Whew its done. Up for review.
So a word about my character here. Lots of her backstory is tied up with a different character of mine in another RP, so there are some answers to her questions there.
Lmpkio might know. hehe~
As for which guild, I’m not really sure. She could go either way. After reading it, which do you suggest?
Anyway, I feel like a took a few risks with these sheet. I’m open to any suggestions, anything you feel like needs changed.
So, without further adieu
*Snipped CS*
There are some serious changes that need to happen in the magic section of this character before it gets approved, she's incredibly overtuned at present, and either needs to scale back the utility by a large degree, or focus on it instead.
Starting at the top, with the problematic sections highlighted in red:
A powerful form of shadow magic, this magic turns the caster‘s very body into woven shadow.
As long as she had magic and is conscious, physical attacks will pass right through her without harm. ((Noooooooo, no chance of this, or any long term effect of a similar nature without huge drawbacks. Karthus style ethereal casting is pretty much entirely off the table without a very obvious and very exploitable weakness)) The caster can teleport short and long distances
by passing through shadows ((through a continuous shadow, or between patches of shadows?)), but the end destination tends to be slightly random and magic cost increases exponentially with distance. The caster can also pull things into their shadow and store them, similar to requip magic
((What's the limit to this? What happens to the items if you don't have a shadow?)). Both their shadow and body can be molded into nearly any shape and made
substantial or insubstantial at will ((See previous statement)). The power of this magic is in its free-form use, allowing for a large degree of adaptability. As a Shadow magic, it also includes elements of Darkness magic (her’s is a dull slate color) and Shade magic, the caster can utilize some of both.
Shadow Body - More of a passive ability that turns her body into shadow, rendering physical attacks useless. It also allows her to change her body into any form she wishes. When in affect, her body becomes solid black and looses any humanistic features.- See previous comments.
Erebus’ Shadow - A stronger Puppet that usually takes the form of a massive serpent. A resilient and dangerous foe.
- Shadow Puppets is fine, but this one needs to be better defined. How big? How long does it last? Is it linked to her in any way?
- For Fulminating Darkness, do the puppets do the casting, or does she turn them into shadow to attack with? Where does the magic come from?
The rest of your spells are fine, though could do with similar work as noted above on being more specific about how they work.
Apologies if this comes off as a harsh critique, but Lilith would be essentially unstoppable with the current cast. Only Vega would have even the slightest chance of actually beating her in a fight, and even then...
