meanwhile the truck drivers started their engines. Rice was in a hurry it would seem.
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