Alright, editted.
I've removed the drugs talk, (fitted it instead with just saying that they turned even more corrupt, and became criminals, or so he thought) I've added how he learnt bits and pieces of magic, added clothing. Also, refined the reason why he's in Karstburg.
I'm not happy with how it turned out, really.
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@Rusulka: Alright, I actually like the bio very much up until... certain parts of the history. While I don't have much of a problem with the parents being killed, Rin and I are very uncomfortable with an element you included the backstory, the line referencing how the killers "had their way" with Marianne. It's not what either of us saw in reference to tone in the RP and the throwaway mention makes both of us uncomfortable. That said, I do not mind the parents having been killed.As for the assassins themselves, I'll need to think more on that.@Sam: Alright, that's fine with Rin and me. Accepted.@GravityFlux: To begin with, his picture is really anachronistic and you don't really comment on it not being what he wears or anything like that. Then, I'm really kind of confused as to why a revolutionary against monarchies would come to Karstberg, which is ruled by a Lord Mayor who answers to a council and is not a monarchy at all really. His backstory seems tonally off from how the RP is intended to be, and both Rin and I are especially confused by the drugs. While there were drugs in the time period this takes place in, there weren't very many and I'm not sure why nobles would be involved in it. This doesn't really fit the setting.As for the magic, it... doesn't fit really either. It's too scientific, for one thing, even though sciences certainly exist electrons aren't exactly something anyone would be aware of. Magic isn't really an inherent ability, either, which is what this seems to be. You can be born good at magic, but you still have to learn how to do it. You'd just get better at it more quickly then others. Magic is freeform, but it's still something that needs to be learned in the setting.
Ah, yes, I was planning on commenting on the pic. I was tired by all that, so I must have forgotten
Also, yeah, drugs= The equivalent
Clothes= He was supposed to wear this:
But I must have forgotten
For the Revolution, I said at the end that he traveled the world, so he only engages in revolutionary activities at some time, so he was just passing by Karstburg. However, when he noted that the city was full of people, it struck him that he could make an organization that would be more international. So, he decided to stay, and start it in Karstburg. Though it'll take a lot of time and money
And finally, the magic. I didn't realize that it wasn't an inherent ability, so lemme go change that. Thats about it. And explanation of it? Well, I tried to explain it in a much more "fantasy" way, but I failed entirely at it, and used the same sci-fiish method of magic explanation that I usually do. It basically lightning manipulation.
Wow, I'm terrible at this all of a sudden. I wonder why I'm doing badly.
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Name:Tiberius Winter
Age: 30
Gender: Male
Race: Human
Appearance:
Profession: Revolutionist
Personality: Tiberius is a rough, cold man with a somewhat contradictory mindset. He is somewhat arrogant, though not extremely, and is very proud of his humanity, although he doesn't have a superiority complex regarding his race. Usually, he's somewhat patient with most people, and is generally decent in his own gruff way even when he doesn't like someone. But he will get very angry if provoked, and that is a sight to see. He absolutely HATES decadence, and believes that nobility and monarchies are flawed.
Equipment/Weapons: He's always got a singlehanded longsword and a disarming knife, usually used together in a dual wield, although he usually never uses them
Abilities: He's a athletic man, with a long stamina and great running speed. He's okay with sword fighting, but mostly depends on his magic, for which he tries to find innovative methods of usability
Brief Backstory: Tiberius Winter, illegitimate son of two high class humans having an affair, Tiberius was always entirely ignored, thought to never exist. His parents took him in, but only so that the rest of the nobility could not use his existence in the constant political war all states go through. He was unloved, and unlike most children in such a cliche position, was alright with it. He wasn't angsty about it, as he had come to hate his parents methods. They were decadent, and cared for nothing other than their own status and food. He, over time, came to not only hate them, but murderously hate their entire lifestyle.
It escalated to such a point that his parent began to become more criminal than politician, which was something that horrified him. He was son and member of a group of CRIMINALS? He, convinced that it was for the greater good, killed them, and burnt their house down. Then, over a span of fifteen years, brought down the corrupt kingship and nobility, and established a democratic socialist country. During this time of upheaval, he began to acquire tools for his now-to-soon-become trade. He learnt the way of magic from a couple of his fellow revolutionists and some books acquired from some foreign merchants, although it was a very small time, and his capabilities were small. But, as time went along, his powers and learning progressed. But even till date, he never learnt full mastery
At the end of the entire road, when he had finally accomplished his job, he could not bring himself to accept the fame that people wished to give him. He believed himself to be unfit to rule in any way, being too cold hearted and active.
