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I'm sure it's just you, Marrow.
I was actually going to do assignments.
Seeing as Innue is apart of plot and IC progression I was running my idea with them instead of outright deciding by myself.
Communication is a pretty useful tool.
Like communicating with Kreig before just deciding that preempively, which I also intended to do.
I'm guessing (hoping) you spoke with Prince about the team decisions instead though and that would override anything I was looking to try to do for the rp.
Seeing as Innue is apart of plot and IC progression I was running my idea with them instead of outright deciding by myself.
Communication is a pretty useful tool.
Like communicating with Kreig before just deciding that preempively, which I also intended to do.
I'm guessing (hoping) you spoke with Prince about the team decisions instead though and that would override anything I was looking to try to do for the rp.
Masaki Haruna said
And this is RP, meaning some are not canon...so I say yes women having sharingan is allowed? Yup, *intended her to be the 1st female sharingan user in the RP*
Ah. Well just be careful with that. Prince didn't and hasn't said anything about it, so I'm assuming it's fine. But, you might want to run something like "deciding the characteristics of an entire clan" by Prince. Because if another member wanted to make a female Uchiha they would have to know what you've basically established for them as a whole. Try not to just make up whatever fits, especially if it is not an original concept. It kind of just threw me off outright saying that the Sharingan is a male dominate technique when there isn't really enough support to conclude that, especially without female Uchiha to compare too.
Pfft. I said it before she did!
Also, Innue, you have a PM.
Also, Innue, you have a PM.
@Dystopia,
I really don't have any problems with the profile, Kris.
It's essentially the ability to make clones of other people, which isn't crazy in the slightest.
The rest of her techniques have explicit limitations and are fairly balanced for her Rank.
I'll let Beta give the final say, however.
So I leave Gothpuppy and Dystopia to you, Beta.
I really don't have any problems with the profile, Kris.
It's essentially the ability to make clones of other people, which isn't crazy in the slightest.
The rest of her techniques have explicit limitations and are fairly balanced for her Rank.
I'll let Beta give the final say, however.
So I leave Gothpuppy and Dystopia to you, Beta.
@Masaki,
Alright then, as far as I have seen most of the characters do not have elemental techniques or any advanced ones.
I've spoken with Beta about it and from what I have decided is that Ria cannot be allowed the three different Fire Style techniques. I will allow, however, that your character could be developing one of the listed Fire techniques. That means that, although she can utilize the technique, she isn't at a mastery level with the technique. How you apply limitations into the techniques, Masaki, is completely up to you.
You can either have the large Fireball Technique or the small Phoenix Flower Technique, however I won't allow the Fire Dragon Technique from a Genin. EIther one technique that you are given remember to emphasis that your character is developing this Fire Style technique, they are in no way able to use it perfectly. I'll need you to physically annotate this fact in the profile as well. I realize that you wish for her to be a Fire Specialist, however she will have to develop into one throughout the Rp.
Another thing that caught my eye was:
Not so sure about this. I don't recall when this was ever stated in canon, but maybe someone else can vouce for this information? If so then I'd let is slide, however if you were just implying this as to make it sound like your character was looked down upon then you would have to revise your entire bio.
@Gothpuppy,
Same for you. I will allow one Elemental technique. Fortunately, I believe they are all reasonable techniques for a Genin so either of the Wind natured techniques you applied for are perfectly fine. However, if you are still intending on utilizing the Flying Swallow, I'll need you to actually mention in the profile that it is an incomplete technique with very specific limitations, otherwise I would not accept it.
Chakra sensitive weapons. Keep in mind that, by no means, would your specialized weapons enable you any sort of Jonin level chakra control or to have an 'invulnerable' weapon or some weapon that can, by some degree, automatically absorb all chakra. As of now, with your character's current level, it would be almost as ordinary as any regula r weapon. You won't be able to run Flying Swallow through the technique simply because your character made the weapon. Not with Genin level Chakra control. Maybe in the future, however I just want to make that point very clear.
I also have no problem with the original clan.
I will let Beta have the final say on the character and either accept or deny you. I say you did a good job, Gothpuppy.
Alright then, as far as I have seen most of the characters do not have elemental techniques or any advanced ones.
