Dead Cruiser

Concordance of Demiurges: Princes of the World (K6BD)

@Peik Yeah this is assuredly dead, though I am mulling over how I could recycle the concept into something more generic and easily accessible.

That said I don't know if Allison's story is exactly small-scale. She meets the Conquering King and has the Key of Kings thrust into her head in the first chapter, and then spends the rest of the story rubbing elbows with the Seven.

Dawn Beyond Tomorrow: A Magitech distant postapocalyptic action-adventure RP

@VitaVitaAR Figures. You know you could just ask me to bounce in a polite PM instead of carrying out this farce about "potential players."

Lanius School of Villainy and Mischief

Rakshasa

Full Name: Rakshasa claims his birth name was "Yaun," but will mention in the same breath, "that man is dead."

Nicknames/Aliases: Rakshasa, Hell's Disciple

Age: 30-something, though he claims to have spent hundreds of years in Hell

Gender: Male

Division: Strength

Powers: Rakshasa is allegedly half-demon, which he claims is responsible for his body's extreme power and durability, as well as his ability to use supernatural demonic martial arts. Rakshasa knows a variety of esoteric martial arts techniques that allow him to perform such bizarre feats as flinging spiritual fireballs at his opponents, running on water, or other strange abilities. He also claims to have the ability to transform into a super-powered demonic state, though the consequence for doing so is that he will be dragged back into Hell.

Description: Rakshasa is very tall and powerfully built, but does not come across as gigantic. His musculature is obviously the product of extreme training, and his body has the toughness and strength of steel. While his features are generally handsome, his expression is usually stoic or dour, except when in combat, whereupon he seems to adopt the visage of a snarling demon. His hair and eyes are burning red and yellow, respectively, and his Ajna chakra is so powerfully trained that it glows through his forehead. When not in his battle attire, his dress sense is best described as "trashy," with undersized tee-shirts and shorts usually his standard fare, as he claims that cold and heat have no effect on him.

Personality: Most people that know Rakshasa casually consider him a terrifying lunatic, constantly rambling about something nonsensical and a hair's breadth from a violent outburst at any time. Those that spend more time with him understand the method to his madness, and find him somewhat amiable. While he is certainly violent, he never prosecutes his violence without good reason, though sometimes his reasoning can seem distorted to other people, and he holds his bizarre sense of honor very closely. He fancies himself a warrior-poet, and often cites koans and proverbs that seem disturbing or nonsensical.

Crush: Kill, Destroy

Skills: Rakshasa is one of the preeminent martial artists on the planet earth, his only peers also supernatural or superhuman. He has studied dozens of different styles and forms, many of which he claims are supernatural or otherworldly in origin. Aside from that he is also a master yogi, familiar with several forms of spiritual philosophy, and is a fairly accomplished vegan chef.

Weaknesses: All of Rakshasa's power is self-cultivated, and he has great difficulty working alongside others. His unpredictability can be a curse as much as a benefit when fighting opponents, as his murderous rage can be set off by strange and seemingly innocuous things. There is also the matter that he claims to be hunted by the forces of Hell, but this is as of yet unproven.

Brief History: To hear him tell it, Rakshasa's personal history is strange and mystifying, but none can confirm if what he says is true or not. He alleges that he was born from the union of a demon and a human woman, and grew up alone in the streets of Mumbai with only the ascetic gurus of the inner city to look after him. It was the depravity of living alone in an urban hell as a small child that Rakshasa claims made him "awakened to violence."

Rakshasa spent his youth traveling Asia, learning as much as he could about how to kill a man with his bare hands, and picking up a substantial criminal record along the way. It was deep in the Himalayas that he heard tell of a mystic master that could teach him the martial arts of another world. This was a ploy, however, as he found instead a demonic cult that used him as a human sacrifice, or so he claims. The next part of his tale is the most outlandish, as he claims his soul was banished to Hell, where he learned of his demonic parentage, and did in fact learn demonic martial arts from the denizens of Hell.

