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Review of Ariska Namine :

I will keep it in a more summarized version for now.

A. ) A bit strange that they have an ANBU from Takigakure. From what I know and remember is that Kumogakure's influence isn't near that place. Even when she had to leave the place, it would make more sense if she would be from the Frost or Sky country. A small change that would make more sense in my opinion. I will keep my personal opinion on the further history however as I am a bit doubtful about it.

B. ) Just a pet peeve, but what is the affinity? Fire or lightning chakra nature?

C. ) Some extra equipment for het jutsu

Explain this please? What kind of extra equipment?

D. ) Some traits and skills are kind of swapped?
I also am not sure about the heightened senses. Though ANBU are elite shinobi, I kind of think that should be removed or be compromised with lowering the other traits/skills.

E. )

- Hidden: Maito Yoshito (righteous might)

Kind of OP. It all just suggest that it will be a beam that it is capable of dealing massive damage. But how is the lightning generated? How is the attack formed? If it just a beam that is being launched after the streak of handsignals, I want to see more handsignals and a more balanced weakness. Kind of not want to accept a custom technique that is like that. Else I would suggest to look at False Darkness, which is kind of the same idea.

-Chakra Nageru (chakra hurl)

I am not sure if you know, but a blade enhanced by a generic lighting chakra nature, is able to pierce through rock and material like that. To parry it would mean that the person needs to use a chakra flow technique of equal or better power in order to deflect it. I kind of advise to put more thoughts/detail in your custom techniques cause I kind of get the idea that they are rushed.

F. ) The summoning ;

-Fly and high speed? I kind of not accept that. Even for short distances, how far is a ''short'' distance? Fifty meters?

- Dream Weaver, how is the genjutsu cast? Touch, breathing in a fume or what? What does the peacock use to get the person in a genjutsu? And I think that the traditional way of breaking out of her genjutsu is quite possible. Else it would be instantly A or S ranked in my opinion.
- Wind Release: Whirlwind, is Gale windpalm? Why not just put that there?
- Multiple Mirage, weakness? And again : how does the peacock put one in a genjutsu?

I would advise to overlook the CS and edit it to make things more cleared out on how and such.
A crossroads means a decision,
Who will go where?

To the unknown of the dark.

A collab between Alternathan, Lillydove, Roran Hawkins and Alice (and a bit of Chromie. x3 )


Summary:
Team 2 and 7 venture into the old and seem to be abandoned bunker. However, while they walk through the old halls, there seems that they need to make a choice. One that can decide how the mission will go.


Mika Smyth


''Would you please keep on walking?'' Mika asked. She didn't sound that pleased with the guy in front of her looking and staring at people around them. People were hungry. The boy in front of her wasn't that interesting to her as she was more focused on getting something to eat and then settle down at a table. Probably just trying to eat something and make use of the time to not be bothered by others. Cause once back in the cabin, Mika would have to share the space with others, people she didn't know and wasn't genuinely interested in. Still, if she wanted to realize her dream of wanting to become truly independent, she would just have to bite her tongue and do what was needed. If that guy in front of her would just use his legs.
Both look good to me. Accepted.
I am good. Who's turn to post is it? ._.
I kind of want to continue. :C
Kiyomi Sato-Hon
Konohagakure Jounin-sensei of Team 2.
Hokage Apprentice,

The first measurement.


Kiyomi looked over her shoulder. Though she had predicted that Team 7 students weren't going to gain her approval, it seemed they were doing their best to get on her bad side. Narrowing her eyes briefly, Kiyomi took some deep breath. Then a cold sneer was heard over the earphone communicators. ''Listen up. Ezuri, to your spot. You were told to stay in formation at the right with Team 7. Don't fall out of formation or else go home. I can't use those who can't follow orders.'' Kiyomi started. What was the Hyuuga thinking? Shisen was now alone with her ninken at the right side. What if an enemy would attack from that side. Did the newest graduated genins really thought that something like that wouldn't happen cause they were with two teams? Then that ninken barked at Kiyomi. Making more noise than was necessary. Kiyomi would remember it and lecture or flog Kensuke for it. He had always been very strict with her, so why was these students not disciplined as she would expect from him?

It became quite a bothersome travel for Kiyomi. Her students knew better luckily to bother Kiyomi with not listening to orders or making unneeded sounds. The travel itself was composed of many hours and almost no pauze. Not a really a bother to her and Team 2. They were used to be pushed to the limit by Kiyomi. During those small breaks, Kiyomi spend little to no time to Team 7. Kenta was now and then looking around, but he was also very serious. Cause even on small breaks, they were keeping their formation like Kiyomi had ordered.