I've spoken with Beta about it and from what I have decided is that Ria cannot be allowed the three different Fire Style techniques. I will allow, however, that your character could be developing one of the listed Fire techniques. That means that, although she can utilize the technique, she isn't at a mastery level with the technique. How you apply limitations into the techniques, Masaki, is completely up to you.
You can either have the large Fireball Technique or the small Phoenix Flower Technique, however I won't allow the Fire Dragon Technique from a Genin. EIther one technique that you are given remember to emphasis that your character is developing this Fire Style technique, they are in no way able to use it perfectly. I'll need you to physically annotate this fact in the profile as well. I realize that you wish for her to be a Fire Specialist, however she will have to develop into one throughout the Rp.
Another thing that caught my eye was:
Masaki Haruna said It is very rare for women in the Uchiha Clan to serve and obtain the sharingan
Not so sure about this. I don't recall when this was ever stated in canon, but maybe someone else can vouce for this information? If so then I'd let is slide, however if you were just implying this as to make it sound like your character was looked down upon then you would have to revise your entire bio.
@Gothpuppy,
Same for you. I will allow one Elemental technique. Fortunately, I believe they are all reasonable techniques for a Genin so either of the Wind natured techniques you applied for are perfectly fine. However, if you are still intending on utilizing the Flying Swallow, I'll need you to actually mention in the profile that it is an incomplete technique with very specific limitations, otherwise I would not accept it.
Chakra sensitive weapons. Keep in mind that, by no means, would your specialized weapons enable you any sort of Jonin level chakra control or to have an 'invulnerable' weapon or some weapon that can, by some degree, automatically absorb all chakra. As of now, with your character's current level, it would be almost as ordinary as any regula r weapon. You won't be able to run Flying Swallow through the technique simply because your character made the weapon. Not with Genin level Chakra control. Maybe in the future, however I just want to make that point very clear.
I also have no problem with the original clan.
I will let Beta have the final say on the character and either accept or deny you. I say you did a good job, Gothpuppy.
Kota also isn't in the jail.
That's too bad.
Sorry to see you go. I didn't even get the chance to Rp with you.
See ya then, Jay.
Sorry to see you go. I didn't even get the chance to Rp with you.
See ya then, Jay.
I'll read over it.
Just give me a bit. I have class soon, but it will definitely be done before the end of today.
Just give me a bit. I have class soon, but it will definitely be done before the end of today.
@gothpuppy95,
Well, if things are going to get moving along then I'd like to take the initiative, hopefully not against Prince's wishes, I'm going to offer some preliminary advice on your character, Gothpuppy.
I would suggest, seeing as you are creating an original clan, that you list, in detail, the specifics of that clan, beyond simply just a few physical traits. Whether you do it in history or misc, offer a little insight on the Yoru clan. Try to flesh them out as well as you can, especially in their history and how others would treat or look at them. (seeing as they most likely stand out).
The only other problem I have with this application that is still a work in progress is the Flying Swallow.
It is a simplistic and straight forward technique, however I'd like to stress that it requires a great deal of chakra affinity and control to be able to manage the technique, especially to coat an entire katana/scythe. I wouldn't outright say the character couldn't do it, especially if there is a good reason to back it up, however such advanced chakra control is typically too advanced for a Genin to do outright. I'd say it would be more realistic if your character could partially perform the technique or if they were able to do it around kunai, to a limited length, then it would be more reasonable. Though, such an adept ability isn't an academy level power and I suggest, if you were planning on keeping it, to explain some sort of limitation to the ability.
In anycase, I look forward to reading the completed profile.
@JonxlatheLion,
I want to start off by saying that it never hurts to use another profile as a reference. You are free to look at how others applied to the Rp if you are ever confused on what exactly to put for any one of the required fields in the template. That being said, I will tack on where Beta didn't mention anything.
You need an actual history. What you supplemented as a history was more of a slice of life. It didn't really give me any idea on your character's history, his upbringing, where he managed to get his abilities, or his direction in life. I feel that it was just one day out of thousands and it did nothing to really satisfy informing any reader of the background of the character, especially one that holds something as precious as a Rinnegan.
Also know that Konoha isn't a clan, it's more like a geographical location.
Why?
Realize that this includes the ability to absorb chakra, of any size, into your body, tear the souls out of others, manipulate force of attraction and repulsion freely and to no limit, summon the Gedo Statue, which can subdue Bijuu, omnidirectional vision, and the ability to freely summon various creature from various Kingdoms...Then on top of that to have a body completely made of iron?