After his escape from Hell, which was an epic saga in and of itself according to Rakshasa, he found that almost no time had passed in his centuries in the underworld, and continued to strive to find challenging battles in the modern world. He provoked many other mystic or spiritual superheroes and villains into battling him, assembling a long list of rivals and enemies all the while. However, in recent years he was contacted by the Headmaster of the Lanius School, who propositioned that Rakshasa become his hand-to-hand combat instructor. A mysterious bargain was brokered, and Rakshasa has since fulfilled this role dutifully. Even so, students usually consider him among the strangest and most terrifying of the school' instructors, particularly when he introduces himself by claiming he will only recognize them as worthy if they manage to kill him.

Dawn Beyond Tomorrow: A Magitech distant postapocalyptic action-adventure RP

@VitaVitaAR The only thing I wanted to mention is that I did not "shift" anything to my snake summon; both it and all the verbiage surrounding it was in the very first draft of my CS. It's fine if you don't want that character, just don't imply that I'm being dishonest when I'm not.

In any case here's a totally different character. I only ask that you read her CS all the way through before asking me to change anything, and be as specific and clear as possible.

Zera, Electromagus

Name: Zera Rallephoron

Age: 29

Gender: Female

Appearance: Zera is an experienced and professional young woman, tall and with strong, long limbs that give her a somewhat masculine silhouette. She has dusky skin, expressive brown eyes, and dark hair in tight ringlets, though she usually keeps her hair tied back while she works. Zera typically wears her magineer's uniform, a red and blue utility jumper, soiled with oil stains and other workplace hazards as it is. She has a tattoo of a dragon coiled around her right forearm, though it's usually covered by her uniform or engineering equipment.

Personality: Somewhat mercurial and unpredictable, Zera can flit through a variety of moods very quickly. While one moment she can be deadly serious and focused on her work, the next she can be bubbly as she excitedly chatters about her current project or research. She's extremely passionate about whatever she chooses to throw herself into, though that passion sometimes expresses itself as days of tireless work in a manic state without food or rest. Her other emotions are just as wild and sometimes explosive, as those who have gotten on her bad side have found out. Truly in love with her work, Zera loves machines and is deeply curious about engineering principles she is not yet familiar with. Though she usually sates this curiosity by disassembling anything she doesn't understand, most of the time she can also put it back together. Despite her mood swings, Zera is very intelligent and knows is one of the best in her field, adept at thinking on her feet and coming up with unorthodox solutions to difficult problems.

Brief Backstory: Zera was born to two loving parents in one of the largest and most advanced settlements in the new world. While she grew up fascinated with tales of adventure outside the city, of artifact hunters and strange monsters, her parents forbade her from leaving the safety of their settlement, and once she came of age she signed up for the city's engineering corps. Zera showed amazing promise, rising steadily through the ranks, and eventually her aptitude for magic granted her training and a position as a magineer, responsible for overseeing the magitech within their settlement's infrastructure. A vital part of what keeps modern-day life civil (for those that live in the cities), magineers ensure that elemental boilers, levitating platforms, and other magitech conveniences continue to function smoothly.

After years of work as a respected magineer, Zera once again began to crave the excitement and adventure that she fantasized about as a child. Years of working in the bowels of cities repairing water mains and flux-power generators had left her longing for the freedom she was sure existed outside the cities. While she merely ruminated on these desires, too set in her ways to act on them, a mysterious discovery in the deepest and oldest foundations of her settlement turned her life on its head. She found an artifact, seemingly discarded in a sub-sub-sub-sub basement, and took it for her own. Seeing this as a sign that she should pack up and start a new life of adventure, Zera submitted a leave of absence to the engineer corps, kissed her mom and dad goodbye, and set off to join up with a band of freelance artifact hunters.

Skills: Zera is a highly skilled and experienced magical engineer. She has comprehensive knowledge of a variety of forms of magical technology, though this surely only scratches the surface of all that exists in the world. While her specialty is civil engineering, particularly electrical engineering, her talents and knowledge are applicable to a variety of different situations, as Zera is adept at improvising and substituting as needed. While her survival skills are admittedly limited, she is a fast learner and is no stranger to uncomfortable or even dangerous situations.

