Kelewen

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Is it my turn? pardon me. I will post today.

@Landain

If you'd prefer I post again first, I don't mind. Just didn't want to not give Billy and Finney a chance to react. :)

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It seems there should have been six chairs instead of five.

@Landain

Yep. Will have to use your imagination on that 6th chair. I didn't actually make the map, but swiped it from a table top rpg.

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He's a little scary! In the best ways, of course.

I'm gonna give Landain another day or two to reply before I make another GM post.

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I like maps. Call me a Cartophile if you will. Here is Kelewen's map, showing where everyone is based on what has been written already.

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I got the impression Mistihkoman was sitting next to Mr Logan. I put Finney on the other side of Logan since I had him run to the end of the bar near the door. I put Billy closest to the table of four behind them since he started the fight when he stood up. I also placed Sergio on the other side of the room from Finney; not even close, since he was playing pool at the pool table.

@Landain

Seems reasonable... we can assume Taylor is (was) in that empty chair and that Mary, before she stepped away, was in another chair in that little gap. :)

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Phew.

If I do narrate something too unbelievable, I don't mind a little correction. It'll only make my combat writing better.

I know there's a couple topics that I'm personally very familiar with that make me just cringe when I read someone else getting the very basics wrong. I'd like to avoid being the cringe-worthy writer if I can!

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@Kelewen When I wrote the bit about Billy throwing a one two at the cowboy, I wrote Left cross and right upper cut. I spent seven years training in Krav Maga. I am right handed. I would have thrown a left jab and a right cross or a cross and a hook. I just kind of got into the moment there and wrote it that way not knowing where anyone was sitting; except Finney. I do love your map by the way. That helps out a lot.

@Landain

My only martial arts training is in foil fencing, so forgive me if I'm being slow on the fisticuffs terminology... but are you trying to tell me I've narrated something that didn't make sense in my reply?

Glad the map is helpful! :)

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Psst....@Eviledd1984 if your character leaves the scene, it's gonna make it tough to get hired for the transport job. ;)

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No worries. I'd much rather sort out confusion and unclear wording here before it snowballs!

I tweaked it just slightly in the IC thread to hopefully make it less ambiguous who was speaking.

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Oh because i thought @Landain was playing Phineas? But i could always just have Sergio leave the bar or join in on the fist fight.

@Eviledd1984

Is it this line causing the confusion?

Finney might not have noticed the invitation from the man at the pool table, but one of the thugs did. "Why don't you mind your own damn business, mister," he said to Sergio.

The thug is the one speaking, not Finney. I wasn't trying to take over Landain's character. Or was it something else? I'll try to reword it slightly to be clearer.

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Same person. Finney is just a nickname for Phineas. So no need to edit! :)