Mista Slaya

Mass Effect: Nova

I guess you're right Dervish. I thought I had done better but I guess that was just me hoping. And it isn't really harsh, just honesty. I don't know as much about ME as I should. And I meant to change his age, I had thought about that aspect and thought I had went in and changed it. All well. I think I'll sit this one out, I don't have the material for this. I may still try and fix the whole thing but I'll stay out of here to keep from spamming the forum. Sorry guys. Keep up the good work.

Mass Effect: Nova

Hello again everyone. I've revised my Character Sheet using the critiques given by everyone. If something more needs fixing(It wouldn't surprise me), let me know and I'll happily adjust whatever it is.

Character Sheet

Name: Shortar’Norae

Race: Quarian

Gender: Male

Age: 31

Class: Infiltrator

Appearance: Typical Quarian attire, colored a deep red with black detailing


Background:
Shortar'Norae was born in the Migrant Fleet, as most Quarian are. However, his mother suffered problems from child birth and died, leaving his father, Pari’Norae, to attempt to raise the child on his own. However, Pari slowly crashed as the enormity of the loss of his wife struck him, and he became reclusive, causing Shortar to raise himself. He got himself up in the mornings, got ready for school, and made himself meals. Around age 13, Shortar became rebellious. “If our medicine was better, my mother would still be here. Father wouldn’t be in the sad state he is. It’s the Conclave’s fault!” These thoughts turned to words. Eventually, Shortar was arrested due to attempting to steal one of the Mirgrant Fleet’s transport ships, only failing because he accidentaly set the alarm off on himself.

During the trial, which was private so as to keep the public largely unaware of the disturbance, the Admirality basically gave Shortar two options; ‘Continue living your life normally, or be exiled. We can’t have a young man who refuses to cooperate. You need to think about the best interests of the Fleet.’ Of course, Shortar chose exile. Shortar left the Fleet without ever leaving to go on his Pilgrimage. He wandered the galaxy, going from world to world. Eventually ending up on Omega, Shortar signed on as part of a distraction team for the Blue Suns mercenaries. After the raid, which was against one of the Eclipse mercenaries’ munitions bases, was complete, and the Quarian was still standing where his ‘squad members’ had died, they added him to their ranks.

After a few skirmishes, Shortar proved his abilities to the Blue Suns. After a while, his squad mates began noticing that he was an excellent shot, they mentioned it to their superiors. They turned Shortar into one of their sharpshooters, and the Quarian enjoyed the thrill of sighting an enemy’s head and making it burst like a melon.
During one of the few missions that was outside of Omega, Shortar was paired with a Blue Suns merc he had never seen before. Once on the colony world, Shortar and his partner, a Batarian named Bayorn Draep, got into position to eliminate the target. Once the target, a human male called Jeffery Dunning, was spotted, Shortar pulled the trigger and killed him. Bayorn then knocked Shortar out and left the Quarian to his fate. Shortar later woke up in a cell on the colony, being held by the local police force. The target he had been sent to eliminate was a fake.

After three months of imprisonment, Shortar escaped aboard a diplomatic shuttle flying to Kahje. Once arriving on the Hanar homeworld, Shortar noticed a small smuggling vessel was docked at the main terminal. Once aboard the station, Shortar made his way to the first shady bar he could find. Equipped with a Punisher and a Carnifex Hand Cannon he had “borrowed” from the armory on the colony world, he set out to find information on the smuggling ship and gain a new life.