Abilities: As a magineer, Zera is of course capable of using magic. Most of her magic has to do with generating, containing, absorbing, or redirecting electricity, as her engineering specialty was working with the power generators and regulators of her settlement. However she has quite a few other tricks she's picked up in her time, such as having some minor control over metal, heat and fire, sound and thunder, and some light telekinetic abilities.

Equipment: Zera's primary piece of equipment is her magineer's apparatus, a standard-issue device given to each magineer in the engineer corps in her home settlement. Over the years, Zera has customized her apparatus to better suit her needs, and has nicknamed the equipment, "Maverick," and emblazoned it as such. Maverick consists of a copper-alloy gauntlet, and various tubing that connects it to an electro-magical energy tank strapped across Zera's back. The apparatus gives her extremely fine control over her electrical magic, somewhere she can store excess magic energy, and a wellspring she can tap into it as needed. Zera carries a variety of other engineering tools as well, such as spanners, torches, and so on, some of which having been directly incorporated into Maverick.

The artifact Zera found is known as Chemister's Wand: Draconium, and she has yet to entirely figure it out. It resembles a forked staff inscribed with strange runes and gemstones, and as far as Zera can tell it has something to do with elemental magic, or the transmutation thereof. The only function Zera has managed to reliably activate allows Draconium to change one form of elemental magic into another, but its trasmutation only works on fire, ice, and electrical magic. Zera intuits that there are functions to this staff that she has not yet unlocked, but she has not had much time to work on it.

Faction: Though a bonded and unionized member of her home settlement's engineer corps, Zera isn't part of any formal adventuring or artifact hunting organizations.

Dawn Beyond Tomorrow: A Magitech distant postapocalyptic action-adventure RP

@VitaVitaAR It's difficult to make a character that fits into a plot without being allowed to know the plot.

If there's nothing actually wrong with my character why don't we give it a shot and can make adjustments as needed. I can be a good sport.

Dawn Beyond Tomorrow: A Magitech distant postapocalyptic action-adventure RP

@VitaVitaAR What plot is that? There is no overarching plot described in the OP, besides a short mention of whom I am to assume is your DMPC.

He doesn't need a separate group, he can join in with whoever on his quest to save his village. I thought his personal goals were pretty simple and easy to work into everything else.

Dawn Beyond Tomorrow: A Magitech distant postapocalyptic action-adventure RP

Since your ideas are so close to one another, I think it's fair to see both.

@VitaVitaAR

I enthusiastically disagree.

Lanius School of Villainy and Mischief

Darkstar

Full Name: Halen Hubble

Nicknames/Aliases: Hal, Hallie, Darkstar, Starchild (formerly)

Age: 16

Gender: Male

Division: Strength

Powers: Darkstar's powers, inherited through his family line, are the result of his grandfather having been infused with the god particle, giving them the cosmic power of the Big Bang. In practical terms, this means that Darkstar possesses the winning combination of super strength, speed, durability, and flight. While he is still getting the hang of his flight powers, Darkstar has a strong grasp of his more basic abilities, and is an absolute wrecking ball in combat. Besides those abilities, Darkstar can also create and manipulate a variety of different cosmic energies and materials, such as stellar matter, dark matter, and so on, which he uses in various attacks and techniques. Darkstar's grasp of this power is somewhat lacking, and he can only reliably manifest a few basic types of cosmic matter.

Description: Darkstar is a self-described "late bloomer" and is short for a boy his age, barely 5'5". He is thin, with not much musculature to speak of (though his tremendous strength has nothing to do with his muscles), and his features are soft and still androgynous. His hair is dyed black from its usual strawberry blond, and his shaved and styled into a punk coif. Darkstar has a few earrings and other piercings, though he has a scar over one of his thick, dark eyebrows from where his eyebrow ring got ripped out last year. His big, baby-blue eyes and childlike features result in most people thinking he is adorable and difficult to take seriously, which Darkstar does his best to combat with punk clothes such as studded leather and combat boots.

