Looking good so far, just gotta wait for a bit for approval.
A few nitpicks though, cos I am a fussy butt:
Replace the indenting spaces at the start of some of your paragraphs with tabs or just get rid of them completely.
Add the name of your magic somewhere in your magic section. You can look at the approved sheets to see examples.
Capitalise the name of your theme song title to "The Bird with a Broken Wing"
This last one's a really big unnecessary nitpick so ignore it if you feel like it, but replace the single quotation marks (') around Sandy with double quotation marks (")
Haha, sorry for having to deal with a nag like me but it would just be more consistent that way plus I'll be able to sleep at night. Cheers, bud.
Em's picture in your sheet in the CHAR tab doesn't seem to be showing. Could you replace the (i.imgur.com/FaCtAeD.png) url in the CHAR tab sheet with the working (https:/ /i.imgur.com/FaCtAeD.png) url in your original sheet or another working url?
Sorry for the inconvenience. When I was typing this notice out, the https:// part of the second url seemed to disappear when I checked it in Preview. Had to put a space between the slashes in the second url for it to even show. I'm not tech-savvy enough so I'm not sure what's up with that but hopefully it doesn't give you too much trouble -_-
Anyhoodle, please sort it out whenever you can. Thanks.
EDIT: Hosted it in a new place for you. (puu.sh/sfDDN/bfe90f5992.jpg) If the imgur links don't work, try this one.
The EDIT Strikes Back: Just realised that Em's name image isn't showing up either. (puu.sh/sfEwq/29a2fe80f8.png) Here's the new url if you need it.
Return of the EDIT: Jan has pointed out that your Magic section is missing the indent that your other sections have. Please save us from our pickiness. Please.
Don't worry, bud, it's not gonna be a problem. The Character Directory post our lovely Baklava is working on will be all the organisation we need. Plus neatness has never been my strong point...
EDIT: We should probs wait for Jan's opinion though, lol
Name: George Ellington Alias: Gambol Age: 16 Gender: Male
Appearance:
To the average Japanese citizen, George has an appearance that screams โforeignerโ. A lanky frame standing just under 1.9 metres if you include his gelled, gravity-defying pompadour, dusty brown hair, and wide, rambunctious blue eyes are clear indicators of his ethnicity. Besides his physical features, the most prominent clue to his heritage is his fashion sense. The LA native can usually be found in his trademark leather jacket, boasting 50s greaser fashion or any other archaic American style. It would not be unreasonable to assume that George was some half-rate Elvis impersonator with his rollicking charm, bedazzled jackets and voluminous โdo.
History:
The Ellingtons immigrated to Japan when George was four years old, hence making it near impossible for him to have integrated into the culture as deeply as he would have others believe. Being the only foreigner in a class full of Japanese kids, little Georgie became the centre of attention. Little Georgie decided that he rather enjoyed this position. Before the novelty of being a foreigner ran out, he picked up some visual tics to cement his position as someone worth looking at. Inspired by the vinyl records his father had shipped from their home in Illinois, George began dressing strangely, picking up strange hobbies and becoming more and more outlandish as the years passed.
Learning to dance was simple enough, though his freestyle moves left something to be desired. The circus tricks werenโt too absurd either, a balancing act there and a bit of juggling too. The Ellingtons were more than willing to pay the expenses of the boyโs whims if it meant keeping his grades up.
It was during the first year of middle school that Academy City first drew his eye. A whole city-state full of souped-up whackos? Now that sounded like a blast! It only took a bit of persuading to convince his parents but in the end they reluctantly agreed. As long as it kept him out of trouble, right?
Personality:
George is one โcool catโ, as he likes to emphasize time and time again. He's loud, rowdy, excitable, someone who is always trying to find the thrill in mundane life. Optimism is like a freakin' plague around this guy. How could it not be, with this brother who's always willing to help out a pal, no matter how ridiculous the job.
Yeah, you won't be callin' him a wet rag any time soon. George is a performer at heart. A natural showman who thrives under the spotlight. Hell, it'd be more accurate to call him an attention whore. The flashier the tricks, the easier it is to rake in the dough, right? Still, he puts a surprisingly honest amount of effort into his developing his show. The smiles make all the scrapes worth.
Despite his rockabilly aura, George is quite the klutz, physically and socially. To a casual acquaintance, he is more likely to be known for his clumsiness than his flamboyance. Well meaning as he is, it'd be a terrible idea to trust him with any kind of secret. His physical clumsiness shows its colors so frequently that it is a wonder that he has remained in one piece after so many years of living. People are more likely to tip him out of pity than because of his skill. Nevertheless, George possesses an indomitable will and enthusiasm. Sticks and stone can break his bones but you'd have to set all his possessions on fire before you even nick his spirit. He takes all his misfortunes in his stride, assuring himself that heโll do better next time around.
Lastly, George constantly speaks in a selection of 50s and 60s slang. Something about โgood vibesโ, he claims. It is unknown how he manages to keep this up in English, much less in Japanese.
Esper Power:
Level 3: Grav Zone โ Within a radius of five metres George can manipulate gravity, increasing it or decreasing it completely. The power applies to everything in the radius including George himself, though he can pick and choose which and how objects in the radius are manipulated, as long as they are in his line of sight. Gravity Zone doesnโt manipulate any forces or vectors besides gravity. For example if someone throws a dumbbell at George while Gravity Zone is activated, George can make it drop to the ground as soon as it enters the radius. However if George doesnโt make it drop hard enough to embed itself in the ground immediately, it will probably keep sliding due to its horizontal velocity and crush his toe.