Equipment:
Weapons:
Punisher Sniper Rifle

Carnifex Hand Cannon


Powers:
Tactical Cloak

Slide

Storm

Personal Quarters Location: Wherever is open

Star Wars: The Succession Wars

Nation Sheet
Flag:
Nation Name: The New Army of the Republic
Government Type: Galactic Republic
Capital: Coruscant
Home Sector: The Core
Holdings: Metellos, Tanjay, Alsakan, Ixtlar (All on routes leading to Coruscant; first lines of defense)
Leader(s): General Lewis of the 351st Airborne Troopers, Colonel Jagar Barn of the Coruscant Loyalty Fighters,
Persons of Importance:
Military:
Clone Commandos

Clone Troopers

Rebel Militia


History: After the fall of the Empire, those clones that were still loyal to the Republic defected from the Imperial Army to assist the Rebelling forces. After word got around that a group of Clones and Rebels were fighting the Imperial remenants, Incom Corporation contacted the group's leaders and asked them to set up a meeting at the group's base on Coruscant. At the meeting, Incom's representatoves brought these men their prototype X-Wing fighters. In addition to the Y-Wings and Arc-170s the Clones brought, the group had a formidable Navy.
Military Force Ships:
Stolen Imperial Venator-Class Ship (x1)
Acclamator-Class Assault Ship (x10)
Mon Calamari Star Cruiser (x1)
Arc-170s
Y-Wings
X-Wings
LAAT Dropships

Military Force Ground Forces:
ATTE Tanks
HAVw A5 Juggernaut Tanks
TX-130 Sabre Class Fighter Tanks
74-Z Speeder Bike

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Character Sheet

Nation Name: The Hold of Grimmanar

Flag:

Region/color on map: Baragh

Capital & Capital’s Population:
Armgaudr: 100,000

Other Major Settlements:
Adalamar: 33,000
Adalamar specializes in forging, creating weapons and armor for the kingdom’s armies as well as materials for building the enormous structures used as banks, shops, taverns, etc.
Rakbar: 25,000
Rakbar is home to the farming community, which is relatively well put together. Under the leadership of humans, dwarves tend to crops and domesticated animals. However, the Dwarves aren’t the best at keeping food fresh, resulting in food being a mainly imported good.
Gornae: 32,500
Gornae is the place to go for training, whether it be mining, fighting, or drinking. The majority of King Thordrek Foesword’s royal army is trained here.
Glorla: 26,200
The central urban center, Glorla houses shops, taverns, museums, libraries, and homes for the common folk.

Population: 8,500,000

Racial demographics: 92% Dwarves (7,820,000), 5% Orcs (425,000), 3% Human (255,000)

Social dynamics:
The social system is split into six general classes; Royalty, Military, Merchants, Miners, Blacksmiths, and Citizens. The Royalty class consists of the King and his family, Politicians, Governors of settlements, Military Generals, and Representatives of the Merchant, Miner, Blacksmith, and Citizen classes. The Military class consists of all involved with war. This includes Generals, Platoon Commanders, soldiers, and even the military’s specialized forgers and blacksmiths, as well as war planners. Merchants encompass store owners and workers. Miners cover everyone in charge of claiming precious metals from the earth and mountains the Dwarves inhabit. Those including in this class are Mine Foremen's, Mine Chiefs, and Miners. The Blacksmith class is filled by Forgers, Armorers, and Smelters. Citizens cover the normal men and women of Grimmanar, as well as the policing forces.

Most Dwarves, Humans, and Orcs of Grimmanar believe in multiple deities, who are either Gods of certain trades or men and women from Grimmanar’s history that achieved God-like status and/or power. Dwarves, originally the only race in the kingdom, began allowing Humans and Orcs into their land. These ‘Outside’ races were either interested in Dwarven culture or exiled from their homelands. Dwarven culture believes in giving second chances, so King Orcspike allowed these refugees to enter Dwarven lands. This was two thousand years before the current ruler, King Thordrek Foesword. Travel through Baragh leads most through the capital city Armgaudr, as all roads in the country lead at some point to the capital. (What is respectable, how do people re-act to certain things, etc)