Personality: A classic case of the troubled and misunderstood teen, Darkstar isn't truly evil, but has a lot of misplaced aggression, frustration, and personal trauma. He has felt as though he's spent his whole life pretending to be someone he isn't and sees his enrollment at Lanius as a chance to cut loose and be himself. When in a good mood Darkstar is friendly, generous, quick with a joke, and enjoys being the center of attention. When his mood sours, he lashes out at anyone in striking distance, and loathes attention.

Crush: N/A

Skills: Thanks to his sidekick training, Darkstar is competent in hand-to-hand combat even without his prodigious strength, and has basic training in hacking, forensics, engineering, and other practical skills. Of particular note is how much information about astrophysics and similar cosmic phenomenon has been drilled into his head by his father. In a less practical sense, Darkstar plays the guitar, sings, and can draw and paint. He likes video games but only relaxing ones because he tends to break controllers if he gets too heated while playing.

Weaknesses: Darkstar's powers have not fully grown in, and he worries that they never will. They can activate or refuse to activate sporadically, and he sometimes cannot control the intensity of his abilities. By and large, his superhuman physiology is the most under his control, and his cosmic powers are the least. There is also some mention of a particular antimatter particle or weapon that was used to defeat his grandfather, the legendary Star Captain, but such a weapon hasn't been seen in 30 years.

Brief History: The history of Darkstar begins in the 60s with his grandfather, Hubert Hubble, who was a world-renowned adventurer and super-scientist even before his transformation. While conducting an experiment to simulate the birth of the universe, the safety mechanisms failed, and Hubert was caught in a massive explosion of exotic cosmic matter. This converted the matter in his body to be comprised of "god particles," the essence of the Big Bang, and infused him with tremendous cosmic power. Hubert took up the superhero identity of Star Captain, and became one of the most famous superheroes in world history. His legendary reign ended in the early 90s, when he was defeated and killed by a supervillain wielding an esoteric anti-matter weapon.

The legacy of Star Captain was taken up by Hubert's son, Harrison Hubble, who had worked as his father's sidekick and understudy for years under the identity of "Starchild." In the wake of his father's death, Harrison cast off that name and became known as Stardriver, and became an even more widely-recognized heroic icon than his father, practically an international celebrity. Stardriver attempted to continue his own legacy when he had his own child, who he also began to train from a young age so that he might follow in his father's footsteps.

Halen and his father never got along, partly because Halen resented being forced into being a superhero, and partly because he and his father don't understand each other. It was never Halen's idea to become Starchild, but his father didn't understand his objections to it, and pushed it on him all the harder. They would bicker endlessly about almost everything, and it came to a head before Halen was ever able to debut as Starchild. He ran away from home, living with friends and surfing on couches for some time. While Stardriver, given his powers and resources, easily kept tabs on his son, he let him have his space, seeing it as a temporarily solution to their problems that could be fixed later. Unbeknownst to him, Halen was scouted by the Lanius School, and was whisked away to join their young villains program, out of Stardriver's notice and reach.

Rakshasa

Full Name: Rakshasa claims his birth name was "Yaun," but will mention in the same breath, "that man is dead."

Nicknames/Aliases: Rakshasa, Hell's Disciple

Age: 30-something, though he claims to have spent hundreds of years in Hell

Gender: Male

Division: Strength

Powers: Rakshasa is allegedly half-demon, which he claims is responsible for his body's extreme power and durability, as well as his ability to use supernatural demonic martial arts. Rakshasa knows a variety of esoteric martial arts techniques that allow him to perform such bizarre feats as flinging spiritual fireballs at his opponents, running on water, or other strange abilities. He also claims to have the ability to transform into a super-powered demonic state, though the consequence for doing so is that he will be dragged back into Hell.

