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The Faraway Land: Arcane Adventures (Closed 9/30/18)

@Thinslayer

Hey Thins, Sorry to bother you again but I was looking to get back into The Faraway Land...it's been too long.

I know this is closed and if you're not willing to accept then please feel free to decline but would it be okay if I could play an existing NPC or any other character you can give to me?

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@Thinslayer

ARGH! Just reread my post again after finishing up some work and now I've realized how bad it is. Excuse the weird wording and blatant telling instead of showing.

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@Thinslayer

Sorry for the fuss but where is America in all of this? Are they the Terran or...
Man, sorry if my questions are pretty dumb ones...I've been watching the Office too much and it's had the capacity to render me completely useless.

And thank you! That did help with Ed's image. He still has red eyes, right?

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The Race Purges of 2070 eliminated light-skinned people in the country along with much of the opposition to the change in government. On the other side of the world, a certain oppressive religion (which shall remain unnamed) infiltrated the highest positions in government throughout Europe and East Asia, and used their power to institute their cruel and misogynistic values throughout the world.

Does this apply to the Crescent and Confederate as well? Does it also mean that people in the Terran Empire are all of one skin color?

Other than that, thank you so much for your explanation. It's helped me greatly in defining Sofie's characteristics and place in the world a bit more.

Note: Was looking through the character sheet again...could you perhaps provide a real person picture (I guess that's what you call those) of Ed? I normally do better with visualizing the character if they're depicted in real life form :) If that's not possible then it's absolutely no problem! I feel like I'm asking a lot from you!

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Sofie's grasp on Ed's hand tightened imperceptibly. Maybe she was wrong to do this. She just knew what her father would've said (or rather done) and she bit her lip, a nervous tick. Her mom had always been open towards Sofie finding some love in the future at least, and some days they would crouch in the closet together (so as not to wake Father up) and giggle as Sofie recalled her embarrassing childhood crush stories. Those were simpler times and Sofie remembered the feeling of warmth that that love had given her. It was time for her to take a risk, she thought. Sofie had traveled all the way here and to complete her journey fully would mean that she had to have participated in some new experiences. In fact, she was already feeling proud of herself, for taking such a huge step. Self-confidence had never ever cropped up as easily as it did now. She smiled.
"Let's do this."
And with that she leaned slightly over the console and kissed Ed on the cheek, settling back down after she had done so. Her hands rose to cup her flaming red cheeks and she sighed.
In this moment Sofie didn't allow herself to think of anything else, of anyone else. She was purely, selfishly just thinking about her. And it felt good.

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@Thinslayer

Thank you for your reply! It helped a lot, and again I'm sorry for not understanding better.

I'll give it a quick read as well! Thank you for linking it, it genuinely seems to be a very informative piece.

An additional question: Could you give me more information on Terran, Crescent, Confederates etc.

My reply will come by soon, It's just the next few days for me will be very busy in terms of new assignments getting handed to me and everything :)

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Self insertion?

And I think it was interesting how you did all that, the explanation of his religion helped as well but what I believe Ed is is some sort of knight to the rescue eque guy. You know the ones, it just seems like he thinks of himself in a superior way at points, forever trying to protect and encourage the delicate damsel in distress.

Granted, Ed is a very in depth character but I just haven’t gotten a grasp on who he really is yet. He’s a gentleman like guy right so why did he think those thoughts first? I honestly don’t know if I’m taking everything out of proportion right now but I’d love to get to know the character better is all I’m saying.

Again just like to be sure that it’s definitely not me criticizing you or your writing ;)

EDIT: Actually just reread your thing again and it makes more sense than it did the first time, sorry for the fuss...I think watching too many episode of The Office fried my brain for a moment there

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@Thinslayer

WOOOHOOOO!

That ending just...100%

Anyways, I'll try to respond soon because now I'm genuinely excited. They seem like very cool characters and I think that by starting and developing a relationship between the two earlier we may get some pretty good character development.

On another note: Ed seems to have a holier than thou attitude, I don't know but it feels like he's just...off. He's analyzing every single thing that everyone does and has a weird, kind of unexplainable attitude towards Sofie. I can't quite put my finger on it, maybe he's just acting like a gentleman type of character but I'm just confused. It's of no offense to you, Thins, I hope you know that because I think you're an amazing writer but I'd like to get to know Ed a bit better in the OOC?

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@Thinslayer

Waiting for that highly romantic side of Ed to come out!

Just finished a DnD thing so feeling pretty pumped up actually.

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@Thinslayer

I tried to keep as much as Sofie as possible in the reply I just posted but I defied a few of Sofie's rules to make sure she accepted his hand. I was trying to justify some part of it but in the end I think her choice was a good one. Plus, the change in her character, in what she'd usually do is something new I'd like to explore :)