Fashion:
Although considered poor, the common citizens of Grimmanar wear decent clothing. Common clothes usually consist of tunics with exotic furs made into the cloth, which is brought in by hunters. Pants are different colored tempered leathers, as is footwear.
Blacksmith and Miner classes wear the same type of clothing, although different colors to tell the two apart. The Blacksmith class wears darker colored clothes, such as black for forgers, burgundy for smelters, and navy for armorers. Miners, opposite the Blacksmiths, wear lighter colors, orange for formen, blue for chiefs, and white for miners. Merchants can wear any color clothing, and is usually the same as common citizens’ garb, yet with more ornate detailing. Military troops wear different armor types for each specialization, with the exception of the Generals in the Royalty class, who wear tunics that are a sage color with golden shoulder pieces and medals across their chest, and their pants are either black or dark brown. Finally, the Royalty wear long coats of purple with collars of exotic furs with detailing made out of gold. Shirts are usually grey with silver detailing, and different symbols on their coats to help differentiate which class they represent. The King wears a long, deep red cape with his specialized pure gold chestplate and black pants. His crown is forged from silver and has precious gems studded into the top. Each King’s crown has been unique.

Calendar: King’s Celebration (The first wednesday every two months), Tefna Granitefist’s victory against the Goblin Invasion (November 17), The First Coronation (August 4), Peace Day [Recognizing the end of the Dwarven Civil War] (March 19)

Art: Dwarves are master builders, and thus their art consists mainly of structures, such as fountains and statues of their Gods and previous Kings.

Law: Compared to some, Dwarven law is very simple. If you are in debt to someone, be it a landlord, store owner, or even the Criminal Underground, either you pay them by the date they set or you are punished. If you wrong someone, you battle whomever you wronged to the death. You follow the rules set by the King and his Governors or pay the price.

Education: The people of Grimmanar are well educated; Everyone knows how to read and write, and are either trained in a specialization or join the Royal Army.

Type of Government: During Peace Times, Oligarchy, yet during War Times, Monarchy: New King is selected every five years. There are a total of ten nominations for the crown, and they fight each other to the death until one nomination is left standing. This last nomination then challenges the current King for his position, and whoever wins is King, be it the newcomer or the same man.

During Peace Times, the King has little say in the actual ruling of the kingdom, and the representatives of the other classes and settlements have somewhat equal power. They determine most that goes on, such as imports, exports, and other common-related things. The King has control over international relations and taxes of his people.

Influence and relations: Grimmanar, although militarily strong, does not wage open war. They save their power for when it is needed, such as the last Goblin Invasion. Dwarves get along with Fire Trolls, as both races are based off of mining and forging. (Any alliances or military pacts?)

Important People: King Thordrek Foesword, Military Commander and General Duerel Trollbreaker (The only General of his time to be in politics and the front lines), Governor of Gornae, Jorn Firehammer(In charge of Military training), politician Falan Orcspike(Descendant of King Orcspike; wishes to challenge Kind Foesword for the crown), and Baerya Metalworker of the Outlying Villages

Trading and tax: As Dwarves aren’t the best farmers, most food is imported to Grimmanar, such as meats, potatoes, vegetables, and beers and ales. Each King has taxed his people differently depending on the situation of the Kingdom. King Foesword has lowered taxes on all citizens due to the peaceful times.

Major industries: Armor and Weapon forging, jewelry crafting
Major Associations:
Currency: Golden and Silver Coins called Thranarum(Gold) and Kolmmeck(Silver). Each Thranarum is worth 20 Kolmmeck. The terms Thranarum and Kolmmeck represent both singular and plural forms of the word.

