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Home Is Where The War Is- Chapter 1: The Frayed Woman



"True! nervous, very, very dreadfully nervous I had been and am; but why WILL you say that I am mad? The disease had sharpened my senses, not destroyed, not dulled them.-The Tell-Tale Heart, by Edgar Allan Poe


September 8th, 2013
Hotel on 6th and 16th-Temporary home of Rachel Cole-Alves.

The sounds,sights, smells, all of it-All of it!-she could sense. Every click of the doorknobs, every beep of the key carded doors, every horn honked in the close-by street. She could hear everything; simultaneously, it was as if the sensations all fell on someone deaf, blind and unable to smell. Simply put, she felt as if she were trapped in some horrible loop, some awful nightmare. Part of her hoped-rather futilely-that it was all some sort of dream.

But the empty cold on the other side of the bed, the empty air she unconsciously grabbed as if to hold on to HIS hand, the almost unbearable loneliness she felt told her otherwise. It was not a dream, it was her life. And without Daniel Alves, it was not a life Rachel wanted to live-not a world she wanted to live in. Nervousness hounded her every waking moment, frayed nerves fearing that which she did not previously fear. Every dark alley, every possible mugging site all sent her into a nervous breakdown now.

It was ironic, really. She had fought in three tours overseas, facing down her country's enemies without a second thought as to her own safety, only to break down in an alleyway of New York City. Now, here she stood at the entrance to her hotel room, pulse racing, wearing Daniel's wedding band around her neck. Her hands shook as she swiped her card. "Sonofa-." She hissed. Rachel sighed and for the 616th time that day fingered the wedding band slung around her neck. She opened the door, surprised to see a man sitting there,

He was tall, approximately six foot two, to her eye, and had dark hair. His ensemble was tactical, black long sleeves rolled up to forearm, black cargo pants, combat boots, black gloves. Blue eyes looked at her. That wasn't what startled her. What startled her was the bulletproof vest sitting between his boots, with its spray painted skull.

"Hello, Rachel. My name is Frank Castle."
So I'm finally going to write that Punisher post I promised.
Lord Wraith said
No but seriously, I'm going to make a Thor sheet methinks.


AAaand since Thor's dad is played by one of our greatest actors ever, anytime Odin has dialogue it's Anthony Hopkins' voice that I imagine him to possess.
Gowi said
Ever read a Marvel comic? The only city that matters is New York City, lol.


That pic has a misnomer: only one of those "costumed vigilantes" actually uses lethal force, Nick Fury. Unless it's a joke, in which case I say sorry for my Asperger's moment
I don't know why.. I found the post to be enjoyable but I like your longer posts for their emotional tone and suspense. This post said to me: cliffhanger. While enjoyable it only left me wanting more like when a movie ends on a cliffhanger and you start swearing the director to hell for not having the next movie ready.

All in all it was a pretty good post; not your lengthiest post but CERTAINLY not by any standard bad at all.
Gowi said
No offense, but nobody is going to do your own research for you.


None taken. I was going to have her present as having paranoia, delusions of persecution, traumatic breakdowns when presented with certain stimuli, and heightened aggression with hallucinations of loved ones.
So I was thinking of portraying Rachel as having PTSD caused by her husband's death. Does anyone know the symptoms of PTSD or tips on how to write a character as being such?
Schradinger said
Would anyone have an objection to me changing the material on X-23's bones to vibranium and her claws to the anti-metal version? It would make sense since she was designed to kill wolverine that she would have claws that (they think) can cut his bones (in actuality they still can't), and give more credence to her ability to take hits from the likes of the hulk while also making her more marvel-ey than the current carbon based nano-polymer.And by "anyone" I'm referring mostly to EE, though other opinions are welcome as well. Jones has already given his go-ahead.


I'm cool with it. Personally, I hope X-23 meets Castle someday.
Gowi said
Well, I certainly don't agree; but yes, this is All-Star Marvel and I doubt EE wants 2-3 pages of Terminator chatter.


To each his own. As to the Punisher, I'll be writing it today, but this post is predominantly from Rachels side of the story, to set up the interaction to come between Castle(I NEVER refer to him by his first name) and Rachel
I'm sorry; I'm watching T2, and forgot which forum I was in, its that good of a film.
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