Unfortunately, that isn't remotely fair even as a potential villain. Various, necessary limitations would need to be stated. it is not necessarily that he needs to be toned down, but he possesses an awkward collection of techniques for this setting. There is no one that would teach him these abilities and, without any linage in either Senju or Uchiha, it isn't realistic that he'd be able to develop any of these techniques, or the Rinnegan, naturally or unnaturally. It's too random. Without even a history to back it up, the abilities are just unbalanced. There needs to be an emphasis. Can't just be amazingly fantastic at everything just because.
Though, just to stop you before you go too far, the Rinnegan is most certainly not an allowable Kekkei Genkai, thus there is no point even trying to work around that. I'd suggest removing it or trying some other original technique.
I'd like to think you should work a little more on personality as well.
Anyway! Just my take the character.
I hope that you use the information in comparison for the next character you make. Keep in mind that balance in a character makes, well, a wonderful character. There should be strengths, weaknesses, flaws, and advantages all melded together. Just keep that in mind with the next application. I'll look forward to reading the character :0
Well, if things are going to get moving along then I'd like to take the initiative, hopefully not against Prince's wishes, I'm going to offer some preliminary advice on your character, Gothpuppy.
I would suggest, seeing as you are creating an original clan, that you list, in detail, the specifics of that clan, beyond simply just a few physical traits. Whether you do it in history or misc, offer a little insight on the Yoru clan. Try to flesh them out as well as you can, especially in their history and how others would treat or look at them. (seeing as they most likely stand out).
The only other problem I have with this application that is still a work in progress is the Flying Swallow.
It is a simplistic and straight forward technique, however I'd like to stress that it requires a great deal of chakra affinity and control to be able to manage the technique, especially to coat an entire katana/scythe. I wouldn't outright say the character couldn't do it, especially if there is a good reason to back it up, however such advanced chakra control is typically too advanced for a Genin to do outright. I'd say it would be more realistic if your character could partially perform the technique or if they were able to do it around kunai, to a limited length, then it would be more reasonable. Though, such an adept ability isn't an academy level power and I suggest, if you were planning on keeping it, to explain some sort of limitation to the ability.
In anycase, I look forward to reading the completed profile.
@JonxlatheLion,
I want to start off by saying that it never hurts to use another profile as a reference. You are free to look at how others applied to the Rp if you are ever confused on what exactly to put for any one of the required fields in the template. That being said, I will tack on where Beta didn't mention anything.
You need an actual history. What you supplemented as a history was more of a slice of life. It didn't really give me any idea on your character's history, his upbringing, where he managed to get his abilities, or his direction in life. I feel that it was just one day out of thousands and it did nothing to really satisfy informing any reader of the background of the character, especially one that holds something as precious as a Rinnegan.
Also know that Konoha isn't a clan, it's more like a geographical location.
One of his eyes is replaced with the black part of a yin-yang.
Why?
Jutsu List: Rinnegan Six Paths Technique. That's all.
Realize that this includes the ability to absorb chakra, of any size, into your body, tear the souls out of others, manipulate force of attraction and repulsion freely and to no limit, summon the Gedo Statue, which can subdue Bijuu, omnidirectional vision, and the ability to freely summon various creature from various Kingdoms...Then on top of that to have a body completely made of iron?
Unfortunately, that isn't remotely fair even as a potential villain. Various, necessary limitations would need to be stated. it is not necessarily that he needs to be toned down, but he possesses an awkward collection of techniques for this setting. There is no one that would teach him these abilities and, without any linage in either Senju or Uchiha, it isn't realistic that he'd be able to develop any of these techniques, or the Rinnegan, naturally or unnaturally. It's too random. Without even a history to back it up, the abilities are just unbalanced. There needs to be an emphasis. Can't just be amazingly fantastic at everything just because.
Though, just to stop you before you go too far, the Rinnegan is most certainly not an allowable Kekkei Genkai, thus there is no point even trying to work around that. I'd suggest removing it or trying some other original technique.
I'd like to think you should work a little more on personality as well.
Anyway! Just my take the character.
I hope that you use the information in comparison for the next character you make. Keep in mind that balance in a character makes, well, a wonderful character. There should be strengths, weaknesses, flaws, and advantages all melded together. Just keep that in mind with the next application. I'll look forward to reading the character :0
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