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Fallout: Rebirth of the Enclave

DemonTongue said
Yes, let us all contemplate the gravity of his life decisions. *ba dum tsh!*

Hahaha

Fallout: Rebirth of the Enclave

GravityFlux said
Well, the first line is in the cafeteriaI'm thinking of how to intro everyoneWhile I contemplate my life decisions

I'm contemplating your life decisions as well.

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Well it's updated..ending is pending, but I am totally out of wards.

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Vash said
EDIT: Cafeteria is being really slow for me too :/But yeah, saw what you put up and I like the direction, but the "Knocked out" bits are really weaksauce. Perhaps have him saved by Joshua Graham but decide to go another way than stay and fight the whitelegs and instead head away from the whitelegs towards Canada. The dropping into Nevada is a no as being picked up by the Enclave in that area would be a huge no as all the most dangerous factions would be in the area. They wouldn't risk blowing their cover before they started to even fight back by picking Golem up. I like the idea of the Big Empty, but again, maybe have him escape and head north instead of being knocked out. Once he gets into Canada and settles down or something he could be picked up. Maybe he finds refuge in one of the many vaults that just so happens to be a vault for robots, like 103. Though how he gets from the Big Empty to 103 is up to you.

Yeah I was going to have him be involved with Graham at first, but then I was worried about interaction with actual characters. As for the rest of it, I agree. It's way too weak, which is why I brought it up in the first place. I'll take your ideas into mind and get back to work.

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DemonTongue said
Same here.

It's loading, but then turning into the blue text and weird dashed stuff. Broken words and unordered pieces. Reloading doesn't work. Clearing cache doesn't work...weird

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Trying to get onto the pad, but its refusing to load.

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UGH! It's not very good (crap) but I am truly stumped.....do you want me to post it and work on it as I can? I have a....not too crappy backstory written....but its not the greatest. (my post is updated with it....)

Basically he's just some strong dude from New Canaan who was "kidnapped" or "rescued" from the destruction of the town, taken to the Big Empty by who knows what, augmented and then dropped off somewhere. He tinkers for a while and then is approached by the Enclave. They are interested by some of his bastardized tech, and when they see him fight become fascinated by his augmentations. In return for allowing them to study him (though I am pretty sure they would just do what they want anyways), he is given materials and access to Enclave technology for his tinkering. Eventually they realize what an asset he could be and recruit him for Eagle Point.

Update: And I'm breaking rules. Ignore me, I'm getting back to work. I need to fix this background....it is completely unacceptable. Lack of detail and purpose would automatically rule for rejection. I apologize, but back to the drawing board.

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Sorry it's taking so long everybody. Its more difficult than I thought it would be to come up with something that fit's Ozymandias. I'm normally a lot faster with these things.

Lucky Bastards

*Executes thread*

Fallout: Rebirth of the Enclave

I still have to finish up some last few things and write the Backstory, but I have to go somewhere so I figured I'd post what I have so you guys can look over it and critique.