Military - 425,000 Warriors during War Times, 200,000 during Peace Times
Heavy Warriors (50,000: 20,000 Human, 25,000 Orc, 5,000 Dwarf [Math may be a bit off, did it in my head, but should be correct]) Plate Chestpieces, Iron arm plates, gauntlets, greaves, and boots, using either Iron and Bronze comination shields and Iron longswords or Iron Battleaxes
Main Force (187,500: 40,500 Human, 47,000 Orc, 100,000 Dwarf) Iron Chest plates, iron shoulder pauldrons, and Iron leggings and boots, as well as chainmail under armor and gauntlets. Uses either smaller iron and wood shields and long/short swords or crossbows.
Light Soldiers (187,500: All Dwarf) Leather armor with Iron shoulder pauldrons, iron boots, and chainmail gauntlets. Uses short swords and shortbows.
(Details of amounts and types of soldiers. Any war vessels, siege machines or other military constructs go here as well)

Landscape: Mountains and Valleys; Large lakes and winding rivers cutting through valleys and between mountains. Roads stay within the shadows of the mountains, as most villages are partially inside the mountains and outside of them. If not, a completely above-ground village is under the protection of it’s nearest in-mountain neighbor.

Wildlife: Wolves and foxes are common in the outside world as are trolls, ogres, and bears, while similar beasts roam the natural caves of the mountains, such as bears and trolls.
Notable places: The King’s Palace, Armgaudr; Port Garak (Population 20,000), named after the warrior Garak Onyxheart

Sword and Shields - Medieval Warfare

Mista Slaya said I just had the idea that the previous King had been invited to join Haloism, and declined it on the grounds that his people would suffer from the sudden change in religion. And then maybe they came to an agreement that if the Kings helped support the Doge and Empire with metals then the Kolmaenar wouldn't be forced to join Haloism. It's just a thought I had, but if you don't want to I can make the King a raving lunatic who has false pre-conceptions. :P

gowia said Ahhhh see now I know understand, along with the metals how about a non aggression pact? But I will accept with the past deal:)

I think a non-aggression pack should be fine. :D

Mass Effect: Nova

Thanks for helping me out guys I REALLY apprieciate it. And even though that sounds highly sarcastic, it isn't. I'm glad people are helping me instead of saying 'Nope, you're an idiot, leave now, etc., etc.". I'm working on the Background, it's still a WIP. I'm planning on covering a lot more, I just didn't want to get too much done and then have it be completely wrong again and have to redo it. So don't worry, I am working on explaining most things

Sundered Echo said On an unrelated note, I think a little explanation should go into how he learned to handle a sniper, a rare weapon among the Migrant marines because they usually fight in close quarters e.g. in boarding actions, their most common deployment.

And yeah Echo, I am planning on explaining the use of the Punisher and Carnifex, just haven't typed it all out yet.

Thank you for checking over my character sheet guys. This is only my second one, the first being a Nation RP Sheet. In other words, my first Character Sheet. I hope to get better at this so I'm not always the guy that has to remake everything. XD

Mass Effect: Nova

I understand everything about the names and being able to re-join the Fleet, but thanks for helping! And Sundered Echo, thanks for giving more detail on what it would take to be exiled. That helps out a lot. And I did do a little touch-up research, but I guess I didn't research what I needed. Thanks Echo and Vakte!

Also, I have edited my character sheet. The weapon issue has been fixed, and the background has mostly changed. Let me know if I still need to fix something. :D

Sword and Shields - Medieval Warfare

@gowia I just had the idea that the previous King had been invited to join Haloism, and declined it on the grounds that his people would suffer from the sudden change in religion. And then maybe they came to an agreement that if the Kings helped support the Doge and Empire with metals then the Kolmaenar wouldn't be forced to join Haloism. It's just a thought I had, but if you don't want to I can make the King a raving lunatic who has false pre-conceptions. :P

Sword and Shields - Medieval Warfare

Innovative Engimas said
I know that they live in a mountain but igot a stronger 'black' steel. Plus i think our rulers might have some things in common. Such as they both dispise haloism

I think that maybe the rulers would get along well, but the current King is very proud of his people and probably wouldn't accept outside metals unless there was a dire need for it. I see your point though.

Mass Effect: Nova

I completely forgot about the Geth not being in contact. *sigh* I'll work more on it. I feel stupid now. Whatever. If I'm not deemed too stupid for this RP now, I'd like another shot.