He then proceeded to leave his city of birth, and travel around the world, in search of a better place to reside in. Over these travels, he had instigated two revolutions, both of which he left due to his lack of purpose. But when he arrived in Karstburg on a slight vacation, he had an epiphany. Just simply being a tool of the masses in cities was not enough. He decided that he would create an organized international union, something that would finally create a better world, faster, and in a less violent way. He'd make this..... organization, and christen it the "Guild Of Freedom". And its birthplace would be Karstburg, a city he felt to be peaceful and populous, therefore a good starting place for it
Magic Name: Electron Control
Magic Description: The user is capable of controlling the movement and physical make-up of electrons, or for a better, more understandable explanation, control of electricity, and its by-product of the electromagnetic force. He does so by pure force of will and thought, although SOME physical movement is required. This is a relatively easy to create magic, requiring little energy from its user, except to instigate the change, thanks to the abundance of atomic particles (Duh, we're made of them). However, the weird part about this control is the lack of ability to use the electron control to change the fundamental make up of the universe and the actual atoms, thereby making matter conversion impossible.
Alright, I'll be honest. Bios are the thing I hate, mostly. In an RP, I always do terribly on apps, but I can assure you that I RP FAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAR better.
I have a couple of examples at my disposal, which I'd be happy to show if asked of me.
Age: 30
Gender: Male
Race: Human
Appearance:
Thats what he LOOKS like, but he wears: Profession: Revolutionist
Personality: Tiberius is a rough, cold man with a somewhat contradictory mindset. He is somewhat arrogant, though not extremely, and is very proud of his humanity, although he doesn't have a superiority complex regarding his race. Usually, he's somewhat patient with most people, and is generally decent in his own gruff way even when he doesn't like someone. But he will get very angry if provoked, and that is a sight to see. He absolutely HATES decadence, and believes that nobility and monarchies are flawed.
Equipment/Weapons: He's always got a singlehanded longsword and a disarming knife, usually used together in a dual wield, although he usually never uses them
Abilities: He's a athletic man, with a long stamina and great running speed. He's okay with sword fighting, but mostly depends on his magic, for which he tries to find innovative methods of usability
Brief Backstory: Tiberius Winter, illegitimate son of two high class humans having an affair, Tiberius was always entirely ignored, thought to never exist. His parents took him in, but only so that the rest of the nobility could not use his existence in the constant political war all states go through. He was unloved, and unlike most children in such a cliche position, was alright with it. He wasn't angsty about it, as he had come to hate his parents methods. They were decadent, and cared for nothing other than their own status and food. He, over time, came to not only hate them, but murderously hate their entire lifestyle.
It escalated to such a point that his parent began to become more criminal than politician, which was something that horrified him. He was son and member of a group of CRIMINALS? He, convinced that it was for the greater good, killed them, and burnt their house down. Then, over a span of fifteen years, brought down the corrupt kingship and nobility, and established a democratic socialist country. During this time of upheaval, he began to acquire tools for his now-to-soon-become trade. He learnt the way of magic from a couple of his fellow revolutionists and some books acquired from some foreign merchants, although it was a very small time, and his capabilities were small. But, as time went along, his powers and learning progressed. But even till date, he never learnt full mastery
At the end of the entire road, when he had finally accomplished his job, he could not bring himself to accept the fame that people wished to give him. He believed himself to be unfit to rule in any way, being too cold hearted and active.
He then proceeded to leave his city of birth, and travel around the world, in search of a better place to reside in. Over these travels, he had instigated two revolutions, both of which he left due to his lack of purpose. But when he arrived in Karstburg on a slight vacation, he had an epiphany. Just simply being a tool of the masses in cities was not enough. He decided that he would create an organized international union, something that would finally create a better world, faster, and in a less violent way. He'd make this..... organization, and christen it the "Guild Of Freedom". And its birthplace would be Karstburg, a city he felt to be peaceful and populous, therefore a good starting place for it
Magic Name: Electron Control
Magic Description: The user is capable of controlling the movement and physical make-up of electrons, or for a better, more understandable explanation, control of electricity, and its by-product of the electromagnetic force. He does so by pure force of will and thought, although SOME physical movement is required. This is a relatively easy to create magic, requiring little energy from its user, except to instigate the change, thanks to the abundance of atomic particles (Duh, we're made of them). However, the weird part about this control is the lack of ability to use the electron control to change the fundamental make up of the universe and the actual atoms, thereby making matter conversion impossible.
Alright, I'll be honest. Bios are the thing I hate, mostly. In an RP, I always do terribly on apps, but I can assure you that I RP FAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAR better.
I have a couple of examples at my disposal, which I'd be happy to show if asked of me.
RedHounds said
Nice homestuck Dave Strider in knights armor gear avatar :b
Thanks
It took me a while to get around to resizing it though
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I'll get out the magic-types encyclopedia
I'll get out the magic-types encyclopedia
Commander said
Damn that real life. Welcome to the new site.
Thanks!
And yeah, its different now
Kinda weird, but I'll get used to it
Only problem is the fact that I cannot find a good profile pic that is 128x128, and I cannot be bothered to re-size it
Well, its been a long time. Six months, or something?
I used to have an account, but real life got in the way, and then a lot of personal stuff went down.
But now I'm back, RP Guildmates!
And yes, as is customary, the title is not related
I used to have an account, but real life got in the way, and then a lot of personal stuff went down.
But now I'm back, RP Guildmates!
And yes, as is customary, the title is not related
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