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Shradinger: Hrm... It might not be any of my business, but maybe I might have a few suggestions of how to better explain your character's powers:

  • First of all, put it under the Energy classification. It basically includes any form of thermal, solar, kinetic or electrical energy manipulation, among other things, which would probably include most of your character's abilities.

  • Second of all, put in a power limit. I'm not necessarily talking about the number of things she can control here, but rather the actual amount of energy she can withstand. Just because a character can absorb the thermal energy from a standard camp fire, for example, doesn't mean they could survive exposure to the surface of the sun. Set a clear amount of Joules your character can channel at the same time, and it should help tremendously.

  • Third of all, define your power's theme more clearly. Generally, characters who end up being rejected aren't necessarily the most powerful, but rather the least straightforward. Try making the overarching theme behind your character clearer. Henry is a lizard. Jake is an illusionist. Lynn has a sentient shadow. What is Paige? Keep things simple. I don't mean to say your powers shouldn't be strong or versatile, but rather that you should be able to define them clearly in very few words. Your description should not need any more than ten words, generally speaking.

  • Fourth of all, add more description. This is the advanced section, there is no reason why you shouldn't write a novel in your character sheet if you want to. Again, like with the third point, keep things simple. The more scattered your description of her personality, skillset or hobbies, the less clear it is what sort of character you are aiming for. Give her a few fundamental characteristics, then build upon them afterwards. Theresa is a sarcastic yet friendly scarf-wearing male to female transsexual who likes hunting and nature. There, I've just described one of the most complex characters in the role play in under a sentence. Sure, there's more to her than this, but those simple pillars give a fairly good idea of her character.

  • Lastly, in regards to modifying your power set, maybe you could instead make her an "Energy Absorber". Simple, easy to understand and well defined. She has this sort of barrier around her which enables her to absorb energy she is exposed to and use it in various ways. If you really want to get fancy with it, tie it in with negentropic principles to explain her healing and plant growing capabilities. "Paige is a goth girl who doesn't fit well with others and can affect the energetic flow of entropy". There, one sentence. She can grow plants, heal, absorb energy and control most of the stuff you mentioned, under the umbrella of a single principle. Like it was mentioned above, I would probably recommend you put a clear limit of how much energy she can manipulate that way at once, however. I would also limit this to strictly physical effects, and avoid venturing into metaphysics altogether.


  • If you need any assistance with writing your character sheet, feel free to send me a private message and I will be more than glad to help you.

    PS: Oh, and by the way, the drinking game of taking a shot every time I write "Character" is still in effect, so break out the alcohol everyone! :D
    Obscene Symphony said
    Ooooh yeah where can I put my character/submit it?


    http://www.roleplayerguild.com/topics/55601/posts/ooc
    "Tekeli-li!" >:(
    "Tekeli-li?" :D

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    "Tekeli-li..." :(
    Yeah, that should make for a fun episode to say the least... xD
    Posted for Daniel. I should have a post up for Saila relatively soon. It will involve the group with Deborah in it, so I'm expecting a rather interesting reaction... :D

    Edit: The disappearing ninja post does it again! >:[]
    :: Daniel Filson ::

    Before the girl could reach over and take the rose, a powerful gust of wind knocked it out of his hand.

    "I regretfully have to inform you that this is no time for romantics, Filson." the instructor's stern voice said. If glares could kill, Danny would probably be lying dead and bleeding on the floor right now.

    Gee, someone's got a stick up the arse...

    The girl he'd been giving the rose to gave him a falsely pouty look followed by a playful wink. He responded by flashing her with a wide, disarming grin, and elected not to press the matter with the teacher further. He was here for learning, after all. Besides, he would have plenty of time to socialize with the other students later.

    The serious kid who'd followed them to the front also introduced himself. "Matthew Detmer or Evans, complete arsenal Omnikinetic, currently in possession of Biokinesis". Danny could tell just from looking at him that he was going to be a real barrel of laughs, just like the the teacher. From the little grocery list of power classifications he'd just recited, he was guessing that messing with him was probably a bad idea, given his demeanor so far. It wouldn't surprise him in the slightest if he turned out to be the level ten in the class.

    They were also joined by another tough looking boy with attitude, Zackary King, a telekinetic, and a chick who looked about as close as you could possibly get to a real life vampire. Creepy. He didn't really concentrate on them too much, however, as he suddenly found himself entranced by the third new arrival, a stunningly beautiful young woman, whom he greeted with an uncharacteristically nervous smile.

    Why the hell am I acting like this all the sudden? he asked himself, feeling slightly confused. He normally never lost his cool in situations like these. However, inexplicably, this girl just made him feel like a twelve year old with a first crush all over again, for some reason. Enraptured by her beauty as he was, he almost didn't catch her name when she introduced herself. Christine Shawly... Or something like that, anyway... It was really, really hard to pay attention with her around for some reason... Come on man, pull yourself together! This isn't pre-school. Stop making a fool of yourself!

    He shook it off and managed to regain his composure. Powers... Training... Right! The instructor quickly checked their names on a list, then adressed them one after the other.

    "Yes, dimensional storage. You've demonstrated it well enough for me to get some information on it." he told him with a somewhat dismissive tone of voice. "What is the largest object you've stored? And by that extent, can you summon the largest object you have in your possession?"

    Letting go of his easy going pretty-boy persona for a moment, he answered seriously:

    "A small wooden cupboard. About forty centimeters wide, if I were to guess. I can't really pull it out at the moment, though, it's way too big to fit through my pockets. I can't really make holes that big yet anyway... It's a bit complicated."

    He moved out of the way as Adam activated targets for Matthew to demonstrate his aerokinetic abilities on. After about ten seconds of concentration, he was able to make them shift them over, although with nowhere near as much finesse as Mr. Blackmore had displayed. Still very good for what was presumably a first try. Grumpy seemed to think otherwise, however, and his face twisted with so much distaste and frustration that you'd think he just realized the steak he'd been eating was once his dog or something. Yeah, probably a good idea to steer clear of that one...

    As Adam turned his attention to Christine, the girl he'd given the rose to earlier introduced herself as Aislin Rose. Funny... he grinned at the coincidence. Apparently she had a power that had something to do with, in her own words, "making environments come to life". That really piqued his interest, and really made him wonder what she meant by that. Did she have a plant based power or something? It would be quite amusing if she did, given her name...
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    I love your character, the image is really quite good... ^_^
    Looking forward to seeing how she turns out...
    I actually think it could be quite fun, and I am not just saying that because I have a character who's main power is essentially just being immune to telepaths... <_<
    It needs a bit of OOC cooperation between writers to use to its full extent, a bit like Red or Deborah, but it could work really well.
    I imagine it would probably result in a very loud but incomprehensible burst of static whenever he does that. I'm guessing he doesn't really spend more than a few seconds (hours) at a time slowed down, so it would most likely result in him thinking like a normal guy most of the time, with occasional jump-cuts which make him skip over to a completely different train of thoughts. Memory readers could probably decode what happened by analyzing him for some time, while thought readers would just get confused at his sudden shift in focus, unless they also have extremely enhanced intellect, in which case they might catch a word or two.

    But I'm not really a GM, nor the writer of a telepathic character, so it's not really my place to say, I'm just throwing that out there.
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