Description: Rakshasa is very tall and powerfully built, but does not come across as gigantic. His musculature is obviously the product of extreme training, and his body has the toughness and strength of steel. While his features are generally handsome, his expression is usually stoic or dour, except when in combat, whereupon he seems to adopt the visage of a snarling demon. His hair and eyes are burning red and yellow, respectively, and his Ajna chakra is so powerfully trained that it glows through his forehead. When not in his battle attire, his dress sense is best described as "trashy," with undersized tee-shirts and shorts usually his standard fare, as he claims that cold and heat have no effect on him.

Personality: Most people that know Rakshasa casually consider him a terrifying lunatic, constantly rambling about something nonsensical and a hair's breadth from a violent outburst at any time. Those that spend more time with him understand the method to his madness, and find him somewhat amiable. While he is certainly violent, he never prosecutes his violence without good reason, though sometimes his reasoning can seem distorted to other people, and he holds his bizarre sense of honor very closely. He fancies himself a warrior-poet, and often cites koans and proverbs that seem disturbing or nonsensical.

Crush: Kill, Destroy

Skills: Rakshasa is one of the preeminent martial artists on the planet earth, his only peers also supernatural or superhuman. He has studied dozens of different styles and forms, many of which he claims are supernatural or otherworldly in origin. Aside from that he is also a master yogi, familiar with several forms of spiritual philosophy, and is a fairly accomplished vegan chef.

Weaknesses: All of Rakshasa's power is self-cultivated, and he has great difficulty working alongside others. His unpredictability can be a curse as much as a benefit when fighting opponents, as his murderous rage can be set off by strange and seemingly innocuous things. There is also the matter that he claims to be hunted by the forces of Hell, but this is as of yet unproven.

Brief History: To hear him tell it, Rakshasa's personal history is strange and mystifying, but none can confirm if what he says is true or not. He alleges that he was born from the union of a demon and a human woman, and grew up alone in the streets of Mumbai with only the ascetic gurus of the inner city to look after him. It was the depravity of living alone in an urban hell as a small child that Rakshasa claims made him "awakened to violence."

Rakshasa spent his youth traveling Asia, learning as much as he could about how to kill a man with his bare hands, and picking up a substantial criminal record along the way. It was deep in the Himalayas that he heard tell of a mystic master that could teach him the martial arts of another world. This was a ploy, however, as he found instead a demonic cult that used him as a human sacrifice, or so he claims. The next part of his tale is the most outlandish, as he claims his soul was banished to Hell, where he learned of his demonic parentage, and did in fact learn demonic martial arts from the denizens of Hell.

After his escape from Hell, which was an epic saga in and of itself according to Rakshasa, he found that almost no time had passed in his centuries in the underworld, and continued to strive to find challenging battles in the modern world. He provoked many other mystic or spiritual superheroes and villains into battling him, assembling a long list of rivals and enemies all the while. However, in recent years he was contacted by the Headmaster of the Lanius School, who propositioned that Rakshasa become his hand-to-hand combat instructor. A mysterious bargain was brokered, and Rakshasa has since fulfilled this role dutifully. Even so, students usually consider him among the strangest and most terrifying of the school' instructors, particularly when he introduces himself by claiming he will only recognize them as worthy if they manage to kill him.

Lanius School of Villainy and Mischief

Darkstar

Full Name: Halen Hubble

Nicknames/Aliases: Hal, Hallie, Darkstar, Starchild (formerly)

Age: 16

Gender: Male

Division: Strength

Powers: Darkstar's powers, inherited through his family line, are the result of his grandfather having been infused with the god particle, giving them the cosmic power of the Big Bang. In practical terms, this means that Darkstar possesses the winning combination of super strength, speed, durability, and flight. While he is still getting the hang of his flight powers, Darkstar has a strong grasp of his more basic abilities, and is an absolute wrecking ball in combat. Besides those abilities, Darkstar can also create and manipulate a variety of different cosmic energies and materials, such as stellar matter, dark matter, and so on, which he uses in various attacks and techniques. Darkstar's grasp of this power is somewhat lacking, and he can only reliably manifest a few basic types of cosmic matter.

