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I thought it was funny actually...Cuz Makoto is a sick man. haha
Speaking of opening posts...

So Makoto is a sick little girl? Lol. Fits.
*pats Yog*

It's ok Yog. It's all alright.
Lets go get an ice cream.
IVIasterJay said
Funny thing, on her CS it says Mayu is male. She's a trap!


Ahaha.
I originally copied my other characters code over and was supposed to erase everything.
How can you hate on Hozuki?
Doesn't even...

They are so great though.
Got shark teeth and virtual invulnerability and stuff.
"I just don't think I like it!" Mayu said, twirling in a mirror. Today was a particularly windy day and there was a peculiar chill in the air. Despite that, Mayu had intended to wear a warm, light yellow sun dress. It was one of her many favorites. This dress had daisies decorating the bottom, with curled vibrant earth green vines that ran across the hem, and there was a white lace running down the back, coming from her shoulders and braiding down her back. She'd been looking forward to wearing this dress all week and, seeing as she preplanned her entire attire two weeks in advance...It would be at least another month before she got to wear it again!

"Oh well~" Sweetly, Mayu slipped off the dress, one shoulder at a time, before tossing it into her clothes hamper.
"I'll stick with something simple," She decided, clenching a fist as if this were to be a mission all on its own for her. "I wonder what kind of clothes Kaido-sensei would like~?" She giggled as she pondered the idea of wearing something that would make her senior blush in embarrassment. She would try her best to find something super cute to flaunt off to her team! She was super, duper excited about it now!

"I bet!" She beamed, a confidant smile appearing, "Even Jin-kun will compliment me!"

~~~

45 minutes later, Mayu was rushing out of her front door, "See ya later~" She waved to her mother as the door shut. Instead of that beautiful sundress she stuck with a black on red miniskirt with black, skin tight leggings that stopped mid-shin. Up top she wore a short sleeve blouse with a long sleeve black and red jacket with shiny sterling silver buttons. The jacket was short, ending a few inches passed her ribs. There was an insignia of a dove on the inside of the color as a small, white pin. The jacket was a thin material, but would shield her from the wind and even allowed her the ability to conceal a few paper slips in her sleeves. It was one of her favorite jackets.

Mayu didn't rush out with just clothes. Oh no! She had a small container of cookies too! She was going to give them to her super amazing team! She'd make sure that Muyo ate twice as much as the others! He always looked like he was starving to Mayu, so she made an effort to try and always bring the team a home cooked snack. She made the cookies last night. She tossed out three whole batches trying to get these cookies right. She worked really hard on them for her team and she couldn't wait to see their wonderful, delighted expressions when she handed them to them!

Mayu was already imagining it! They'd all compliment her! She couldn't wait!
As her excitement started to get the better of her, Mayu quickly took off into a full sprint.

Likely, those waiting would have seen her coming long before she arrived, cookie plate clutched tightly to her chest as she hurried on. When she was about 8 yards out she'd jump, leaping through the air, and perform a graceful double twist into the air before landing with her back to Kaido and Jin. With a dramatic spin, she'd present the cookies to her teammate and her instructor with a starry brilliance in her eyes.

They'd be ecstatic! They'd be so darn happy!
She was so sure that they'd love it she was practically close to tears, which was painfully obvious.

But wait!
Taking a half step back, Mayu looked around, "Where is Muyo-kun?"
Ouroboros said
^ that would make it a less OP KG


lol. I'm not saying it's overpowered.
His techniques seem as reasonable as a Genin than can layer Genjutsu.
Also, shouldn't the ability be Magnet Release?
I'll get to it today. :0

EDIT: I would just like to request you post in Third Person, as it's easier.
Other than what Prince mentioned, I see no problems with the character. Okasho requires advanced chakra control the which shouldn't be in the hands of a Genin. You could have your character developing Chakra Enhanced Strength, but even that would be modest and unrefined this early on. That would be your character working up towards Okasho.

Everything else is good to go.
Such a hater.
Uchiha's are pure badassery incarnate.

Uchiha Genin smack around Kage. Doesn't get anymore hardcore than that.
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