Jessikka

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Yeah at the bottom

"Life within the Base is simple. We train. We guard. We fight. There are 6 Trainers, to lead 6 divisions, all have to be at least 18. The 6 divisions are :
Stealth - It's a scouting team of assassins, master of their craft and great at hiding themselves. They use many weapons, ranging from daggers to polearms however nothing too heavy.
Aerial [UNPLAYABLE]- Lead mainly by the Alkire, they take down any in the air battles using grunt force. Uses any weapons.
Offence - Grunt force on the floor, a team of strong warriors. Uses heavy weapons like two-handers or lances.
Defense [UNPLAYABLE]- They guard the city, patrolling and ceasing any in-city attacks or defending the walls.
Ranged - The ranged attackers. Uses bows, guns, chakrams any further ranged weapons.
Engineering [UNPLAYABLE]- Helicopter/plane fighters. Bomb and gadget fighters. They help fix things around the city too."

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Wreck said
So where's the second team, what do they do? Because all I'm seeing in the intro is one.

I think Under basic history there's a list, Amelia's the trainer of stealth.

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Wreck said
Oh alright, I wasn't exactly clear that there was another team. I thought it was all one fighting against an NPC team or something, the way you made it sound in the introduction. Yeah, I still needed to edit some things before I went to bed. I forgot to add that up there. Thanks for the constructive critisim though.

No prob!

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^-^ Hey~ Thinking of making an application?

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Spriggs27 said
Shes in Ranged. Do you want me to completely change her history to something else or just alter it a little ?Rumi Wasbi

Just alter it a little, please ^-^

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Bump (Hehehe, so many bumps~)

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Wreck, please see

Strengths -

»Smooth-talker- For one reason or another, Haven attracts all kinds of people. Fortunately for him, he has a natural ability to know how to get things from these people by charming means. Because of this combined with his physical appearance, he usually has someone around that has taking a liking to him. Since he's bisexual, he has no problem gaining what he wants from either sex -- in the bedroom or out.

»Like a bull in a china shop- This could be considered a strength or a weakness, but Haven excels at violence and making sure he gets a kill in (metaphorically or physically) in order to give himself credit for doing something. He doesn't stop until he accomplishes the thing he was set out to do, and if it involves more illicit activities he'll make sure to save a slice of the glory for himself.

»Intimidating- Haven has a very strong, fearful presence around people who trust him or are enamoured by him simply because he looks the part. A nasty side glance and society might place him upon a wicked pedestal.

» "You name it, I'll shoot it"- He has extensive knowledge in shooting most types of guns and weaponry, however he's his best handling mid-size and heavy weapons, thus his position and rank. Not really important??

» Protective - Haven feels obligated to protect and care for others that he likes to be around, which is rare. He values the lives of others way more than his own and this in turn makes him a productive soldier that genuinely cares for those that he's fighting for. However, he can be easily manipulated by females or attractive males that fawn over him.

» Onion- Despite having a disgusting and angry personality, Haven has a type of depth that sometimes rears it's head in unexpected ways in awkward situations. Whether or not he realizes it, he's extremely wise and can offer counsel to those who ask in a specific type of way.
COULD GO IN PERSONALITY!
Weaknesses -

» Paranoid- Haven thinks the world is out to somehow destroy him and everything he cares about. It's quite annoying to some people including his teammates. Could definitely hinder his battle techniques and puts him at a higher risk for accidentally unloading friendly fire.

» Victim- This is another attribute that puts people off who don't know about him personally. Haven is quick to assume the role of a victim, thinking that each insult is an attack on his character, and puts him on the defensive rather quickly. A hearty blow to his pride, and you've got yourself a wet blanket.

»Volatile- Haven is extremely hot-headed, and unsurprisingly this causes him to blow up at seemingly insignificant things, like someone leaving their things laying around in his space or somebody calling him a bad name. This part of his personality makes him very weak as a role-model and leader.

» Sickly, but ferocious- Years of hard drugs have hardened his veins and made him susceptible to heart disease, lung cancer, and a slew of other issues. He's afraid of going to the doctor to solidify his fears, however, he can't exactly run for long periods without almost collapsing.

First of all, what team is your character going to be in?

A few notes on your backstory, I see that you said you'd changed the history but I'm going to have to make a few notes? If you wouldn't mind.

Your character would have to have been... Nine? For his addiction to become as severe?

Although your reasoning to be an older recruit is pretty sound, the police would have hunted you down, since it's like a tradition, you'd be breaking the rules? That's why I used a set age, really

I did sort of say 3 maximum, maybe get rid of the ones I scored out? Or whatever you feel would match your character!

These can be easily fixed though!

1. Your characters addiction could be less severe and the strange attitude can be from street fighting or other hardening activities you'd said you indulged in. Also cocaine would be hard to get now, any cocaine would go for thousands, which, being poor, might be hard to get!

2. You were late to the ceremony?

3. See the scored out strengths that I put in the hider above and consider removing those or some of the others!

Please don't get discouraged! It's just you application has a few minor mistakes that I'd just like to see you fix, alright?

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Heckie yeah! Make an app, please!

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(Yeah new people!)

I look forward to it!

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Stitches said
I'M ON IT, JESSIKKA MA'AM.