George primarily uses his ability to perform balancing acts and acrobatic dances. It is also incredibly handy for transporting heavy goods like the Hot Box and leaping from building to building. In theory, George could jump to the moon if he wanted to but his parents have strictly forbidden him from it.
- Makes a decent buck with his busking. On weekends he can be found in the shopping district, casually lugging his Hot Box around to find a decent spot to perform.
- Initially wanted throwing knives to complete his Hot Box collection. His parents forbade him from ever bringing it up again and immediately took away his credit card privileges.
On his person โ Smartphone, lighter, swiss army knife, bag of skittles
In the Hot Box โ Chopsticks, juggling pins, juggling balls, spinning plates, foldout chairs, unicycle wheel (he couldnโt fit the whole unicycle in), novelty anvil, bowling ball, various pieces of colored paper, pens and pencils, square piece of cardboard that folds open to around nine meters squared, fedora for tips.
Name: George Ellington Alias: Gambol Gender: Male Age: 16 Theme Song:
Appearance:
To the average Japanese citizen, George has an appearance that just screams โforeignerโ. A lanky frame standing just under 1.9 metres (if you include his gelled, gravity-defying pompadour in your measurement), dusty brown hair, and his wide, rambunctious blue eyes are clear indicators of his ethnicity. The most prominent clue to his heritage, besides his physical features, has got to be his fashion choices. George can usually be found in his trademark leather jacket in general 50s greaser fashion or any other equally archaic American style. With that being said it would not be unreasonable to assume that George was some sort of Elvis impersonator with his rollicking charm, leather jacket and voluminous โdo.
Personality: George is one โcool catโ, as he likes to emphasise time and time again. The youth seems to have tragically contracted a permanent case of Dreamworks Face, which serves as a pretty straightforward visual metaphor for his personality. George is loud, rowdy, excitable young man, someone who is always trying to find the thrill in mundane life. His enduring optimism is positively contagious and he is always willing to help out a pal, no matter how ridiculous the job. He can be considered charismatic, if youโre not put off by his gaudy appearance and personality. George is a performer at heart. He thrives under the spotlight and is a natural showman. It would be pretty accurate to call him an attention whore. He seeks new ventures in his performing arts, specialising in dance and circus tricks. The flashier the tricks, the easier it is to rake in the dough, right? He puts a surprisingly honest amount of effort into his image. Despite his rockabilly aura, George is quite the klutz, physically and socially. To be blunt, to a casual acquaintance, he is more likely to be known for his clumsiness than his flamboyance. George is liable to blurt out something completely inappropriate then immediately follow it up by falling off his chair. Needless to say, it would be a terrible idea to trust him with any kind of secret. His physical clumsiness shows its colours so frequently that it is a wonder that he has remained in one piece after so many years of living. In fact at his busking performances, people are more likely to tip him out of pity than because of his skill. Nevertheless, George possesses an indomitable will and enthusiasm, something that will never be broken by his klutziness. He takes all his misfortunes in his stride, assuring himself that heโll do better next time around. George constantly speaks in a selection of 50s and 60s slang. Something to do with his โvibesโ, he claims. It is unknown how he manages to keep this up in English, much less in Japanese.
History: The Ellingtons immigrated to Japan when George was four years old. Being the only foreigner in a class full of Japanese kids, little Georgie Boy quickly became the centre of attention before realising: โHey, this ainโt half bad!โ Before the novelty of being a foreigner ran out, George picked up some other habits to make him stand out. Inspired by the vinyl records his father had shipped from their home in Illinois, George began dressing strangely, picking up strange hobbies and becoming more and more outlandish as the years passed. Learning to dance was simple enough, though his freestyle moves left something to be desired. The circus tricks werenโt too absurd either, a balancing act there and a bit of juggling too. The Ellingtons were more than willing to pay the expenses of the boyโs whims. As long as it kept him out of trouble, right? It was during the first year of middle school that Academy City first drew his eye. A whole city-state full of souped-up wackos? Now that sounded like a blast! It only took a bit of persuading to convince his parents but in the end they reluctantly agreed. As long as it kept him out of trouble, right?
Ability: Level 3: Gravity Zone โ Within a radius of five metres George can manipulate gravity, increasing it or decreasing it completely. The power applies to everything in the radius including George himself, though he can pick and choose which and how objects in the radius are manipulated, as long as they are in his line of sight. Gravity Zone doesnโt manipulate any forces or vectors besides gravity. For example if someone throws a dumbbell at George while Gravity Zone is activated, George can make it drop to the ground as soon as it enters the radius. However if George doesnโt make it drop hard enough to embed itself in the ground, it will probably keep sliding due to its horizontal velocity and stub his toe. George primarily uses his ability to perform balancing acts and acrobatic dances. It is also incredibly handy for transporting heavy goods like the Hot Box and leaping from building to building. In theory, George could jump to the moon if he wanted to but his parents have strictly forbidden him from it.
Relatives: Rebecca Barton โ Mother, age 42 Carl Ellington โ Father, age 40
Possessions: On his person โ Smartphone, lighter, swiss army knife, bag of skittles In the Hot Box โ Chopsticks, juggling pins, juggling balls, spinning plates, foldout chairs, unicycle wheel (he couldnโt fit the whole unicycle in), novelty anvil, bowling ball, various pieces of coloured paper, pens and pencils, square piece of cardboard that folds open to around nine metres squared, fedora for tips.
Quirks/Hobbies/Miscellaneous Info: Makes a decent buck with his busking. On weekends he can be found in the shopping district, casually lugging his Hot Box around to find a decent spot to perform. Initially wanted throwing knives to complete his Hot Box collection. His parents forbade him from ever bringing it up again and immediately took away his credit card privileges.