Only after quite some travel did they managed to reach the location. During the last break, Kiyomi had made her shadow clone give back the earphone communicator so she could keep update Kensuke on where they should keep an eye out for. And then they managed to reach it. Arriving at a place that was quite blocked by vegetation, Kiyomi saw a big hill. With then a dark entrance into it. It looked abandoned, but she had her doubts. If she had to believe the briefing Zakito had given her in secret, then she already knew that it was sealed off from prying eyes. Meaning that Ezuri's eyes were limited. ''Leo and Kenta. You two will guard the entrance until further orders. The rest, we will move in. Stick close and don't complain or make unneeded sound. Those who do, just do me a favor and go outside then. Saves me the trouble to knock you out cold.'' Kiyomi coldly instructed. However, when the group would head to the entrance, Kiyomi whistled to Hayate. Grabbing the hilt of the bandaged sword, Kiyomi reached out to hand over the sentient blade to Hayate. ''For now, you take it.'' The bandaged weapon shivered, but it was only briefly. Like if he was silenced in all of a sudden. ''Ken-senpai, me and Hayate will take the back. You three take the front.''
I smell food? Somebody said meal? Gourmet dinner? ._.
Stop driving me crazy! :C
Mika Smyth


Both of them reacted positive to her friendly greeting. So that was good. Holding true to her act, Mika sighed and looked around with a smile as she placed both her hands on her hip. But before she could even utter a word, it seemed that she wouldn't be given that luxury. They were called to the field for examination. Mika briefly thought that it was some divine intervention to mock her attempts of gaining some foothold or alliances with others. Not that she would give up on her act. ''Seems we are need to go then.'' She friendly stated as she turned, but would try to keep walking next to one of the two girls. It would give her the chance to keep an eye on how the two were. It would take more than just a few moments to decide how each one of them was and reacted.

''So, from which district are you two from?'' Mika asked, sounding very polite and genuinely curious. Not that she was. But it would prove good to know where they came from in order to learn more about them. Knowledge is power after all. And the more knowledge one has, the more dangerous the person becomes.
The planning between the two jounins!
A plan made by Konoha's Green Falcon and Blue Fire!

A collab between Roran (Tummy Cat) and Alice (No Nick :C )


Summary:
Due knowing many of the details of the mission, Kiyomi decides to brief in Kensuke, but in a way that the students won't hear it or able to say anything about it. They also start to formulate a way how they will try to bring success back home.


Kiyomi Sato-Hon,
Konohagakure Jounin-sensei of Team 2,
Hokage-Apprentice.

A briefing of Kiyomi.


''Listen everybody.'' Kiyomi's voice sounded rather stern and cold as she spoke up. She crossed her arms out front of her chest as she had noticed that almost everybody was here. ''Everybody, I will just say this once, so you better listen up. I hate to repeat myself and if I need to, you won't like it. Not at all.'' There was some pressure building up. A literal pressure. It seemed the air itself became heavier, like breathing costed more effort. Kiyomi narrowed her eyes a bit as she would wait. Then the pressure seemed to vanish slowly. Kensuke, Hayate and Leo would likely knew what it had been all too well. Killing Intent and a lot of it.

''The mission we are sent on is going to start once I have started this. So I want everybody to pay attention.'' Kiyomi started. Waiting for another moment, there would be something dropping out of the sky. Right at Kiyomi's flank, some big landed. ''Kenta Kohaku, reporting for duty, Lady Kiyomi-sama!!'' The dust prevented any sign of who had landed behind Kiyomi. Not looking back, her hair was moving due the gust. Luckily he had it in a ponytail, so that she wouldn't be blinded by her own hair. ''Good. Now we are all here.'' Kiyomi said, on a softer tone. The dust settled as it would reveal a big man. He rose up from his crouched stance, easily towering over Kiyomi. ''Everybody...this is-''

Suddenly, Kenta threw off his vest, revealing the muscles that were once covered by it. ''I am Kenta Kohaku, Konoha's Muscle! Remaining member of Team Tun. Specialized Jounin and Lady Kiyomi's protectooooooooorrrr!''



Suddenly, lightning crackled through the air. It was just a few flickers, but the warning was louder than probably the roar of thunder. ''So that means we are all here. Kenta will reinforce the teams as both Team 2 as Team 7 are lacking one member to make a full team. I have also requested him, because I have seen him at work before. But the briefing.'' Kiyomi glanced at the genins. It lasted for a few moments, but the once bright green eyes were dark now. She wasn't going to give anybody a smile or some easy time. Not while they had a very serious mission planned. Not on a mission like this.

''We have been ordered to start a search and investigation at an old bunker. The area around it has been disturbed by what are either bandits or a small group of rogues. This means that we have to work cautiously, as the intel on the possible hostile forces are vague. If it are bandits, I would request that nobody gets too eager.'' Kiyomi turned her focus most on team 7. ''I have heard that even a group of nin has had trouble before with were common bandits. I am not going to accept anybody that falls out of line or doesn't follow up an order.'' The heavy pressure slowly was starting to come back. ''Team 2 has agreed to work and cooperate with Team 7, but as one of the leaders of this mission, I am going to make this as clear as possible. Any idiot that wants to be a hero can sit his or her ass down here. Any kind of scared kitty cat can do that as well. This mission is classified as at lowest a C ranked mission and at highest a B ranked one.'' Pausing, she kept glancing at the genins of Team 7. ''Though Team 2 genins know this all too well, the rules haven't changed. Nobody will fall out of line or act out of orders. Those who will shall be receiving punishment for doing so. Now that is said. We are going.'' Turning around, Kiyomi made a signal with her left hand. Raising it up, she clenched it into a fist. ''Team 2, cover the left. Team 7, cover the right. Kenta, you in between. I will lead the front....'' Kiyomi looked over her shoulder.
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