Description: Darkstar is a self-described "late bloomer" and is short for a boy his age, barely 5'5". He is thin, with not much musculature to speak of (though his tremendous strength has nothing to do with his muscles), and his features are soft and still androgynous. His hair is dyed black from its usual strawberry blond, and his shaved and styled into a punk coif. Darkstar has a few earrings and other piercings, though he has a scar over one of his thick, dark eyebrows from where his eyebrow ring got ripped out last year. His big, baby-blue eyes and childlike features result in most people thinking he is adorable and difficult to take seriously, which Darkstar does his best to combat with punk clothes such as studded leather and combat boots.

Personality: A classic case of the troubled and misunderstood teen, Darkstar isn't truly evil, but has a lot of misplaced aggression, frustration, and personal trauma. He has felt as though he's spent his whole life pretending to be someone he isn't and sees his enrollment at Lanius as a chance to cut loose and be himself. When in a good mood Darkstar is friendly, generous, quick with a joke, and enjoys being the center of attention. When his mood sours, he lashes out at anyone in striking distance, and loathes attention.

Crush: N/A

Skills: Thanks to his sidekick training, Darkstar is competent in hand-to-hand combat even without his prodigious strength, and has basic training in hacking, forensics, engineering, and other practical skills. Of particular note is how much information about astrophysics and similar cosmic phenomenon has been drilled into his head by his father. In a less practical sense, Darkstar plays the guitar, sings, and can draw and paint. He likes video games but only relaxing ones because he tends to break controllers if he gets too heated while playing.

Weaknesses: Darkstar's powers have not fully grown in, and he worries that they never will. They can activate or refuse to activate sporadically, and he sometimes cannot control the intensity of his abilities. By and large, his superhuman physiology is the most under his control, and his cosmic powers are the least. There is also some mention of a particular antimatter particle or weapon that was used to defeat his grandfather, the legendary Star Captain, but such a weapon hasn't been seen in 30 years.

Brief History: The history of Darkstar begins in the 60s with his grandfather, Hubert Hubble, who was a world-renowned adventurer and super-scientist even before his transformation. While conducting an experiment to simulate the birth of the universe, the safety mechanisms failed, and Hubert was caught in a massive explosion of exotic cosmic matter. This converted the matter in his body to be comprised of "god particles," the essence of the Big Bang, and infused him with tremendous cosmic power. Hubert took up the superhero identity of Star Captain, and became one of the most famous superheroes in world history. His legendary reign ended in the early 90s, when he was defeated and killed by a supervillain wielding an esoteric anti-matter weapon.

The legacy of Star Captain was taken up by Hubert's son, Harrison Hubble, who had worked as his father's sidekick and understudy for years under the identity of "Starchild." In the wake of his father's death, Harrison cast off that name and became known as Stardriver, and became an even more widely-recognized heroic icon than his father, practically an international celebrity. Stardriver attempted to continue his own legacy when he had his own child, who he also began to train from a young age so that he might follow in his father's footsteps.

Halen and his father never got along, partly because Halen resented being forced into being a superhero, and partly because he and his father don't understand each other. It was never Halen's idea to become Starchild, but his father didn't understand his objections to it, and pushed it on him all the harder. They would bicker endlessly about almost everything, and it came to a head before Halen was ever able to debut as Starchild. He ran away from home, living with friends and surfing on couches for some time. While Stardriver, given his powers and resources, easily kept tabs on his son, he let him have his space, seeing it as a temporarily solution to their problems that could be fixed later. Unbeknownst to him, Halen was scouted by the Lanius School, and was whisked away to join their young villains program, out of Stardriver's notice and reach.

Dawn Beyond Tomorrow: A Magitech distant postapocalyptic action-adventure RP

Regardless I removed the reference to the Burial Agency and have renamed his relic to Bloody Shadow: Malakir.